Book: Cold Brew by notzalayell

Reviewer: ShyBananaMuffin

------------

☆Title: 3/5

In my eyes, the title and story have no correlation. Then again, I've only read 5 chapters.

☆Genre: 5/5

☆Cover: 5/5

☆Blurb: 3/5

Blurb is definitely lacking. It doesn't pull me in nor does it give me that desire to start reading.

☆Description: 7/10

Good use of descriptive words.

☆Originality: 4/10

Despite the fact that the MC is co captain of the hockey team, this is a cliché story.

☆Plot: 3/10

Honestly, I don't really know what the plot is.

☆Character Development: 5/10

Characterization is lacking. Your characters lack individuality and depth. They feel very 2-dimensional and predictable.

☆Grammar/Punctuation: 6/10

There are punctuation mistakes and some run-on sentences.

☆Vocabulary: 7/10

I'd recommend increasing your lexicon.

☆Structure: 7/10

Some sentence structure could use some work. The flow is also lacking.

☆Overall Enjoyment: 6/10

There is potential in your story. There's just a lot that needs to be worked on. I think you should create a main plot, but also include subplots. Create a story line of events from beginning, middle, and end.

The romance feels too rushed. Give the readers time to fall for your MLI too.

Also, your book feels super cliché. I feel like I can predict what happens next before it even happens. I was bored reading some parts.

Your MC sounds like one of those "pick me" girls. I'm not sure if you intended this, but that could be a flaw in her character which I like.

Also, show, don't tell. You have a habit of telling the readers about a character. Like the MC said she's oblivious. Don't tell us that. Show us that. Let us (the readers) come to that realization ourselves.

Overall, you did an ok job. Thanks for choosing me as your reviewer. I hope my input was able to help you.