Story: Puts: The Hidden Underworld
Author: memai_blanca
Parts: 4
Genre: Fantasy

Excited ako basta fantasy and when I read your synopsis medyo nintriga ako.

Yong prologue mo was good. Yong hint on how other kids avoid her because of her being different is napakita mo between the convo at maganda Yong pagkagawa mo doon.

First two chapters, typical student life Yong pinakita mo at maganda Yong cliffhanger na ginawa mo sa ending ng chapter 2.

Your plot is unique. I know your story has more to reveal. Nagsisimula ka pa lang. Yong mga exciting scenes di mo pa napakita and I guess the next few chapters will reveal it.

Yong flow ng story mo OK na OK. Di mo minamadali. You took it one step at a time ika nga.

Ipagpatuloy mo lang yan and be consistent.

Areas to improve:
📌 Grammar and spelling. You have to work hard on this. I'm telling you this as one of your reader and a critic. Minimal lang ang errors mo sa Tagalog na conversations and narrations perk doon tau tagilid sa English na. Please don't take this negatively, I have to be honest because there will be no use in doing this job if I will use sugarcoated words just to please you. You can ask help or assistance. I'll be glad to help in case but you should work this area out.

📌 Correct usage of words. This is another area that you have to review. May sentences ka na kailangan ng tamang salita para ma's may appeal basahin. Focus on your English sentences.

📌 Punctuations. I think style mo Yong paglalagay ng comma after sa open quotation (",) kasi halos yon nakita ko. Mas maigi kung tanggalin mo Yong comma kasi in formal writing hindi yon pwede. Review comma and period sa mga pangungusap.

Aside from those wala na akong masyadong napuna.

Excite me more on your next chapters. Maganda Yong plot mo and just be consistent with your flow as what I have mentioned earlier.

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