You are the One for Me - MineForever6 

Reviewer - creative_maverick_Mo 

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Title [2.5/5]

I found the title of your book very electric and appealing. I also think the title of the book went well with the storyline you were trying to portray but not so well with the actual storyline you published. When I read your title, I thought it was going to be a book about electrifying or adult romance but it wasn't. Your story telling was good, it just wasn't as electrifying as the title.

Cover [3/5]

I think your cover was pretty basic. The background was cute but the font was not very clear. Personally, I think you should change the background all together because that background is quite common. I think a book cover with a high-resolution background where we can actually see the people on it will be perfect! Or you can just change the background from something black to a more interesting colour to give your book a more appealing vibe. Your choice!

Blurb [2/5]

Your blurb was pretty boring. It didn't really make me want to read the book. I get that you wanted to incorporate the title of your book into the description but the part where you said "Jana and Noah are in search of 'The one for me'" was not necessary at all because you had said earlier that both characters were in the 11th grade. How can 11th grade students be looking for 'the one'?

Genre [5/5]

Your genre was perfect! The book was romantic and sweet so I gave you full marks in that department!

Originality [4/10]

Your plot was a bit cliché and boring to me. I think you should add your own twist too it so as to make it stand out! Now, if you are going to go with the romantic perspective I think you should make your characters older so that your plot will be more believable. Also, your storyline was a bit too fabricated. At some point I felt disconnected from your book. I mean in reality Serah and Jana couldn't have hit it off like that. They would end up being friends and then best friends but Serah isn't going to just be Jana's friend out of the blue. True friendship takes time. I think you should slow down the pace of their friendship and add more realistic elements to it.

Also, the part where Serah drags Jana away from Alex and says "don't ever think she'll fall for you" is a bit too unnecessary. The whole chapter was a tad bit too dramatic. I love drama (I mean me kind of watch KUWTK for a living) but that was bit too much.

Description [5/10]

Your description still needs a lot of work. The dialogue was good but your description didn't really follow suit. Descriptions help to give the reader a valid and detailed explanation of what is going on in a particular scene so I think you should still work on that aspect.

Structure [3/5]

I was a little confused in the beginning with your writing style. I didn't fully understand and I think you should work on that because it is the first thing that tends to put readers off because they wouldn't understand the story you're trying to tell. Also, when you are writing in a particular point of view you should stick to that point of view. For example, in chapter 5 where you started writing in Noah's point of view I was confused because it felt more like you were talking in Jana's point of view. Your plot was a bit rushed and that hindered the flow of your story so I think you should let the characters develop at their own pace. That would give you room to better develop and describe your characters and it would give the readers room to digest the story.

Vocabulary/Spelling [5/10]

Your spellings were spot on however your grammar and your vocabulary were poor. I think you should contract an editor to help you with the book because I noticed that in some parts of the book, you had really good ideas that you wanted to convey but they just didn't really come out right because of your misuse of vocabulary. I'm sure there are so many on Wattpad that would love to help with that! I also didn't understand why you were putting the cuss words in quotation marks. That was unnecessary but still it's nothing a good editor can't fix.

Overall Enjoyment [5/10]

Overall, you had a good story but I wouldn't say I really enjoyed your book. However, if you pay attention to the corrections I made and got a good editor to work on it your book will be amazing.