Mi Amor - RiverTuan

Reviewer - TennisChampions

Title: 4/5

The title is well-suited for the story but is very simple, although it is in Spanish. It straight away gives the genre of the story. Since the title says 'Jeon Jungkook Fanfiction', the readers get to know that one of the main characters in the story is Jungkook. So if a fan sees it, they would be sure to have a look at it. But for the non-ARMYs, they wouldn't be intrigued to read it.

Cover: 4½/5

The cover is a simple cover and a bit attractive because of the colour. The picture of Jungkook is a fancy one. The font is beautiful and the font size is just right. You could try brightening it up a bit by adding sparkles or filters to make it catch more eyes.

Synopsis: 4½/5

That's a very intriguing blurb. The story is of a different kind of BTS fanfiction (something that I had thought to write too before I saw yours). The blurb explains what kind of a story new readers of BTS fanfiction might encounter, and also the reality of this world. Everyone knows that Jeon Jungkook will be involved (because of the cover and title). I was definitely not expecting 'run-ins' to be there. Writing the statement "Guess, you will have to find out by giving Mi Amor a read!!" isn't necessary. Your synopsis will do the job of pulling the readers into your storyland.

Genre: ⅘

The fanfiction genre is very evident as the whole story starts with that setting. Throughout the course of the story, Jungkook appearance is made, thus justifying the book as a JJFF novel. But the romance genre hasn't picked off yet as it takes time to build up the story, which I am sure will come up in due time. Whatever romance you have included in the last few chapters is just the start but it feels a bit realistic than not.

Originality: 9½/10

I haven't read a lot of BTS fanfictions but most of them usually revolve around highschool or marriage. So this one is a pretty unique one than all the ones that I have seen and read. It's about working at the company itself, making it realistic and surreal at the same time. Nobody knows what it would be like to work at a production and entertainment company but with your story, people will get some hindsight.

Description: 8/10

The description of the location is good but it can still be improved. The characters and their emotions are explained well with a variety of words. They way they look and act can make all the readers imagine and feel the real environment they are in.

Character development: 9/10

The characters evolve continuously with each chapter. Every chapter drops a hint of one or the other personalities of the character, be it the protagonist(s) or their partners. The evolution of the protagonists is evident but not much of the side characters.

Plot: 9/10

The plot is a stable one. There weren't any plot holes. The story was organised and written smoothly without any unusual break. The story is building up. Although a load of sudden information could sometimes bore the reader because not all of us can relate to the reader (especially someone like me). But it's needed where it is and may take some time for the readers to adjust with it.

Grammar: 14/15

There are very few mistakes throughout the story. The tenses are perfect, although they are in the present tense. The only mistakes are that two words get combined such as "toleave", "theentire" and "comequick". In some places, especially where there are dialogues, the commas after the speech quotes are missed out.

Structure: 5/5

Paragraphs are short and sweet, so they are entertaining to read. Dialogues are written perfectly and delivered the points well.

Vocabulary/Spelling: 10/10

There's a very good usage of vocabulary throughout the story. The words and phrases such as "run-ins", "ice breaker" and "stabbing at her phone" instead of the usual "argument", "introduction" or "punching the keys on her phone" had me amused and fascinated at the wonderful vocabulary. There weren't any spelling errors as far as I had read, except one in 'Chapter 11'. You must have meant to write "fall out" instead of "ball out". Good job on the accuracy, author.

Overall enjoyment: 9½/10

The chapters are of the perfect length and as the pace is slow and smooth, it helps the readers to identify with the character, although it will be a little difficult for non-ARMYs. Some cliffhangers were okay but they could be made more enticing.

The work was presentable and not boring to read.

Once in a while, it's difficult to relate to the protagonist but that's mostly because we are all different. But I would suggest to try and make it as relatable to the readers as much as possible, as you have done in the later chapters.

Total: 91/100

I'm sorry if the review was too long but I needed to give you my best and honest reviews. Your story is wonderful so keep climbing up that tall mountain to success.