Book: Sun & Moon by ranixhan

Reviewer: Anubis_Styx

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Title [4/5] 

I love the title! I think it's very beautiful but isn't totally unique, but either way! I LOVE IT!

Cover [4/5] 

I think the cover is a bit blurry which takes the overall shine from it, but other than that, it's pretty! It fits well with the story and the title! 

Blurb/Synopsis [2/5] 

Your blurb started out so good, but when I got to the second paragraph, I just cringed. You changed person's AND THAT IS A BIG NO-NO. Moreover, you said, "But of course-there's a twist! How will our protagonist's..." NO! No, no, no! What happened?!?!?! How did you go from a great first paragraph to a second paragraph that makes me want to run for the hills? If you can somehow fix the second paragraph to match the first you will be good! 

Genre [5/5] 

Nice fit to the genre! 

Originality [10/10] 

Very unique! (Yet still cliché) I've never read a book like this so that's good (I read a lot of books on WP), congrats! 

Description [8/10] 

You have average descriptions, but overall good! 

Character Development [9/10] 

Your characters are developed nicely! 

Plot [10/10] 

I didn't find and plot holes, your pacing is good, and overall it a unique plot. 

Grammar [10/15] 

The only kind of grammar mistakes you have is the overwhelming amount of commas! You don't need a pause every 3 words! 

Structure [5/5] 

You have decent structure, overall it's good. 

Vocabulary/Spelling [10/10] 

You have no trouble with your spelling and vocabulary as far as I can see! 

Overall Enjoyment [9/10] 

I'd keep reading, I enjoyed it! 

[ Total: 86/100 ]