Book: Life Of A Spy by Skippy_Writer 

Reviewer: ShyBananaMuffin

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☆Title: 5/5

☆Genre: 5/5

☆Cover: 5/5

Your cover looks really good!

☆Blurb: 3/5

Blurb is definitely lacking. It doesn't pull me in nor does it give me that desire to read your story.

☆Description: 7/10

Let's describe characters a bit more and let's also use more descriptive words (especially in the 1st chapter).

☆Originality: 6/10

It's unique in regards to the MC being a spy, but the other aspects of the story are cliché and almost predictable.

☆Plot: 4/10

So, there's an evident plot, but it's very weak. You also lack subplots.

☆Character Development: 4/10

Your characters lack individuality and depth. They don't have a distinct voice and their tone of speech almost sounds robotic.

☆Grammar/Punctuation: 5/10

There are punctuation mistakes as well as grammatical errors. You've misspelled some words and there seems to be a few run-on sentences. Also, you say "coz" a lot in the first chapter. That's texting grammar, not book grammar!!

☆Vocabulary: 7/10

There's repetition of words. Your vocab is good in some areas while in others it's lacking.

☆Structure: 6/10

Some sentence structure could use some work. There is a lack of flow and smoothness in your chapters.

☆Overall Enjoyment: 4/10

Alright, well your story has a lot of potential. However, there are a lot of things that I feel you need to work on. I can see that you've planned out the story-line and events, but there are just some things that don't make sense for me.

For example, our MC has no money because her parent's wealth was given to her aunt. How is our MC still living at the house? She's unable to pay the bills so shouldn't the house be claimed by a bank or something? That part just confused me.

Also, the MC is so worried about college. Like, she just lost her parents and all that she can think about is how she has no money to afford college... sis, you have no money to afford anything. In my opinion, college should be the least of her worries. Since she wants to go to college THAT badly, there are many resources available to low-income students such as scholarships, grants, and loans. Also, FAFSA is a big one that many students apply for.

Anyways, back to her parents. Our MC just lost them. I'm confused as to how she's ok. Like, as a reader, I'm unable to feel that emotional aspect because you don't allow that. Losing someone, especially both parents, is something very traumatic and hard to get through. Not to mention, our MC's friends are not supportive at all. Nick calls and says "I heard about your parents. It sucks that you won't be joining us this semester. See ya during the holidays!'' (I'm paraphrasing, but you get the point). I'm just baffled because they show no remorse for our girl. So, your characters are lacking SUPER hard.

Moving on, MC gets a random call to meet a stranger at some weird place for a job. OK, I get that she's desperate for work and all, but she's really naive to just show up at that place period. I mean, what if they were kidnappers or something? Stranger danger does not ring a bell obviously.

Also, let's be honest, even though her mother was a spy, I doubt that she'd get the job right away. If that boss guy values confidentiality, I think he wouldn't just tell her about his secret business so openly and boldly trust that she won't tell anyone else. Like, he doesn't even know her and nor does she know him. That part was just a bit too fast for me.

Due to the lack of realism in this piece, I was not able to connect with your story at all. So, work on strengthening your plot, making your characters and events more realistic, and create subplots. Overall, you did an ok job. Thanks for choosing me as your reviewer. I hope I was able to help (and I hope I wasn't too harsh)!