1) Book Name: Silsila Badalte Rishton Ka OS collection
OS Name: I Love you, but sorry...I can't fulfill your wish

Review-

Title: 7.5/10
Nice Title but a bit too long still definitely something that would make you open the book to know whats a wish that someone can't fulfill of their lover's and why is it so important to make place as the title of the story.

Don't know why but the title coupled with the theme makes me feel that's a case of Last wish though given the theme there can be multiple dimensions the non-fulfilment of wish can go for.

0.5 mark cut for the length and 2 since the theme isn't exactly clear from title.

Cover: 8.5/10
Beautiful Header, The header gives feels of the leads( MauNal here) being torn apart by someone... in a hospital staff uniform(?) Since the theme is about two people not meant to be, I found it perfect to explain that something is going to separate them.

The cover is catchy for MauNal fans definitely but yup, If there is something different so that even a general fiction reader would like to read on, it would be cherry on the cake.

1 mark cut for above reason and 0.5 since I felt the author name highlight being of different shade of blue is kinda distracting.

Blurb: 9/10
Nice Blurb, So the blurb indicates towards a misunderstanding that has separated the leads and a sacrifice and guess my prediction was wrong since there's an indication of a chance of getting back but guess that won't happen since leads aren't meant to be. The blurb is completely relevant to the theme since all we are talking about is not meant to be and the blurb mentions about ex-spouse and being too late so full marks there.

Catchy it is since you definitely wonder what the misunderstanding and sacrifice are all about and of course, the last question, can they get back But definitely something more could be added to excite the readers and also as a link to the title (which is missing)  so 1 marks cut for that.

Story: 22.5/25
A beautiful story dear, So I just realized it was a continuation of Silsila the serial and I loved your take on it given I vaguely know the story. ( You know it 😛 but am judging currently hehe) I truly and totally enjoyed your take and thought process on it. Would give you 4 marks on uniqueness and creativity since even though many things and ideas were unique like the way Mauli got to know Kunal's truth( Usually it happens when person hears conversion completely and drops thali{ok sorry} but here, Maan-Nandini themselves after Mauli asking spoke which was good), again expected Kunal to be dead when Mauli was getting to know everything but it was good they got to live some time together and of course, Kunal's wish of coming back, also not informing the family was a good and realistic decision since usually if 1 person gets to know all do and again, Mauli's simple no to Ishaan without explanations, again something unique since I expected her to spill everything and  finally the death and Mauli's dialogue about living togethers not coming true(it would have been cliche{ok, remember your own stories Piyali}) and finally her not fulfilling his last wish since people really make some last wishes as there reason to live even if that means by hurting their own selves but Mauli not doing it was good but yes the whole base of the story was a common idea( You know what I mean) so 1 mark cut for that.

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Realized not continuation so will change marks and re review parts I thought it was a continuation for within stars.

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Full marks for theme justification, some people are just not meant to be, even when they get together against all odds, they just get separated because of cruel play of destiny, beautifully explained in the story.

Definitely, an interesting read for a MauNal fan to know how you take the story forward from the Ganesh Chaturthi time, the turning point of the show and their relation and make the story about MauNal but yes, as mentioned past a point when you realize the base, it may not be so interesting for some but yes, you keep the readers hooked by moving away from cliche so 4.5 marks there.

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Ignore the starting part of this paragraph, marks same.

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Flow of your story was great but since I know silsila vaguely so I remember the Pooja's and other things KuNun did together which of course if you could explain along in the story it would have been great for a viewer or someone who knows the story and also 1 thing is definitely jarring for me as to why would Kunal select Nandini, Mauli's best friend for his drama, that too someone who has nobody other than Mauli in the world, it is also separately her from Mauli and degrading her in everyone's eyes no, found another thing while re-reading, Maan calling himself Kunal's best friend yet Mauli not knowing anything about him was weird given Kunal knew a lot about Nandini so will be cutting 3 marks for that.

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Kunal selecting Mauli's best friend for the drama and seperating the girls is still jarring me, if it was about well wisher as you explained it could always be his own friend no, also since you explained Mauli also did help Nandini in this story too, Kunal ended up painting Nandini black in front of world in his Love for Mauli which wasn't right and logical and also the betrayal wasn't explained in words but pictures so would still 1 marks for that but otherwise  perfect flow and beautiful story.

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Ending was absolutely amazing, no words to describe how much I liked it, so beautifully done, full marks there.

Special highlights: Loved Mauli being a strong yet realistic girl, she loved Kunal still valued her self respect, I enjoyed that.
Some dialogues from Mauli were absolutely beautiful, I enjoyed reading them a lot.

Grammar: 14/15

Full marks on punctuation didn't find any faults.
A basic editing would help ward off some simple grammatical mistakes so cutting 1 mark for basic mistakes.
Amazing vocabulary and correct uses of all words so full marks there.

Overall Enjoyment: 5/5
A great read and believe me when I say it, I totally enjoyed reading it. Marvellous Story. Just a bit improvement on said aspects and I believe its a masterpiece.

Title, Blurb and Cover after reading part: Cover totally apt with the same faults as told before, Title totally apt...Blurb, Apt but would suggest the word 'easily' to be removed since that gives feels of chances of them being together but they can't be so.

Total: 66.5/75

Note: Read actual Work on IF on writer's wish.

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