So I've started writing a story largely based on real life.
It's part of Ran's backstory. I need criticism for this so I can improve.... (also I probably made at least one spelling/grammar error. Sorry.)

Tick. Tock. The clock's hands ticked as I stared at them.

A girl around my age entered the room with a hand full of letters.

"An elite." I muttered to myself as the girl passed out the letters, one by one to each of us.

I stared down at the letter I had been given, waiting in anticipation to open it.

"I hope I get into the elites." A girl near me squealed as she opened her letter.

I sighed and opened mine, hoping I get the same.

The world crumbled around me as I looked at the paper, on the verge of tears.
"Advanced."
I felt my eyes get wet with tears.
This is all I ever wanted. All I ever hoped to be in. And now... My dreams were crushed. Crushed with one word.

"YES, I GOT INTO THE ELITES!" I heard the girl from before shout with excitement.
I looked around. All happy people who most likely got into the elites chatting amongst themselves.

I was alone here.
Doomed to repeat history.

So us this any good?

(Also anyone who knows me irl most likely know's what this is a metaphor for.)