Reviewer: notyourwitch_ 

Dofia Forever: oofchicken896 

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Title: [2/5]

The title tells you what to expect with the main leads, but it doesn't really speak about the story. Besides that, it also feels extremely cliché. I would suggest taking sometime with the plot and finding a name that speaks a bit about the plot.

Cover: [1/5]

The cover is not professional, it's more of a collage, and it doesn't do its work of attracting the readers. The name of the book is not visible, at all, and there's a 'Add a heading' line present as well, which makes it feel not that great. I would suggest going to a Wattpad graphic shop for this and getting a cover made from there. Their work would be more professional and attract the readers.

Blurb/Synopsis: [1/5]

The blurb does tell me a little bit about the story, however, it doesn't really attract me to the book. It doesn't tell me anything about the exact plot, and is extremely short. Coronavirus is misspelled, and will has been capitalized for no reason, and there's a period missing in the end. There's an extra space or two between Sofia and 's. A blurb is generally longer, and preferably shouldn't start from 'where'.

Genre: [5/5]

Yes, it is a fanfiction, there's nothing for me to add here.

Originality: [5/10]

It is as original as a fanfiction can be, and honestly, there's not much for me to say here.

Description: [3/10]

The descriptions were not on point, and weren't very helpful either. I would suggest you add some, in a more descriptive way.

Character Development: [4/10]

The meet the cast chapter made me totally confused on who is who, and how they're related to each other. I would suggest revisiting that part and writing it again to clear things up. I would suggest picking up some more realistic people for the original characters, to make them look real.

Plot [2/10]

All the point of views were so clamped up, it made the reading clarity go down. It made it feel like several different plots that are put up in one book. In the first chapter, right underneath Sofia's pov, there's a picture of Dove, which is totally unnecessary and makes the chapter look more bulky, and unprofessional. I honestly didn't understand who was speaking what, and what they were talking about in the book. It was just super confusing.
Grammar: [4/15]

Periods, commas, etc. are missing throughout the book, especially in the first meet the cast chapter, where you need to add them between the names of the people and how they are related. In other places, they were extra, and totally not needed. Dialogues in the end are usually better if they have a punctuation in the end. It adds a lot of clarity, and there shouldn't be any space between the ending of a dialouge and the quotation mark.

Structure: [2/5]

The chapters are named on the point of views of the people, however, I would suggest you mark them as Chapter 1, Chapter 2, Chapter 3 and so on. It makes the book look much more neater. In many places words have been capitalized for no reason. I would suggest rechecking them and changing them, or having an editor correct them. The dialogues don't feel realistic, it makes everything seem beyond formal, and not how parents would talk to their kids. Everything felt like it was put in one paragraph, when it could have been in separate ones, and dialogue tags weren't in place. Once again, with an editor, this problem wouldn't be there.

Vocabulary/Spelling: [2.5/10]

The words used were not at par with what we use. It felt like they were texting and not chatting. We usually don't use 'wdy' in real life, we ask full questions. The whole thing felt like one sentence and I know I said this about a dozen times now, but it just made it super bulky, and not as nice to read. Words at the start of a dialogue need to be capitalized, which they were not.

Overall Enjoyment: [2.5/10]

I would have enjoyed it in I actually understood everything, and got it, and if the above mistakes weren't noticed.