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Judge: taetebts

Book: LONG WAY (8th Member BTS FF) by Dreams047

TITLE: 4.5/5

It's not so unique but I liked it since the title gives us the idea of what the story is going to be.

COVER: 3/5

According to your plot, I suggest you should change the cover to a better one. It seemed kinda all over the place even with the quotes. As the cover plays a major role in attracting the readers, it could've been better.

BLURB: 2.5/5

The quoted lines seemed to be taken from different situations because together they don't make sense at all. I liked the description later, however, I didn't understand what you tried to mean by the last para. There are a few grammatical mistakes also.

PLOT: 5/5

I loved the plot. Even though I've seen people writing stories with this same concept, I liked the uniqueness of it. And it thrilled me in some places. Especially, the way it started in the first chapter, it made sense who Kristy was and how she knew about them (BTS) in the 27th chapter. Your explanations are good enough and I enjoyed the similarities between BTS's real-life struggles with your imagination. Originality is always appreciated, keep it up!

CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT: 5/5

I laughed in many places. Felt sad too. I can see how their characters have been developed throughout the chapters. I loved how you've shown their bond. It was overwhelming to see them growing.

GRAMMAR, VOCABULARY, and PUNCTUATION: 1.5/5

There are multiple spelling mistakes. Moreover, I've seen you making the same mistakes everywhere. So, I wanted to point out some of them according to the chapters, so that you can understand what I'm saying.

You've written -

'Drom' instead of 'Dorm' (almost everywhere)

'Lough' instead of 'Laugh' (almost everywhere)

'Mambers' instead of 'Members' (almost everywhere)

'Oder' instead of 'Order' (ch 5)

'Nourves' instead of 'Nervous' (ch 6)

'Pronouns' instead of 'Pronounce' (ch 6)

'Entering' instead of 'Uttering' (almost everywhere)

'makneas' instead of 'Maknae' ('막내' in Korean) (almost everywhere)

'Bad' instead of 'Back' (ch 6)

'Pooped Out' instead of 'Popped Out'

'Clink' instead of 'Click' (ch 8)

'Dairy' instead of 'Diary' (almost everywhere)

'Madacines' instead of 'Medicines' (ch 10)

'Shef' instead of 'Chef' (ch 10)

'Massy' instead of 'Messy' (ch 15)

'Respectfull' instead of 'Respectful' (ch 16)

'Ripe' instead of 'Ripped' (ch 18)

'Hairs' instead of 'Hair' (ch 14)

'Catched' instead of 'Caught' (ch 15)

'Gived' instead of 'Gave' (ch 16)

'Dought' instead of 'Doubt' (ch 25)

I've pointed out some most frequent incorrect spellings you've used. I hope it'll help you to edit them when you get time. Except for spelling mistakes, there are multiple grammatical mistakes here and there; the usage of wrong punctuation, and errors with the tenses. Such as in the 13th chapter, there's a line- "Just because that shooter came to killed (here it should be 'kill' as you must use the verb's base form after you've used 'to') me (here should be a comma) I am not going to give up on my dream."

So like that, I've seen so many silly mistakes. I can't point out all of them here. So, I highly suggest you use any Grammar Editing App. It will make the work easy for you.

WRITING STYLE: 3.5/5

I liked your simple writing style, it's understandable and good. However, due to many spelling mistakes, sometimes I had to read the context twice to make out the scenario.

OVERALL ENJOYMENT: 4/5

I liked the way it's going to take turns. I'm excited to see what happens in the upcoming chapters. Also, I wish Eva wasn't like her father and she supported Angel :') well jokes aside, I like how you portrayed everything. It was fun reading your story.

As I've mentioned above, you just need to be attentive while writing. In the Grammar portion especially be careful while writing down the spellings. Always give a proofread before posting. You can ask me anytime about my reviews on your story, I'll be happy to help you out. I wish you to take this review positively and improve your skills. Everyone learns from mistakes and I hope my review will help you to understand where you can polish your flaws. I wish you all the best and keep updating!

TOTAL: 29/40

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Book: Love story|<<A BTS Fiction>>>by -Hxmx_phxbic

TITLE: 3.5/5

The title is sweet yet very common. However, I liked it since it's going well with all the chapters. As they all have some love story in them.

