Reviewer: scrabblepost 

Komoreby: SuVida777 

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Title: 4/5

It's the name of the place and perfect for the story, but as such doesn't give a hint (since readers don't know what Komoreby is) about the story. Maybe a subtitle or tagline would help it understand better.

Cover: 4/5

The cover is lovely, but doesn't scream sci-fi. It looks like a YA novel. And it is ya sci-fi, but the sci-fi part is lacking.

Blurb: 4/5

In the opening of blurb the use of pronoun instead of character name seems a little confusing. Apart from that it is perfect.

And for just me(people who don't like romance) the line was off-putting. I would have picked the book and put it back just because of it. But not a lot of people will be bothered by it.

Genre: 4/5

It felt more just YA and didn't have that much sci-fi element in the first two chapters.

Descriptions: 10/10

Everything is described perfectly from scenic descriptions to character to places. The use of all the senses in storytelling is amazing.

Dialogues: 10/10

Very realistic dialogues. I can totally see teenagers talk like that. None of the dialogues seemed forced or just for humour. The punctuations were perfect except a few comma slips here and there, probably typos.

Plot: 8/10

The opening is so strong. You had me hooked right from the first paragraph of the prologue. Though it sinks a little in the first chapter as it seems like just a YA novel and the main story does not kick in. After chapter three the plot becomes interesting and hooks set it with suspense and tension.

Grammar and structure: 19.5/20

The grammar is almost perfect. Just a few suggestions.

Don't forget the bracketing commas around the name of the person during introduction.

Ex: ...her mom Mary and her aunt Janet.

Edit: ...her mom, Mary, and her aunt, Janet.

If you are using ellipses don't capitalise the next word if it's not a part of a new sentence. Or if it's part of a new sentence then use four dots.

Ex:

Oh...So, we are going to Oleanda's place, right?

Edit: "Oh...so, we are going to Oleanda's place, right?"

Or

"Oh.... So, we are going to Oleanda's place, right?"

Vocabulary and spellings: 10/10

Lovely vocabulary. Just try not to use Okay so much. It's such a basic word that it's repetition is noticeable.

Also, try not to write all caps OK it seemed like character's were yelling. Okay spelled out completely will do or in lowercase ok, alright, fine can also be used.

Flow and pace: 9/10

The flow is really good, but it seemed as though a lot of things happened in too little time in chapter three. From particle accelerator to class then cafeteria then home. Though the main story didn't kick in till chapter four it didn't seem slow because of the character development in the chapters. There's a lot of information to take in chapter five. If you space it out in multiple chapters it will be easy to grasp it. Just an advice, try not to end a chapter/scene with characters going to bed.

Overall Enjoyment: 8/10

Only because I don't enjoy YA and the sci-fi part didn't start till chapter three I didn't enjoy the first two chapters. After that it got interesting for me. But even the YA part is written beautifully.

Total: 90.5/100

Final thoughts:

Though I don't enjoy YA this one is exceptional. Despite the cliché of life swapping and pretty girl is always mean. It is written so beautifully that the genre not being among my favourites didn't matter nor did the clichés. Amazing.