From non-believers to believers by: Bookwriter2121

Remember, these are just my opinions. Feel free to argue with or disagree with any points I make.

Hello Bookwriter, let's get started. So, the introduction is fine. We get our main cast right off the bat, starting with Brandon the Billionaire. The intro sets up the setting well, we see that everyone goes to a school, are generally happy, and what main issues the two main characters have. Hannah's back story is well explained, showing how her family is terrible and what not. 

The overall body is alright. I'm confused as to what tense you're using, because it switches from past to present tense rather often. There are minor grammar issues, though the dialogue is fine. Spacing is fine as well. There isn't much of an issue here except for the tenses. The chapter lengths are good too, except there are some parts that are more explanation than story telling.  

Though, I don't find the plot to be super exciting. Which is probably biased of me because I don't really like billionaire stories in general. I mean, they're just two kids who fall in love, one has a tragic past, the other is a billionaire so I don't see what problems he honestly could have. It just feels like a story that could use something else to make it unique and exciting, not just some teenager love mixed with self discovery.  

Summary:

Pros:

Good chapter lengths

Good intro

Correct grammar

Nice set up

Cons:

The past and present tense issues

Overall plot of story

If you no longer believe in love, then try non-believers to believers. A daring story about two teens who find love in the most unlikely of places.