Book: Blood Moon by Nefelibatas_world 

Reviewer: wOt_iS_tHiS_LiFe 

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Title [4/5]

The title works well once you get a little farther into the book, however at the very beginning it doesn't make much sense. The "moon" part of the title does hint at the werewolf genre, but doesn't completely show it.

Cover [3/5]

While I do like the cover, for a werewolf book I'd feel like blue and silver would go better in that sense. The cover does match the title, although the darkness of the moon makes it a little hard to see the wolf in detail. Other than that, it does look very nice, and matches well with the title.

Blurb/Synopsis [3/5]

I like the way you have the two quotes from the characters in the blurb, but that seems to share the most about the story. The part after it is quite simple. Overall, the blurb doesn't really share much about the story, and I feel it should probably have more intel on the story.

It says "A story brimmed with mystery..." So I feel that the blurb should indicate that mystery and intrigue when you read it.

Genre [4/5]

For the genres you listed (fan fiction, werewolf, vampire, fantasy) the book seems to fit those genres very well. Fan fiction is pretty obvious, since it's about a kpop idol, and the fantasy and werewolf is introduced right away. However , I don't see the vampire part of it close to the beginning, at least from what I've seen so far.

Originality [7/10]

The story, once you read the backstory parts, is quite original, at least from what I've read. However, there are always parts of werewolf stories that seem to be the same, like how the male is often one of the powerful ones. I like that you have the female character also in a position of power, at least somewhat, and I definitely think the backstories add to the originality. Especially with the way that the part where it flashes back to the births, it's completely unique from anything I've ever read. I do want to mention that main characters often do have something different about them, so that's definitely not completely different, but I'm not docking pints for that because I have yet to find a book with a completely average main character.

Descriptions [9/10]

I absolutely LOVE the descriptions in this book!! I'm definitely a sucker for descriptions, if a book has good descriptions I'm jumping for joy! I really liked the way you compared the two in the first chapter, it was a very interesting way of describing them, having them described kind of in comparison to each other, and just the way it was worded was so so awesome!! I would suggest describing the surroundings a bit more though, like when they're at the other clan's place for the celebration, it would've been nice to get the area described.

Character Development [6.5/10]

There isn't too much said about the actual character traits of the two main characters right off the bat, so I would suggest incorporating that into the compared descriptions. I did like the way you sort of gave character traits during the flashback at their births, but it was small. Some of the other characters, however, did get some descriptions for their personality and whatnot, especially the parents during the flashback, so nice job on that! I would definitely recommend adding a bit of personality description during the comparison in chapter one though!!

Plot [8/10]

So far the plot seems to be perfectly fine, I'm not really seeing any holes, and the flashbacks definitely help get an idea of what's sorta going on from before the characters are living, and helps build up some interest. However what I did notice, is that in the blurb it said something about being a mystery and other suspenseful things, but none of that is hinted at much within the first few chapters, so it sorta drags on a bit. Other than that, the plot looks fine!!

Grammar [14/15]

Overall, your grammar was great!! There was the occasional time I noticed that there was the word "a" Where it should have been "an" but we all make mistakes. Other than that, the grammar seems almost perfect!

Structure [4/5]

The structure looked pretty good from what I can tell!! You started new paragraphs when there was dialogue, and there wasn't too much description in one paragraph. I do have two suggestions though:

1- "Grabbing the pearls embroidered edges of the curtains, maids flung them open, making bright rays of sunlight flood into the room, painting the colors anew."

While this is a good sentence, I have a few things I'd change about it, like the order and take off unnecessary bits, or just change them up a bit.

Eg: "Grabbing the edges of the pearl embroidered curtains, the maids flung open the drapes, allowing bright rays of sunlight to flood into the room, painting the room in a golden hue."

2- "Everything comes with a price... That's written to be paid... Sometimes by love and sometimes by... BLOOD!"

The way this section was written is actually really cool!! But, the whole area seemed to be a sort of eerie calm mood that was being set, and the way "blood" was added didn't really fit.

I'd suggest changing it like this: "Everything has a price... That's written to be paid... Sometimes by love and sometimes by... blood."

If you kept it simple like that, it still stands out, but at the same time it still flows with the parts before it.

Spelling/Vocabulary [10/10]

Can I just say... the vocabulary on this was absolutely wonderful!! You used so many descriptive words and didn't often repeat!! I also didn't notice any spelling errors, and my brain almost always picks those out! Great job on that part!

Overall Enjoyment [8/10]

I really did enjoy reading this!! Like I said, I'm a huge sucker for good descriptions, so this made me sooo happy!! There were a few things that could use work, but the way you have worded things in your story draws me in as a reader and I absolutely loved it!! I think your story really does captivate readers with the way you describe things allowing someone to picture it in their mind!! I definitely think that the blurb could use the most work, but other than that, this was a great story.

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Total: [80.5/100]