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Judge - Seamlesslove

Book: Ancestral Immortal by UltraAquarian

Title: 5/5

Such an intriguing title and the fact that it's perfectly in the context of the story is just amazing. I don't have much to say about this. It's the perfect title pick.

Cover: 3/5

It's not bad, but the things don't blend well together. It can be a bit catchy at first glance but it's not that well put together. I appreciate the mugunghwa flowers (hope I spelled that right). And the title is visible too. But the color palette is what cuts the points. The flower sticker should have been blended and the title should've had another color. I suggest that whenever making a book cover, first decide on the color palette according to the picture you use. This helps to make it attractive and blend well. But hey, we shouldn't judge a book by its cover!

Blurb: 4.5/5

It's so in context to the story and sums up everything so well that I feel bad for cutting the half mark. I'd give the reason why, in the end, there's a typo (would not believe instead of not be believed) and also there's no catchphrase or dialogue given here. When writing a blurb, according to me we should make it a point to write an iconic dialogue from the story that'll make readers reminisce about the description and make them think, "Oh, the author left such a huge hint..!" But the way it matches the story and leaves us curious to read, it doesn't deserve anything less than a 4.5.

Plot: 5/5

This story had one super original, unique plot. I must say I've never read a story with even a similar plot to this one. Sure, there are a lot of supernatural stories out there but the overall plot of this story; it's so rare. The plot twist had me gasp and go, "Wait, what?" This plot was perfect, literally. Hats off to the author for generating such a unique idea.

Character Development: 4.5/5

The character of Y/n is great. She developed at a steady pace throughout the story and slowly gained a wider understanding of 'her' world. But at some points, her thoughts were a bit confusing and one couldn't get what she had in mind. Nonetheless, I could feel for her character and all characters in that aspect. The author did a fantastic job of expressing the characters' emotions. I'd just suggest that the author could take a few extra chapters and prolong certain explanations. Everything else was just brilliant.

Grammar, Vocabulary, and punctuation: 3.5/5

Okay, till like half of the story, the grammar, punctuation, everything was just perfect. I was like, "Wow, the author even does dialogue tags correctly most of the time." But towards the second half, the grammar and punctuation quality slightly decreased. And I would say that was because of a rush to complete the story. Because most of the errors were typos. And in some parts, there were a lot of typos and I had to re-read the part to understand it nicely. So, I think the author has the proper knowledge, but there was a bit of a rush at the end of the story and in that rush, these aspects went ignored. Nonetheless, the quality was impressive.

Writing Style: 5/5

Okay, the author has a different writing style in a good way. It was enjoyable, even though at some points, it was hard to interpret the meanings of certain situations; it just showed that you need attentiveness to read this story. There is a certain style that makes it a really fun read. The pace of the story is perfect because it starts fast enough. If it was slow and suddenly caught pace, I would've been mad. But it was consistent and comprehensible throughout. In conclusion, the author is skilled.

Overall Enjoyment: 4.5/5

I excessively enjoyed this story. It had me on the hook and I was really curious to know what all the story had in its store of surprises and I wasn't disappointed. However, there's one thing I would've appreciated and that is a chapter expressing Y/n and Jin's closure. There was one but it didn't exactly do them justice. But in the end, it was an amazing story and I loved it. Brilliant job author! PS: I need a season 2. The ending left me wanting more.

Total: 35/40

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Book: Pushes and Pulls by BTSARMY626043

Title: 5/5

The title is exceptionally chosen by the author, it fits the story perfectly and is quite catchy too. It is memorable too for the major theme of the story revolves around it. Perfect choice of title.

Cover : (considering both, the main book cover and the cover posted in the one-shot chapter) 5/5

With regards to the main book cover, just perfect and eye-catching. The cover posted in the chapter is just as attractive. If anything, it looks like a professional book cover. The picture quality is clearer than my skin and the title, subtext everything is visible. Great job!

Blurb: 4.5/5

There isn't much to pinpoint about the blurb. It is really good for a one-shot book and is quite attractive. But the only thing I'd suggest is the use of punctuation. I cut only half a mark for the punctuation because the grammar isn't incorrectly used. I suggest that the author uses commas, periods, etc. for the blurb. It's all good except this.

Plot: 3.5/5

I won't say the plot is cliché, it's not even that common. It stays in the middle for this category. It is executed properly but the plot in itself is not so attractive. It's not a very interesting plot but the way it's written makes up for it. I was indeed surprised in the middle by that phone call, and honestly, I didn't expect a plot twist in a one-shot. Overall, the plot wasn't all that unique but it wasn't boring in any form. It isn't any less in any way, because sometimes plots aren't the thing that strives the story, the characters, the message and the writing do. And this story is one of them.

Character development: 4.5/5 First off, this is a one-shot so none would expect some extraordinary character development. But I wasn't disappointed. Y/n's perspective on the point that turned her life was so sad at first. But, she learned and she grew. I expected some more part of Yoongi's character but wouldn't complain much since it's a one-shot. Even though it's subtle, I would say that the way the characters were portrayed is brilliant.

Grammar, Vocabulary, and punctuation: 3.5/5

Okay, the vocabulary is top notch and it's alluring to read. The use of the words is just amazing. The grammar is also brilliant. I cut half a point here because of the incorrect usage of dialogue tags. (For eg: "I love you" He said enthusiastically. Nothing seems wrong about this, but there is something wrong. First of all, you need to end the dialogue in the inverted commas with suitable punctuation. And the word after the dialogue tag isn't in capital unless it's a proper noun. So the correct would be, "I love you!" he said enthusiastically.) But dialogue tags are something even I didn't know how to use properly until recently so I can't judge only on that basis. The rest of the grammar is really good. The punctuation is a problem because at some points there is a lack of punctuation and somewhere it is incorrectly done. But it's not too bad or something. It's close to being overall correctly done. To correct this, I'd suggest that you read your story before publishing if you don't already do so. It'll help you make your own mistakes. If you already do so, I'd suggest that you write short sentences, and wherever you can't understand the punctuation, use a comma or a semi-colon. It helps a lot. But don't fill up the section with these symbols. Your grammar is already good enough so I hope you understood my point.

