Oof the cringey title is a bad start, but it only gets worse...

Gabrielle woke up early the next day. It was a month after school started and she was exited.

Ok, there is SO much wrong with that... take another look.

Is it Gabriel or Gabrielle? Make up your mind!

Wait, and she was exited? I don't think that's an emotion...

HOLD ON! WHAT THE-- "Gabrielle woke up early the next day. It was a month after school started"

Ok... how the heck does THAT work?! Never mind, moving on...

She already had a best friend. She was in fifth grade and she just moved to Toronto from Sudbery. Sudbery was a greate place to live in but then, her dad had work in Toronto, so they had to move.
She went to the bus stop and whaited. The bus arrived, she hopped in, the bus left. When the bus drove to school, she hoped out and in the school. Then, she whent to her desk to doodle.

All those commas and that explanation was not necessary...

So she whaited and whent? Those ones are new to my vocabulary.

Oh, and she HOPED out the bus and into school? I think it's hopped, but I'm not completely sure, because then she'd be hopping into school too and that would be tiring.

Then, she whent to her desk to doodle. After you arrive, it is free time.

How convenient.

Lia was doodling to. She thrusted a note at her and said nothing.

She thrusted a note... Aggressive. The sentence makes it seem like she gave a note to herself.

Gabriel then decided to ask.

Ask what?

Lia responded with read the note every time she asked the question. Gabriel thougt this was unusual. So, she read the note:

Dear Gabriel,
Apparently, Alex has turned into a creepy stalker. because in the bus I heard a shuffling noise from behind me so I turned around. Nowone was behind me, But in the corner I could see Alex. No, someone who looked like Alex hiding behind my bench. I turned around and saw Alex stalking me. I know! (P.S. meat me at recess at the tree where nowone goes.)
Your pal, Li ❤️

Then Gabriel gave Lia a puzzled look, she knew her friend had said it for a reson

So at recess she whent to meat Lia. Lia said, lets go to the tree where nowone will disturb us and the teachers can still see us. So they whent.

What's going in your brain right now?

Mmfmmph, replied Lia. What? I didn't get that said Gabriel.

Mmfmph, MMM, said Lia while opening her notebook and wrighting. Twenty seconds later she handed Gabriel the letter.

Why couldn't she just say it? They're at "the tree where nowone goes", so nobody else can hear. What's her deal?

It said:
I don't know. Creepy stalker boy or his soal. He's weird and mean. I just can't believe he's a stalker.

Soal? You mean soul, and also why/how can his soul be "going in her brain"?

"I know, he is weird and bad, Not even bad in the good way." said Gabriel

Bad in the good way? 😂 What's THAT?

"He is soon to be goin' down. And when I say down, I mean DOWN."

S'cuse me what?!