Reviewer: papersxpen 

A World So Dark and Deadly: kennedyrrrr3 

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(-MIGHT CONTAIN SPOILERS-)

(some things might come of bland and straight leading to hurt certain emotions, if they do i apologize prior to that)

(i am sorry for this much delay...i was caught up in some other activity, if you can try to understand...)

TITLE- 4/5

title is nice. this was the short part. lets dig in, the title is a bit lengthy but also catch. it gives a picture of a crushed and crumpled world and the world where dreams have died and are gasping for dreamers to dream in hopes for their survival. its solid. but as a suggestion i would like you to consider replacing "so dark and deadly" with something one word type, probably a synonym. you could keep a heavy word people don't know the meaning of because that would play an intriguing factor, but its totally up to you.

COVER- 3.5/5

so i have noticed that you have changed the cover quite some times after you signed me to review your book. the current one is only slightly attractive. i don't find that characteristic your book content has. the two before that were better according to me. of the two the earlier one aptly fitted the title and the theme. the latter one was a modernized version and that suited too. but the current one only partially appeals to me.

BLURB- 4/5

the blurb is decent. however i would have liked if you had described about as to what is the 'unzoned'. you are introducing a new concept and you should be clever enough to let them know the meaning and at the same time not revealing too much too. your blurb kind of contain too much of mystery that i almost would have passed, but your cover and title lured me.

GENRE- 4/5

genre action/adventure seems too broad, however it fits nicely. i might consider choosing some other genre if possible but this works too, so don't worry.

ORIGINALITY- 9/10

well the story didn't go so far so i don't have much to judge for the originality. but since it is set in future, the author does get the liberty to create their own world, and seem to like yours. it is similar as to what others write but as always amusing o read.

DESCRIPTION- 8.5/10

the description is also good. however something felt a bit odd. your sentences seemed concise, but were also enough and good. they seem short and brief, but I don't have any major complaint as such.

CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT- 9.5/10

the character development is nice. i like it. they dont seem to change abruptly and they are maintaining a smooth pace.

PLOT- 9.5/10

the blurb and the beginning chapters give me a feeling it might go n a very nice direction. apart from that, there wasn't enough to make me comment more.

GRAMMAR- 15/15

i will only let the grade speak for themselves

STRUCTURE- 5/5

the structure is well crafted.

VOCABULARY- 4.5/5

you haven't used much different words but your writing is still attractive. it tends to give proper material reader might want in order to proceed. nothing more nothing less. however you might wanna make it more interactive. they seem too robotic and nonchalant for some reason i cant figure out.

OVERALL ENJOYMENT- 9/10

it was a good read. i would surely prefer to read more, since you left off at a beautiful cliff hanger. also i loved your prologue, it gave me a roller-coaster ride. and yay!

TOTAL- 85.5/100