@wigglysubu
Reviewer: nobodywritesstuff
Genre: Teen Fiction

Summary/Excerpt:

Joy Jones who went by JJ, was a seventeen year old kind and happy go lucky girl suffering from acute lymphoblastic leukaemia- a type of blood cancer from the past three years and she wanted nothing, but to die peacefully.

That was until- Logan Kellerman, an almost eighteen year old boy with suicidal tendencies came storming into her life and stole roses from her grandpa's flower shop. Instead of running away with what he came for, he found himself falling deeper and deeper into her as she made his heart skip in mirth, for she was, in her own words, a little bit of Joy.

Cover:
The cover is simple but very pretty and pleasant to look at. I would click on the story and see what it was about if I saw it randomly on Wattpad. A criticism I will point out is that it doesn't match with your summary to me (except the flowers). It's sold to me as a romance, so just having her on the cover doesn't tell me much. The font is also quite plain (though props for making it easy to read and I liked the placement of the text), maybe something more pretty to suit the cover and/or put a love heart on the word O in JOY to make it more of a romance? Covers aren't my thing so take what I say with a grain of salt. (8/10)

Description:
Besides the error in 'a type of blood cancer from the past three years...' (which sounds as if it should be for), I liked your summary. We are immediately introduced with two juxtaposed characters who are going through life after a specific life event (or more) changed them. Logan stealing from Joy's grandfather's store is the catalyst for the two properly meeting and from the sounds of it, engage in a romance. It may not be the most intriguing of summaries, but it tells the reader the important aspects of the characters, as well as exactly what they're getting into and leaving the reader (me at least) wondering 'what will happen to Logan's mental state and Joy's physical state?' and 'if Joy does pass on, how will Logan cope?' stuff like that. (9/10)

There are two things I feared after I read it though:
1. Joy would be considered a manic pixie dream girl which is a trope that means the girl is always happy, adventurous, and simple breath of fresh air. It may link with the 'I'm not like other girls' trope but not always. She aims to change (usually a boy) someone to make them more 'experienced' in life and see the world in their eyes. John Green's Paper Towns is an example.
2. Love will be the cure of everything and considering the sensitive topics and obvious romance that will be featured here, this is something that needs to be watched out for. My Heart and Other Black Holes by Jasmine Warga does this, and it's disgusting.
I am not suggesting that your story will feature these things, this is just the initial impression I got.

Content:
The writing is good with very few spelling and grammatical errors, repeated and redundant phrases here and there, but nothing a read through or two wouldn't fix. I also loved some of the descriptions and paragraphs, they were beautiful and, in some cases, meaningful. Overall however, majority if not all the writing was very telly and because of that, I couldn't get fully immersed in the story and some scenes were weakened, like when Joy stands up to her mother about Shaun, and when Logan stole the flowers to name a couple.
In terms of worldbuilding, there isn't much to it besides the beach and the fact that Joy lives in a small town. I will say that your work does suffer from white room syndrome, a cure, describe your surroundings. The lack of descriptions made it difficult to picture the scenery in my head. I don't need to know everything mind you lol, just something for me to sink my teeth into.
Let's go into characters: I didn't mind Joy. She is flawed and isn't defined by her illness for the most part. Like the name suggests, she is happy and sees life in a positive way despite only having months to live. This can cause issues since she is unable to connect with Logan and his struggles and gives out poor advice like 'be happy' and 'be social' because that's the type of person she is. Even with her happy self, Joy tends to place a lot of unneeded burden and blame on herself. She is at least self-aware in the things she says and does and, in some cases, tries to change like when she stops using cancer to get her way in the beginning. Joy doesn't really do much besides work in her grandfather's flower shop. My only issue with her is that she does share traits of a manic pixie dream girl.
Logan is in my opinion (in the twenty chapters I read) was mainly defined by his mental illness. All we really know about him is that he wants to kill himself, and the past that started it all (and he doesn't like crawly things which he is made fun of constantly for). Logan for the majority of what I've read also is around as a tag along and doesn't do much, but when he starts to warm up and is only around Joy, I didn't mind him. It is nice to see a male go through these things, but overall, he didn't have much going for him outside of his mental state.
I liked Joy and her sister Gemma's relationship, while I wanted to see more in the twenty chapters I read, it was nice to see that and not sister's who tear each other down. Speaking of Gemma, she is very protective of her sister, but other than that a lot of her issues seem to stem from her autism.
Jamal is... not my favourite, some of his humour doesn't sit well with me and he is mainly used as comic relief. He also says something that I wasn't impressed with at all (more on that below).
Joy's mother is introduced to be tough on her kids except for Joy and is the dominant parent in the family. Joy's dad rarely says anything, so I can't comment on him much. Joy's grandfather is alright, he is tough and is protective of his granddaughter, suggesting that he is still not over the fact that she has cancer since his wife died from it also, once again he is rarely seen from what I read.
In twenty chapters, I don't really know a whole lot of any of the characters for me to care.
In terms of plot, I'm unsure how to explain this, but after the first roughly ten chapters, it seems very randomised and out of place. Plots are not given enough attention to be effective (like Joy and her family dynamic), characters and their relationships are not given time to develop, and too many things happen for me to care about what has happened/is happening.

There were also things I had issue with (not in any particular order):

1. Logan steps on Joy's all-time favourite worm (killing it of course) but then nothing gets said about it in later chapters (it probably will but it's taking a while) and moves onto other things, which is unrealistic since Joy cares about the worm so much.
2. Jamal says some pretty horrible things to Logan as his mental illness hits an all-time low (he does this with the intention of making Logan open up which is worse to be honest), and while he does get lectured that his words could have consequences, his actions are understood, thanked and ultimately rewarded.
3. Joy and Logan have a moment when hiding from someone at the flower shop where the two worked. While I can sort of understand Joy's feelings to the situation (only sort of), Logan had no reason to do the things he was doing as his focus should have been on the person he was hiding from. The scene itself didn't bother me and I liked Joy's feeling of 'being desired', but it was just the work setting and circumstance in which it did happen that irked me. I am also a bit iffy on the lack of verbal consent since the two are not together yet
4. Now the scene that really irked me. Joy finally stands up to her tiger mother and tells her and her family to not be held back in the things they want to do because of her and that's fine. What isn't fine, is that the mother tells her family and I quote, "You should go... you all can go... I'm here for my daughter, I'll always be there" (I edited the quote to shorten it, but the words remain the same) before bawling her eyes out. She doesn't apologise whatsoever, and everyone simply forgives her besides Gemma, which has not been explained if it's because of all the verbal abuse she copped from her mother or her autism (the latter being likely since nothing has been brought up yet). I'm just gonna say it, I don't care if she's the tiger mother of the family, she was verbally abusive (yelling at Gemma), manipulative (using Joy's cancer to make Shaun not go to France), and guilt trips her family (the quote earlier). She even demeans her partner by not allowing him to speak and assumes full control in being the authoritative parent. Framing the scene this way without a quick follow-up is also justifying and excusing her actions. I have seen her twice after that scene (the first time only being a line) and the other one she acts like a regular mother with no real substance. I'm all for character growth, but here's the thing, if the mother's backstory really influenced how she raised her children, then her development should have been an ongoing progress, not instant.
(4.5/10)

Next Steps:
1. Reread your work
2. Show more and less telling
3. Describe the scenery more
4. Develop your characters
5. Outlines are great for organising structure in the plot