Book: The Aftermath by LynaForge 

Reviewer: winnie_loves_honey

Chapters 1-5

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Title [5/5]

Your title is perfect! It's very apocalyptic, and I love the subtitle on your cover too!

Cover [5/5]

Your cover is beautifulllll. Also, fair warning, this review is going to be relatively informal since it appears I'll just be gushing the whole time.

Blurb/Synopsis [5/5]

Ahhhh your blurb is so intriguing! The only thing is that in the second paragraph, I think it should be "werewolves' reign" instead of "werewolf's reign".

Genre [5/5]

Definitely fantasy!

Originality [10/10]

It's incredibly original, and I've never read anything like it!

Description [10/10]

I especially love the way you describe the characters!

Character Development [10/10]

I adore Trixie. Her character, while amazingly chaotic, is caring and kind to the vampires, especially Slade and Manny.

All good things to say about Slade and Eli.

Plot [9/10]

The first five paragraphs absolutely hooked me- and then so did the whole first chapter. I love the detail of the vampire bus routes only being available during the day. Also, the way the first chapter ended was perfect.

In the first chapter, the part where Slade referred to herself in third person confused me for a second. I'm also slightly confused about why \ Mr. Marrow (nice name choice btw) let Manny feed on the woman Fae. To my understanding, they were here to collect rabbit teeth anyway, so why offer the blood? But I know Manny needed the blood and so did Slade. But then it appears they went to the police and filed a report despite offering it, and it all seems to make sense now. It was a setup, wasn't it?

Chapter Two:

I'm a little confused about the second voice when Eli is showing the video. I at first thought it was Slade in the video, but now I know it's some other woman. I'm also not entirely sure how Slade didn't have control over her body, nor what took over her while she was watching the video. But was the woman in the video the woman from Chapter One or was that a different scenario?

I totally ship Slade and Eli though hehe.

Oh my goodnesssss the gorilla at the end of Chapter Four ahhhh I love it. And then Chapter Five killed me. Slade's heart absolutely killed me. And then I died all over again when Margarite saved her baby by exposing the vampires. And then resurrected to panic at the very end of the chapter when Eli and Slade might have been found.

I'm sorry I could only read five chapters, but I love your book. I'll definitely return eventually to finish reading it.

Grammar [15/15]

Perfect. I have nothing to say.

Structure [5/5]

*insert compliment here*

Vocabulary/Spelling [10/10]

All the different supernatural/fantasy characters gets a little confusing, but if I were less tired, I would definitely be able to understand it better.

There was one spelling error in Chapter Three where you write "crowed" instead of "crowd".

Overall Enjoyment [10/10]

Amazing, incredible, wonderful. I pretty much only read five chapters for every review, but yours is probably the longest by word count. However, this is the shortest review I've ever written because I have nothing but good things to say.

[ Total: 99/100 ]