Title: The Cursed People
Author: DinoMadrid
Parts: 55
Genre: Fantasy

Nalungkot ako habang iniisip si Cleo at Emiro. Sana naman mailigtas silang dalawa sa book II which you mentioned on the later chapter of TCP.

Now, let's start to get this done. First thing that came to my mind when I receive your story here was a story about people with curses cast on them. But when I get to read your description, I came to realize that they are people with special abilities.

Your description was fine though may sablay ng kunti sa technical. For me, it's showing too much especially on the middle part. I suggest you make it a bit mysterious just like what your title did. Huwag mong idetalye kung sino ang mga TCP bagkus ay gawin mong misteryoso kung sino at ano sila. Iyong mahahatak mo 'yong readers mo papasok sa kwento mo kasi nahihiwagaan sila at gusto nila malaman kung ano at sino ang mga TCP. Pero that would still be up to you pa rin.

Mostly sa characters mo, you tend to focus on their abilities and attitude more than their physical features so feeling ko ang mamacho at gagwapo nilang lahat. Though, you were able to present Freya to us physically well.

On Ronan, I guess need mo siyang palutangin sa lahat ng character despite his being no special ability at first. I don't know how you'll do it but there are times kasi na nagiging supporting actor siya. Sa pagiging late bloomer niya naman, at first I thought siya ang may power ng ICE but then it was Freya.

Honestly, I wish na sana may kakayahan siya tulad ng Shadow Summoner but mukhang malabo base sa mga sinabi ni Hugo. Next na hiniling ko ay sana  fire 'yong power ni Ronan para opposite sila ni Freya and tinupad mo wish ko. Hahahahaha. May kaunti akong nasilip na hint sa power ni Ronan and I'm glad tama 'yong hula ko.

Plot is great. Napaghandaan at planado. Naging swabe ang daloy ng kwento mo. Sakto lang yong pagkagamit mo sa 1st at third person POV.

Patience ang nasi-sense ko dito sa gawa mo. Tulad ng ilang kwento na nauna, umaapaw ang pasensiya mo and that's what I love with authors na hindi minamadali ang kwento. Ini-enjoy mo lang 'yong ginawa mo without putting any pressure on yourself. Sana sa next book, mas exciting pa.  Umaalab ika nga.

Sa side ni Rory, OK Yong pagkabuild up mo sa existence niya sa kwento. Siguro dahil na isolate mo siya sa nakakarami which made him stand out. Gusto ko Yong ginawa mo sa side niya.

Bad thing for me ay binitin mo 'kong patiwarik sa ending mo.

I'm craving for Book II right now coz I can't wait to know more revelations.. Nakakatakam!

Areas to check/improve:
➡ minimal grammatical errors - minimal lang naman nakita ko so I guess hindi na malaking trabaho tan for you.

➡ more description lalo na sa characters

➡ more exciting scenes na talagang makapigil hininga.

Sorry kung late ko 'to nabalikan. Medyo maraming inaayos.