First off, I'm extremely sorry PuppyCake47STTCarrot 

You wrote all this in October 2017 and now its August 2018, I was busy and wasn't on Wattpad that much, but then when I did come back, your notification was so far down that I never truly saw it.

I could of just skipped it and message you about it but I thought it would only be right to finish it

Again, sorry

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Name: Zain (he has no last name, there's a reason for that)

-At first the no last name didn't make sense but after reading the backstory it makes more sense. Though everyone has a last name, even if they make it up. (An example of this is back in 1619 slaves were named after there 'owners' and if they were released they would keep that last name or pick a new one)-

Fandom: none

Age: 14

Appearance: purple skin with lavender blotches, white hair with orange tips, gold cat like eyes, and freckles. Has black thorned vine tattoos that wrap around his arms

-For a human, no. But alien on the other hand, yes-

Back story: Zain is part of an alien race called Sangi.

-A warning- Sangi was a counselor in the Imperial court of Japan from the 8th century-19th century. Though, he isn't that popular and people really don't pay much attention, so the race called Sangi is perfectly ok.

He was often insulted because of his skin (the lavender parts), which drove him to leave his home at age 12.

-Was his whole family aliens or was it the town folk or insulted him or was he a mutant and his human thought he was weird? That isn't really important for this but for a story it needs to be clear-

He stumbled across a base for a group, a rebellion against the rulers of the planet. He wanted to join. They didn't let him, since he was too young, but they let him stay in the base since he had no where to go.

-12 is a bit too young for running away. I would say maybe he left around 15-16, started training around 17 and joined when 18 because that's when your legal an adult. So he is still younger than 20 but it is more realistic-

He groaned himself until he turned 13, which was when they decided to start his official training. He didn't join until he was 14. This was actually normal for his species, as the average age for a regular Sangi to join the guard is 15.

-Again with the age, but, if these Sangi are like dogs and age faster than humans that would work out fine-

Those who weren't completely familiar with the Sangi's society had doubted him, gone easy on him, or even flat out told him he wasn't strong enough (the Sangi ruled over multiple planets, so there weren't just Sangi in the rebellion).The very next day he arrived to training with tattoos on his arms (and then got scolded),

-The tattoos and being scolded at, is good for the character and story. It adds to this personality and how the group treats him. This is also more realistic than them being ok with the tattoos on a 15 year old. I say good add-

and he trained as hard as possible from then on. He would often forget to sleep, or even eat.

-Good add as well, if you want or like maybe add that to a weakness. He isn't as healthy and will zone out, maybe for his weaknesses-

Personality: smart, untrusting at first, kind, quick to anger

-Add a bit rebellious because he did run away, joined a group meant for rebellion and got tattoos. Maybe even add idealistic-

Family: Sangi never know their parents (hence no last name) they're just raised around other Sangi in one house by designated guards. Though he does think of a human girl, Vex, as a sister

-I personally love this idea. Not for real life, I mean it sounds sad, but for the story it makes some conflict. I still think he Zain should have a name, like I said up there-

Weapons: gun or sword, depends what's nearby

-I like the weapon option, some character stick with one weapon and one weapon only so having this makes him both open minded and have more of a fighter vibe-

              (To be honest you have a good character overall. Everything seems to flow and other than a few things here and there your all good)

Thank you for your patience and time PuppyCake47STTCarrot