As the deadline for the Personal Project became closer, I made a last-minute decision to enter this book into various different Wattpad competitions/awards. I received two awards from one competition! A thriller genre award and a plot twist award! One of which is this one. I entered my book into the Thriller section and came in 4th place! My score was 85/100! Here's what I scored on: Cover: 3/5, Title: 4/5, Blurb: 8/10, Writing Style: 9/10, Creativity: 8/10, Organization: 8/10, Accuracy of Genre: 10/10, Protagonist, 5/5, Antagonist: 5/5, Grammar: 7/10, Conflict: 5/5, Details: 5/5, Plot: 8/10.

This was Gloria's review of Hallucinations: The cover needs quite a bit of work as the cover should give readers a sense of what your story is about. Think of the cover as a first impression, it's the first thing readers will see before making the decision to read your book or not. Whether we like to admit it or not, humans do judge a book by its cover (unless your cover will give readers a giant library despite the possible effects of Stockholm Syndrome, it is not exempt). So despite the cover not being at its peak, we also run into the issue of typography. The title is very small and almost illegible, as are your name and the cover blurb. If the cover was Sally's boyfriend meeting her dad for the first time, his handshake would be very sweaty and nervous. Not the best first impression to make, to be sure. The first step to engagement starts with a compelling cover. *Gives me fellow Wattpad users who could assist me in editing my cover. Then proceeds to make me a new cover for my book herself. Gloria, thank you so fucking much (excuse my French) for creating the new cover of my book for me, it's beautiful and I love it*

The title is simple, sweet, and to the point. It's a memorable one word title that gives readers a sense of what to expect for your story. However, there are MANY stories with that title on Wattpad, making it easy for your story to get lost in the Wattpad Vortex. That's not to say you should change your title, it is something to be aware of.

The blurb is a bit long and there are some errors prevalent in it. I do have a suggestion for you on how to improve it. *slightly changes my original blurb* As you can see, I still kept most of what you wrote and cleaned it up a bit. You don't have to describe your character's looks, whether she likes dentists (though that was cute), and other details that you can reveal within your story. I see that you started writing this relatively young, 13 or 14, I believe? That's really incredible! *Girl, you're so sweet*

There are quite a bit of structural and mechanical issues, especially pertaining to grammar. Periods should not go outside quotation marks when you write dialogue. There are special instances where you would do that, but it's not applicable here. Semicolons are wonderful and underrated a lot of the time, but you don't need to use them in place of a comma for your dialogue. I also noticed tense changes every so often as well.

Your details however, are amazing. The attention to description you utilize as a writer is incredible. Honestly, you have a true knack for that. Incorporating extra sensory details the way you do is amazing. *Stop, I love how you think that* Which brings me to your writing style. A lot of people nag on "purple prose." Bah humbug to them (sorry if anyone is part of the purple prose haters club). You have a lavish way of writing that I really enjoyed. But it's not too much. You've found a balance that is hard for a lot of writers to pull off. So, great job there! *Thank you so much Gloria!*

I've kind of gone over creativity before. I would just be weary of leaning into tropes too much with this story. It is very familiar and hard to make your own when it's been done so often. Nina is an interesting protagonist with a lot of flaws. Her treatment of Kathleen took me off guard at first. However, it was nice that she still saw her as a friend and could understand what she went through. So far, the antagonist seems to only be hallucinations and the darkness that Nina finds herself in, her mental struggle. However, I've only read to chapter four, so there could be a more sinister presence introduced. Like whoever caused the trauma. I will still read more of this, as I do enjoy it. It mainly needs editing to make it a book that's polished and shiny! *Yup! On it!*

And here is the (much shorter) review of my plot twist: Sensibility: 7/10, Shock Factor: 910, Emotional Evocation: 8/10, Dynamics: 10/10, and my total was: 36/40. The friendship between Nina and Ansley makes this a clear 10 as far as the dynamics go. The rest, I will admit, left me "kerfuffled," as Mrs. McCummings would say. There's a lot going on here at once, making it hard to keep up with. Which plot twist am I judging? The part with Mrs. McCummings or is it or the gun to Nina's head? The dialogue is a little bit all over the place, and I think restructuring will help quite a bit.