Book Title: Reaper

Review: Free

Prologue, Chapter 1

I LOVE the cover! Just had to put that here ;D

Prologue:

Damn. Well there's nothing I can say bad about it. I love that it's in first person (YES, YES, YES!) I've been getting really drained reading third person narrations while doing these critiques aha I connect much more to first. 

All throughout this chapter, obviously as a reader I'm wondering what she had done to cause her loved ones to die, but I'm also wondering if she's referring to destiny in a literal sense, like the angel of destiny. I got that impression. 

Now the questions I have. Oh damn I have so many. Is she an angel? Is he (the injured guy) one of her loved ones that she tried to prevent from dying? Did she go against just him or their species? Why were her loved ones destined to die? Why would that angel impact from her choice?

OH THE SUSPENSE.

I really felt the emotion from her. Like the way she was walking towards him slowly, knowing that she was the reason he was like that. And then having to be the one to end his suffering, but having hope that it'd release him from pain. That was such an incredible and powerful piece of writing. 

It really sets the rest of the book up to be an exciting and thrilling read. The lack of dialogue has got me a tad suspicious, let's see if you know your grammar ;-)

Chapter 1

Okay, well you're smarter than me, I had to google what a rapier was haha! #feelingdumb

I was hooked from start to finish. Literally hooked, gone, soaked in, pulled, captivated, blazed, an emotion wreck in some places and confused (for good reasons in other places).

You sold it. Sold. Done.

My question of the chapter: How did she survive being attacked by the Exile? She feared turning into something like them, as though they're infectious, but it wasn't explained how she was cured of it. 

My second question of the chapter: Is this futuristic? It's quite interesting how angels and exiles live among the humans in an understanding way. 

My third question, LOL, of the chapter: Do exiles just roam freely? So can they just turn up at the school? Or are they bound to the outskirts like where Ellie ventured years ago when she was attacked? 

This is so interesting!!! I am genuinely 100% impressed beyond anything with what I have just read. The pacing is so gentle and harmonic, her thoughts are both beautifully emotional and maturely organized. 

You are a writer. A born writer. I felt like I had just started reading a published book from a best-selling author. 

That death angel has me all kinds of curious. I definitely think he's been looking out for her and watching over her since that night, a love is about to blossom maybe? I mean, don't get me wrong, I like Nick and I think he's a sweetheart, but he's a little boring :$ Sam peeked my interest for the most interesting character of all. He hates to lose and he hates to win by default haha! 

So I have my suspicions. I REALLY like to speculate. So my prediction is that, in the prologue, the main character is Ellie and the guy she betrayed is the death angel to try and save her friends from a very powerful exile?

Am I right? :D I'm probably wrong. 

I really enjoyed reading from such a mature mind. Most books that I critique are fast-paced and character-overloaded but Ellie really touched me. Her anxiety about past events and the "incident" touched me further and I wonder if that's why she tries so hard in fencing? Maybe she's trying to subconsciously build herself to be a fighter so that she can defend herself if it ever happened again. 

OMG I'm so excited for this book! Added. Reading. Supporting. 

Sold.

Now for the errors of your chapter. YES, ERRORS.

Do you all know what I'm gonna say? Bet you do. Here it is.

DIALOGUE!!!!!!!!!

Even though the dialogue was, AMAZING, and the character development was aced, the grammar is all kinds of wro-diddy-ng.

Comma with a dialogue tag, period with an action, no capitalization of dialogue tags, capitalization of actions.

Examples:

"I didn't go," he whispered.

"I didn't go." He shook his head.

"I doubt he's got the brains," she laughed.

"I doubt he's got the brains." She bit on her lip. 

Got it? Confused? Let me know!

So she's been attacked by another exile? Holy crap! What if the death angel doesn't get to her in time? What if he does and they meet and they speak and sparks fly and they fall in love and BOOM.

Stop, Kaylee. 

It's such an original and creative plot. I love angel books! 

The Angel series and Fallen series are my all time favorites. And what you've done, which they had done to become successful, is still include humans in your book. Most fantasy stories don't, and as humans we need to connect to humanity still. 

Yeah, I loved it. 

I love Ellie, I think she's a bad-ass in disguise. I can really see her character developing over the book and becoming stronger. There are no improvements I can offer apart from the small corrections of your dialogue grammar.

It was detailed, professional, suspenseful, curious and other-worldly fantastic. 

A book has to really wow me to be added into my favorites, and congratulations, you made the short list!

P.S. Please inform me when you change your username in future, took me all of thirty seconds of deep confusion to realize what had happened during my book club assignments aha thirty seconds are so precious to me :(

Kidding!

Overall Rating: 9/10

Recommended: Did you even read this critique? YES. YES. GO.