Realms of Magic: Demon Invasion - daniellie802

Reviewer - cwang1

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Title [5/5]

Interesting! It's a bit long but it definitely draws me into the book and I find it amazing.

Cover: [3.25/5]

I really like the picture that you used. It definitely gives me a magical vibe, but I would suggest making the title at the bottom a different color. I know that you probably wanted to stick with the same color theme, but it is quite hard to see the title, and it should be clearly visible.

Blurb: [4/5]

Wow! You definitely ended the blurb with a bang. There are only a couple of things I would consider modifying. Firstly, I would suggest using words like "but" to create more of an impact on your reader. For example, you could say "but not for Violleta Vonville." Additionally, you could perhaps try to make your writing a bit more concise. Other than that, I loved the content!

Genre: [5/5]

Amazing!

Originality: [10/10]

This book is definitely very original - I haven't seen any like it. Though it does somewhat remind me of Harry Potter (lol), it's definitely original.

Description: [6.5/10]

You didn't have very much description, and even when you did, it was pretty choppy and not very descriptive. I would recommend making sure that your reader could clearly picture each scene that you had in the book.

Character Development: [9/10]

You were definitely great at portraying the emotions of the characters and how they changed over time. The only thing I would recommend is to describe the appearances of the characters a bit more, making sure that the readers know everything they need to about them.

Plot: [9.5/10]

Very interesting! I loved how you incorporated many different subplots and elements into your book. Good job! I also really liked the dialogue.

Grammar: [12/15]

Your grammar is pretty good, but I would recommend making your sentence structure a bit more smooth. Make sure that your sentences aren't choppy, and also try to vary and switch up your sentence structure. Other than that, your grammar was pretty good and I couldn't find many mistakes.

Structure: [5/5]

Your structure was amazing! I loved how you used the structure to help to emphasize certain words.

Vocabulary/Spelling: [7.5/10]

Your vocabulary was a bit basic, so I would recommend throwing in some more unique words. This would also help to boost your vocabulary. Other than that, good job with your spelling.

Overall Enjoyment: [8/10]

Overall, I would just suggest working on some of the smaller details. You had an amazing concept!