Book: Einia by ericson119

Reviewer: Kristen | ZeeyWrites

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Title [⅘]

To be frank, I actually didn't know what Einia meant but what it sounds to me as an other-world name. Yes, I do think it fits the context of the book because it is set in a post-apocalyptic setting.

It works with the genre you picked I said earlier it sounds foreign and I was curious to find out about it.

Cover [⅗]

It does look nice because it's a classic white colour and it contrasts nicely with the background (it is dark and the title stands out). Also, the font reminds me of a branding that comes of as ominous.
I do have a problem with the transparency (the intensity of it) of the fire, it sort of looks fake and copy-pasted, it doesn't flow properly with the building. I would have loved that the background would have been more bold but other than that it's spot on.

I would read it because it has this destruction vibe it gives up and so I would be intrigued.

Blurb [5/5]

Now about your blurb, it began with the overused rhetorical question which I see in a lot of books it's either at the end or at the beginning. But in your case, you can remove it completely and it would still make sense.

Your blurb is interesting and I would definitely read it if I had come across it.

Genre [5/5]

The genre is the most suitable for the book from what I've read. It's always some action happening somewhere. There isn't much that needs to be said here.

Originality [8/10]

On this topic, I am not really into much adventure and action but I do enjoy reading them. I haven't seen one like yours and I'm glad it wasn't a knight based book or this group of friends going on a quest or something.

Description [9/10]

Your description is your strongest quality so far, I really love how you made me feel like I was right there. Everything was described so well and I enjoyed it. The fight scenes were the most vivid out of all. I do think you need to describe people more as you mostly focused on the settings and fighting.

Character Development [7/10]

I do like your characters my personal favourite is Klaus; he is the embodiment of cute & ignorant and he is funny. And I love the teamwork and friendship between Klaus, Jade and Lux. I do think we get to see the friendship between them also they remain unchanging in their normal character/personality and not switch personalities mid-conversation.

Plot [7/10]

Note: I read up till half of chapter 3. The chapters are incredibly long.

Now I think your plot was sluggish; chapter 1 was very much okay but chapter 2 was long drawn out. It took a long time to read. Overall I think the plot is good and very eventful and everything very detailed.

Grammar [14/15]

Now, I'm not the reviewer you should be looking for when it comes to grammar and spell checks and the likes. But I didn't see any mistakes that disrupted my reading. Your tenses were used correctly and didn't change throughout.

Structure [⅗]

Your dialogues are an exception to this because this is written in script form but I recommend telling people beforehand as not a lot of people check the tags. Also there is a huge problem I noticed with your description paragraph, you just put a whole block of description a lot of people would turn away. If you could separate them into paragraphs it would be much better.

And you have a problem with your chapter being too long, an average chapter is usually between 1500-2000 words. You could break them up into shorter chapter because no one likes an overly long chapter(s).

Vocabulary [9/10]

Yes, your vocabulary is rich and broad. You use the synonyms of words and not using them over and over again. I can't really say much on dialogue tags as it wasn't written in the traditional book style. Also, I say nothing wrong with your spelling.

Overall Enjoyment [6/10]

I did enjoy it but apart from the long blocks of description and long chapter, I saw nothing wrong in the book. Also, I have never read an RPG book before so it was interesting and you did a good job in making me like it. Overall, there are just a few errors here and there.

[ Total: 80/100 ]