Reviewer: papersxpen 

Inception of Doom: Kattyfish03 

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(-MIGHT CONTAIN SPOILERS-) 

(some things might come of bland and straight leading to hurt certain emotions, if they do i apologize prior to that) 

TITLE- 5/5 

the title perfectly fits the theme and idea of the story, and i suppose the rating speaks for itself. 

COVER- 5/5 

the cover is hilarious! i so love it! the font the background image, everything is just *chef's kiss*

BLURB- 4.5/5 

blurb is amazing too! but i supposed it is a little bit lengthy, just a teeny-tiny bit. readers would want to have a short idea about the story real quick and so perhaps you could shorten the introductory paragraph. it' not a problem though, either way would work. after all you won for the blurb itself. also i would like you to re-check your blurb for mistakes, grammar, vocabulary just in case. all in all i would be down for reading this book after the blurb, it was attractive enough! 

GENRE- 4.5/5 

the genre mystery doesn't fit much out of mystery and thriller, the latter surely does. i suppose it belong to a criminal-type genre so you might wanna reconsider that.  

ORIGINALITY- 9/10 

the idea of the story is not much common but neither is rare so that is a good thing. this is not a mafia book and also not an everyday cliche thriller novel and i guess that's what makes it unique. sure the concept of kidnapping is common but what lies ahead of that is unique and that's what is fascinating. 

DESCRIPTION- 9/10 

the description is appropriate and enough or me to have a picture of the world you wanted to create. however, you might wanna add a certain bit more details or adjectives for your location and setting. for example you could have made the location of the crime scene more clear and also described the living room with better describing words. otherwise else was fine. 

CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT- 9/10 

the protagonists and antagonists are a little bit cliched but have their own uniqueness too. They do remain same and are not changing suddenly for the aake of it and that is great. There Wasn't much of character development so far but I'm sure that aspect would be executed properly.

PLOT- 9/10 

The plot was a logical one indeed. However there were some instances for which felt a little too over. It felt too much when Blake killed the professor. It felt that was assertion of power too much. Sure you wanted to portray his strength and hold over things, but I suppose you could have been a little more logical and milder there. 

GRAMMAR- 15/15 

the grammar was nice. I have nothing constructive to add here. 

STRUCTURE- 5/5 The dialogues were a little bit unrealistic. Try to make them a little more life-like amd real. Also you could try and alter the descriptions where blake flirts with mel, that seems a tad bit dramatic. Apart from that everything was good. 

VOCABULARY- 5/5 

Vocabulary was perfect. 

OVERALL ENJOYMENT- 9.5/10 

I had great fun reading your work. There minor flaws which you could take care of. Apart from thay al was good. The flow, the dialogus, and everything. I would surely like to read what is ahead of till what you wrote. It was a great piece! All the best for whatever you have in the future! Good luck! 

 TOTAL- 89.5 /100