COVER: 2.5/5

It's soft and gives a soothing vibe. However, the picture quality is not good along with the fonts. The title blends with the background totally, I would suggest you choose an attractive cover instead of this one.

BLURB: 3/5

The blurb is giving me the idea of what the book's gonna be. I liked the quote also. However, I think it needs to be a little interesting to draw the reader's attention.

PLOT: 2/5

I've read all of them and they seemed common as I've read so many stories which consist of the same concept. Each chapter seemed like a scenario rather than a story.

CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT: 2/5

Every chapter length is so short and as I've mentioned before they all seemed like a scenario. So, I didn't find any character development in general. However, some chapters have part 2 where I've seen their character development but at the same time, it felt so rushed. I wanted to see some more plot in each chapter but sadly there were none.

GRAMMAR, VOCABULARY, and PUNCTUATION: 1/5

There are so many spelling and grammatical mistakes all over the book and errors with the tenses. Sometimes they are so frequent in each line. In the 1st chapter, you've written "Annyeounghaseyo~ Aunty!" which is wrong technically. It's '안녕하세요' in Korean, romanized as 'Annyeonghaseyo'.

In the 6th line - "Mom! Do you know what are you saying???" instead of "Mom! Do you know what you are saying?" it creates meaning if you write it like this here.

In this line- "I was thinking this (it should be 'these') stuffs when I heared (it should be 'heard' ) the door opening."

Then there is a line - "I didn't spoke to my homies about it".

Here the correct way to say it is "I didn't speak". Since the word "didn't" already indicates the past tense (of not doing), the word "speak" remains in the present form.

In Jungkook's chapter "So if you'll are (it should be 'you are') wondering how this started then.......long story short"

I've seen you making these same mistakes throughout all the chapters. I would highly suggest you use any Grammer Editing App. It'll help you to edit them correctly.

WRITING STYLE: 2/5

Your writing style is very simple and understandable. At the same time, due to multiple silly mistakes, it didn't make any sense at times.

OVERALL ENJOYMENT: 2/5

Each chapter holds different stories. And I liked the scenarios but it would have been better if there was more plot in it. If you've submitted your book in a one-shot category, I could have given you points according to each chapter which I can't here.

Please try to be attentive while writing. Focus on the grammar part specifically. Even if your plot is common, a good writing style can hook the readers. I hope you take this review positively. It's just for you to understand where you're lacking and improve according to it. I'll be happy if you ever come to me to know my review on any of your books. I'll try my best to help you. Don't feel discouraged. I wish you the best. Keep writing and you'll improve eventually.

TOTAL: 18/40

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Judge: armykoyola

Book: Traitor's Song by 4everSherlocked

Title: 5/5
The title is unique and it relates to the book. It is memorable.

Cover: 5/5
It looks beautiful and intriguing and very aesthetic. I loved the cover so much

Blurb: 5/5
It's short and precise. What I loved is the way the author has used words to describe the story and make the readers interested in it. It's creative.

Plot: 5/5
The plot is something different. I have seen such a unique and interesting plot for days. I was surprised and happy, I don't know how to describe this feeling after seeing such a unique kind of creature. I have read books with different creatures and this one takes my heart. Kudos to you for thinking something like this, author.

Character development: 5/5
All the characters are written down in great detail. Initially, I thought it might be a very sad tale but there are every elements you can find because of the uniqueness of the characters. I loved the characters, but I don't know which one to prefer

Grammar, vocabulary, and punctuation: 5/5
I couldn't find any mistake so far. It is absolutely beautiful. I would like to mention the vocabulary used by the author. It is so serene and soft. While reading I felt like so easy and connected to the story and emotions because of it.

Writing style: 5/5
Just a soft writing style. The paras are written so well. The emotions are displayed with the correct usage of words. It is well constructed. Every line, every word seems to be perfect. Then the pace of the book is correct. The chapters are not short not too long. The way the author has written it. You can imagine it like a full movie. I was able to picture it in my mind.

Overall Enjoyment: 5/5
I loved the book throughout. I am eagerly waiting for further chapters of the book. You have done such incredible work on this book. I just feel so emotional sometimes. And it made me laugh. I don't have words to praise it. It's just such a unique tale. Great work. Keep it up, author!!

Total: 40/40

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Book: My Mafia Stepsiblings by Hells07dealer

Title: 4/5
The title is great. I loved it, I know it's common but meaningful. It relates to the story perfectly,

Cover: 3/5
It's a great cover with 7 members but I guess it could have been better with some more creativity added to it.

