My Love Poems - AmaTwiaa

Reviewer - cwang1

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Reviewer's Note: As a reviewer, I'm sorry if the review is a too harsh. I don't mean to insult you in any way, and personally, I really liked the vocabulary in your book. I just wanted to help you grow and improve as a writer. Hope it helps!

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Title [4/5]

Your title definitely captured the essence of your poems. However, I might suggest changing it because people might think that your book is the 'stereotypical' love story, so perhaps trying to find a more intriguing title.

Cover: [2/5]

Your cover was definitely a bit too simplistic for my taste. You could try adding more special effects like a filter or some other graphics. Additionally, there appears to be a little white bar at the top (?) which doesn't really fit with the cover, so I suggest that you remove that.

Blurb: [1/5]

I might come off as a little blunt, but your blurb is definitely way too short. Generally, a blurb should be at least 60 words, if not more. Just putting 'poetry' doesn't tell a potential reader much about your book, and why they should read it. Try adding a poem, or something about the common theme of your poems.

Genre: [4/5]

Okay, this could potentially qualify as poetry, but I personally found it to be more of a short story, so you could perhaps change that.

Originality: [9/10]

Yeah, I think this is pretty original, though it's kind of nearing the 'stereotypical love story' cliche.

Description: [7/10]

Your description was definitely your strong point. You had a lot of description, but just try not to get too carried away. You used a lot of allusions that I think also really added to your writing. I would just say that sometimes your descriptions become a bit far-fetched, so try to keep it realistic.

Character Development: [4/10]

I didn't see much character development, so try to describe your characters more and make them change throughout the story. I thought that, with your writing style, you would be able to easily describe the characters and make them show their character traits through their actions, so try to work on that.

Plot: [3/10]

Honestly, I thought that the plot moved a bit too fast, and there weren't too many plot devices used to keep it interesting. Try to incorporate more things like cliffhangers and dialogue, and try to make it flow more.

Grammar: [5/15]

I did find quite a few grammatical errors, so try to go back and edit it. A lot of grammatical errors can really detract from the reader's experience, so try to work on that.

Structure: [2/5]

I thought that a lot of your chapters were way too short, and you could definitely break up some of your long paragraphs. Other than that, I don't have much to say about the structure.

Vocabulary/Spelling: [10/10]

Ok, let me just say: your vocabulary is amazing! You were able to really incorporate the right words to make the scenes flow and seem really descriptive, so great work on that! I also didn't see many spelling errors, so good job there too!

Overall Enjoyment: [6/10]

Personally, I wasn't a big fan of the romantic descriptions. I think that you could definitely improve on your grammar, so just try to work on that. Overall, a great job!

Total: [57/100]