Heart In The Hills by : Ida_e_D2

Remember, these are just my opinions. Feel free to argue with or go against any points I make.

So let's begin. The introduction is strong. It clearly sets up the story. The characters are clear and define. Now, the one thing I would say maybe have a little more to the world building before having Anna's family killed off. While it was foreshadowed, giving the reader more time before bringing the whole thing crashing down might work up the suspense more. Otherwise the first chapter is pretty good.

The overall body is fine. Correct grammar, punctuation, and spelling. The spacing is good. The pacing of the story is relatively good besides what I mentioned above. A decent flow that's not to fast or slow. Though there's one major thing that I've noticed. There's no comma after many of your dialogue statements. i.e "Girls in the bedroom" Pa barks should be "Girls in the bedroom," Pa barks. 

The final thing is (more personal opinion) maybe Anna's character could be worked on some more. Show more of her feelings in the forest, her emotions for just losing her family. Having those emotions either fester or grow or reside over the course of a month. Again, just my own personal opinion.

Summary

Pros:

Good intro

Correct grammar, punctuation, spacing

Fine pacing

Unique characters

Cons:

The dialogue thing

The Anna thing

If you're lost in the woods, what would you do? Ask Anna as she ventures into the Heart In The Hills, and see if you come to the same conclusion.