Blurb: 3/5
The blurb explains the story and the characters quite well. It's quite well. But I feel that it is a bit too long. You can make it short because readers try to read it and seeing it too long they try to ignore it. This can be made a prologue though.

Plot: 4.5/5
The plot is great. This is what I enjoyed reading in the book. I love books like these with a strong female lead. This book has one of the strongest female leads which made the book engaging for me. Also, the concept of the story is very fresh and new.

Character development: 4/5
Now, the characters are written well. I loved them especially as I said Y/N is my favorite. She is written strong, independent not like other mafia books. Therefore, I enjoyed it a lot. But I will mention it down below as well. The emotions are missing from the book. Which is a huge drawback.

Grammar, vocabulary, and punctuation: 2.5/5
Mistake of capital letters after full stop and commas and correct usage of full stop in every line. There are spelling mistakes somewhere. This makes the book look bad. And readers think that the author is not that good but you are great. So, it will be great if you correct it and the book will look great.

Writing style: 2.5/5
Emotions written in brackets are hard to read and understand. It feels so plain and without emotions. This is a huge block in the book, writing the emotions in brackets. Please if you could look after this and correct it then this book will do great. The dialogues are fun and great but they lack emotions because of this reason. This makes it look boring. The pace is going fine.

You can write it like this: Y/N: I am asking you something, Mr. Han. Y/n speaks coldly and with maturity.

Or you can write it as a Y/N POV. I look at Mr. Han without giving a damn and ask him "I am asking you something, you better speak up Mr. Han."

All I am saying write the dialogues more creatively to bring out emotions in them which can make it more fun to read.

Overall Enjoyment: 4/5
I enjoyed reading it. As I said the female lead of the book kept it holding throughout. She made the book interesting to read. And I liked the story as well. It is a good book. You have done a great work. Keep up the hard work, author!!

Total: 27.5/40

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Book: Baby in the box by writer_tee

Title: 3/5
The title speaks to what the book is about. It's plain and simple. Maybe you can play with words and come up with something interesting.

Cover: 4/5
The cover is sweet and simple. It's perfect. The palette, fonts and everything is good about it.

Blurb: 2.5/5
There are grammatical errors in the blurb. Also, it's a very simple description. Doesn't create a mystery or curiosity inside a reader's mind. I would suggest enhancing it to be better.

"THESE BOYS ARE THE MOST PROFESSIONAL THIEVES. THEY WANTED TO BE RICH AND WEALTHY. THEY STARTED BEING THIEVES AT A YOUNG AGE WITH THE HELP OF A MAN ONE UNEXPECTED INCIDENCE CAME IN THEIR LIFE AND ONE BOX HAS CHANGED THEIR LIFE.........WHAT HAPPENED? AND WHAT IS ABOUT THAT BOX? IS THERE LIFE CHANGED INTO MISERY? WILL THEY BECAME WEALTHY? IF YOU WANNA KNOW READ THIS BOOK....THIS FF IS ABOUT A GROUP OF BOYS AND A BABY. IT'S NOT A NORMAL FF THERE'S FUN ROMANCE AND MAINLY COMEDY"

Plot: 4/5
I loved the plot because it's not the usual couple's story but something more than that. I have seen this story in movies. But it's interesting to see it in books with our favorite characters. The plot is written well, let's see what it will come up with. It's just started.

Character development: 4/5
I love the characters since they are written well and described well. They are all so good. The chapters are less but I was able to understand them. We will have to wait for further developments and explanations.

Grammar, vocabulary, and punctuation: 3.5/5
There are grammatical mistakes and punctuation errors too. The vocabulary is good in the book.

Writing style: 3/5
The pace of the book is good. The chapters are elaborate describing everything. But the paragraphs are big which makes it boring sometimes which makes the reader scroll. I would suggest breaking the paras. This makes it enjoyable to read. Separate the dialogues from huge paras. Otherwise, it's really good. Some changes can make this interesting plot work wonders.

Overall Enjoyment: 3.5/5
As I said I loved the plot. It was very good and I enjoyed reading it. It's something new to read. And the story is progressing slowly and I am sure it will turn out to be great. It will be exciting really to read this. Keep working hard, you have been doing well so far. Great work, author!!

Total: 27.5/40

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