Book Title: Unattainable 

Review: Free

Blurb, Prologue 

Blurb:

I love the blurb. It's written neatly, spaced out professionally and contains elements of suspense, thrill, romance and a dooming but explosive plot. The setting is interesting, not many authors are brave enough to delve into prisons, so that's a great idea. I'm intrigued by how "awestruck" this guy is with the woman, and if she returns his affection. Colonizing Pluto is a bit of a stretch, I'd be interested in learning how the human race has adapted their technology and resources to sustain a mission like that. I just hope you've done your scientific research to make it accurate. If so, sounds like a very good book.

Prologue  

The beginning was quite misleading. I, too, thought that he was rejecting having a tattoo, it didn't dawn on me that he was rejecting taking drugs until I re-read it, maybe make that a little clearer aha

I liked the simplicity of it. The hints dropped surrounding Rezon's(love that name by the way) father is suspenseful, what did his father do?! Why would he need to resort to drugs and getting high to forget him?

It was an okay beginning, nothing really happened to make me go "WOW" maybe if you extended it to why the police were there it would be more impacting. Reading this prologue, in all honesty, wouldn't make me wait in anticipation for the rest of the book to come out in summer. (why is that?) 

I would probably forget about it. If you're going to leave a prologue up for months and months, it has to be hooking. Otherwise, what would be the point? Why are you making people wait so long?

If you had other chapters up, I'd be saying something completely different. People are going to read this prologue, which is pretty short in itself, and move on. It's not going to leave a mark, it's not going to blow their minds, so try to make it stand out. Especially the ending. "Idiot Jackson" just doesn't cut it.

In regards to your writing, I can't fault you. Grammar is flawless, pacing is flawless, dialogue is great and your descriptions are beautiful. You can write, girl. The plot sounds epic and a creative science fiction story. I can feel the imagination and the power just from the blurb, I just wish there was more to work with. 

Rezon and Jackson's friendship felt natural and realistic, my only concern with their dialogue was when they kept addressing each other's names. They don't need to keep saying each other's names in almost every dialogue, they know who they're speaking to. 

The whole idea surrounding Pluto is great, I wasn't expecting Rezon to be training to be on the mission too. I liked the cadet parts, I imagined it like they're all in competition with each other aha 

I think it can be expanded on, and made longer, and give it more of an appealing and hooking ending. If you had more chapters, honestly, I would check them out. 

You showed you have talent for writing, and the idea behind the book is genuinely awesome, but there's nothing else that stands out to me at the moment. I hope you get the rest of it uploaded and show the world what they're missing!

Good luck!

Overall Rating: 6/10

Recommended: Yes, when there's more to read.