SHS - _Baby_A_A_ 

Reviewer - Anubis_Styx 

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Title: [4/5] 

The first thing is that in your title you have the word, 'stealer.' It is fine if you would like to keep this but the correct word to use would be 'thief.' Other than this, your title works with the genre as well as it fits the book! 

Cover: [1/5] 

There is something off about your cover. Between the women, the two places you have the name, another possible 'name,' and your username, there is too much going on. I think the women matches the title so keep that, but almost everything on the cover isn't attractive, which causes the overall result to be unattractive. If I saw this cover, I wouldn't read it. I'd advise removing 'the trio' and the second 'SHS' with the circle behind it. In addition, choose a different color scheme because the one you have isn't working.

Blurb/Synopsis: [3/5] 

If I were to read this blurb, I would continue to the book. Although is does have some minor grammatical errors. It portrays your story as interesting but not intriguing nor does is show a strong sense of excitement. 

 Genre: [5/5] 

The characteristics in your book fit the genre! But I'd be more specific so it's identifiably easier to see. 

Originality: [10/10] 

I personally think this book is unique. The storyline isn't like anything I've seen in Wattpad. The way you write and the scenes in your book remind me more of a movie than another book. Like maybe an off-brand bond theme. So I believe u are good with that!

Description: [6/10] 

You have descriptions there but they're not very well written, and there aren't enough there to really make a difference. You also have a lot of repetitive descriptions such as, "Josephine sighed loudly and looked around her room, her very boring room. White, her room was white. Almost everything in her room was white, the walls, bed sheet, closet, dressing table and even the door." You could rearrange this description so it sounds better and not repetitive. For example, "Josephine sighed loudly and looked around her room, her very boring room. The walls, closet, dressing table, bed sheets, and even the door, were all white." 

Character Development: [10/10] 

Your characters aren't unique and I can't tell if they evolve based on the published chapters. The main girls are your typical 'bad girls/ girls with bad pasts.' Although you don't suddenly change their personalities so that's good. Some things to think about, Why do they act like this? (this can help you show more uniqueness in their personalities.) How does this affect their decisions?

Plot [10/10] 

Your plot is fine, there aren't any holes and there aren't many curveballs that affects the plotline! (This means that there aren't any curveballs that don't match up with what you have previously said.) 

Grammar: [10/15] 

You need to take a closer look at your grammar before publishing. You have many errors throughout the entire story. It's honestly just simple mistakes! (Misplaced punctuation, words, rephrasing needed in some places, etc.) 

Structure: [5/5] 

Your dialogue and description paragraphs are broken correctly! 

Vocabulary/Spelling: [10/10] 

I haven't seen any misspelled words but you don't have an advanced vocabulary. You tend to use the simpler version of words throughout. You have so many dialogue tags, and you repeat their names over and over but that may just be because you're writing in 3rd person.

Overall Enjoyment: [6/10] 

I personally would not continue reading! I'm sorry! 

Total: [80/100]