Review For: @SpiritFlower2528

[Name] Sweety Hearts
[Age] Around 18 or 19 years
[Pony Type] Unicorn
[Colors] Lighter purple coat with light pink and light blue swirly hair
[Cutie Mark/Talent] Two lollipops that cross each other (one pink and one blue), with a darker purple heart made from them - Her talent is baking with sweets
[Family] None of her family she comes into contact with much anymore, so not worth really noting - She had two parents and no siblings
[Weaknesses] She is a perfectionist, so if something isn't perfect, it just won't do for her
[Quirks] She is very hyper sometimes (due to a sugar rush most of the time - other times it's just her personality)
[Backstory] When she was a little filly, she always dreamed of owning a bake shop. She always helped her mother out by baking and loved doing it when they were baking something sweet. She found her cutie mark when making a lovely cake topped with lollipops and lots of sugar. All of the ponies in her small town loved her cakes, so eventually she grew up and fulfilled her dream of owning a bake shop.

[Feedback]
Well, I think she's a pretty well developed OC, though I do have a few concerns. First off, her design to me just sounds a little to similar to Flurry Heart's, color wise. Next, I think her personality and backstory are slightly a bit too similar to Pinkie Pie's, what with her being a baker with a hyper attitude. Maybe just try tweaking those attributes a bit to make her more original? Next issue is the lack of detail in her backstory. Maybe you could provide more information about her parents and her town, including the people who lived there and what it was like? Other than that, I think she is a very nice character!

[Mary-Sue Percentage]
25% - There's a slight lack of originality when it comes to her design, personality, and backstory, which could be considered a bit cliche. I suggest just tweaking it a bit and try to find some more unexpected, creative things for her.
@SpiritFlower2528
Hope this helps!

10/19/2016 - OC 2/5 Month of October