Writing style: 5/5

Nothing to criticize at all here. The pacing of the story is perfect.

The creativity used to express simple things is amazing. The author has a distinct writing style that's full of emotions accompanied by beautiful vocabulary. The writing style had me in awe of the author. Many fanfiction authors try copying someone's writing style, it's not wrong at all because they do end up finding their own. But I would praise the author for her writing style. It's superb.

Overall Enjoyment: 4/5

The story is perfectly executed with a phenomenal writing style. The plot is subtle and the characters are beautifully written. Though it's not all that nerve-wracking or anything, it serves its purpose, in its genre. As I mentioned the few shortcomings earlier, that's all there is to point out, nothing else. If there was a story with these characters, I would read it. And this one shot made me wanna read the whole One-shot book and some other books by the author. All in all, brilliant. Keep up the good work!

Total: 35/40

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Book: Can't I be Loved? by BlinkArmyUnivers

Title: 5/5

Completely fits the context of the story. Shows the mindset of the main character. Perfect pick.

Cover: 3.5/5

It's good. The only thing I'd like to say is to maintain a color palette for your covers. It helps blend in everything and makes the cover cohesive and more attractive. (For eg: red, black, and white. In the photo, the outfit is black. The text may be white and stickers or some subtext may be red.) But this cover is great too.

Blurb: 5/5

The blurb has everything that a blurb should have, an important and catchy dialogue, and a short description. However, some of the grammar is incorrectly used. (Misunderstanding happened instead of misunderstanding that happened.) But I really won't cut marks for that, for it seems more like a typo. The blurb is interesting and inviting, so that's great.

Plot: 3/5

The idea behind the plot is honestly remarkable. I would've appreciated it a lot of lot more if it wasn't for the plot holes. Every story has plot holes, but a writer should keep in mind the basic facts that can't be denied even in fiction. (For eg: In the story, Jin gets pregnant but he is a male. So, it's impossible.) But, the plot twist that came, I was expecting something about the past but what came wasn't it. So that was a job done well. Overall, the idea was great but the execution had some flaws. But remember, flaws help us to improve so this isn't in any way meant to demotivate you.

Character development: 4/5

I never had any complaints about character development. Honestly, every single character had a development that wasn't disappointing. But the only thing I cut marks for, or something that I'd like to point out is the fact that the nicknames given sometimes made the situation of the characters lose momentum. And that hindered character development. But the emotions of each character are portrayed well through their dialogues which is a great thing. I'd suggest that you focus more on the emotions behind the words of characters instead of the words they speak. The nicknames should almost entirely be eliminated.

Grammar, Vocabulary, and punctuation: 2/5

This point had to be strict and I already apologize if anything sounds harsh. So, firstly, basic grammar skills are somewhat lacking. The inconsistent switching of tenses and some overused words (common in fanfictions) were there. Punctuation was also lagging at times. This broke the flow of the story and because of the typos too, it formed a barrier to understanding the story. Now, I won't be just criticizing, I'd like to suggest something too. You can practice writing short stories on random topics (you can use Google Idea Generator), which helps you a lot. Another thing, try to take online quizzes or watch some short videos on YouTube regarding the correct usage of tenses, dialogue tags, and other attributes of grammar. I can see that you've tried so well that I can't help but suggest all of this. And also, if you wish, you can ask me too. To enhance your vocabulary, you can read more books which is the biggest help in improving every aspect of English. Overall, I'd say that there's room for improvement and you can become so much better. With the ideas you get, you can write even better stories if these aspects gain your attention.

Writing Style: 2.5/5

Okay, the only reason I'd cut all these points off of writing style is the fact that the whole book is written in script format. And believe it when I say, script format is not acceptable in novel styles. I'll tell you why. Novels are meant to make the readers imagine the situations and also leave it to them. Script format is meant for plays and doesn't help at all to visualize situations. Descriptions of the background, the scene, the actions of the characters, and their expressions are far more important in a novel than the dialogue itself. So, the script format isn't meant for novels. Secondly, the use of emojis and abbreviations is not meant for books. When the characters are texting, it's fine, but in dialogues, instead of using these, it's far better to use dialogue tags, description, and sometimes indirect speech as well. I'll give an example of the impact of the second novelist method. [For eg: Y/N: I don't think the situation is going too well now. (Script format) "I don't think the situation is going too well now," Y/N said; grief painted in her eyes and prominent in her voice.] Ultimately, I'd say that you have a style and it's your choice which you want to pick. If you prefer script format, go for it but instead of putting the emotions in asterisks, write paragraphs in between to describe the situation. Maybe you can express the emotions in another font like italicizing it. That's my suggestion, it's your writing style so it's your choice to keep it any way you want.

Overall Enjoyment: 2.5/5

The story was good in itself. I found the plot well enough. As I already mentioned all the points I took off marks, I don't think there's a need to mention them again. But there's one thing I'd like to tell the author. This is meant to be an objective review and I'm meant to judge the book, not just read it.

So, please don't be disheartened, honestly, there's a lot of room for improvement and I think you will improve soon enough. I'll look forward to reading your other stories after this. You have the mind, you just need some practice and time to polish your skills.

Total: 27.5/40

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