𝔊REEN 𝔇REAM ﹏ ₊ ᶻz
﹟ A pr❍m⋆ti⟡n shᝰp by 𝐘𝐔 𝐇𝐔𝐀 𝐆𝐀𝐑𝐃𝐄𝐍

◟→ recalling Affection  ⸝⸝

░﹐ᶻᶻ꒰⋆ Name: Madhu Rikhayat ๋࣭ ᵎᵎ  𓂋 ✦

░﹐ᶻᶻ ꒰ Dream tag: MadhuRikhayat᭪ 𓂋 ✦ .

░﹐ᶻᶻ ꒰ The author: was a die hard reader...but one day got a plot in my mind..friends encouraged and I started writing bts fanfiction..    .ᐟ 𓂋 ✦ .

░﹐ᶻᶻ ꩜𓂃Current Status: Ongoing   ⑅ོ+ 3rd September 2024𓂋 ✦ .

░﹐ᶻᶻ Genre: fanfiction 𓂋 ✦

░﹐ᶻᶻ Chapter Count: 11 𓂋 ✦ .

░﹐ᶻᶻ Mature/LGBTQ Themes: mature - yes but no lgbtq 𓂋 ✦ .

░﹐ᶻᶻ Highest Dream Ranking: #3 in memorable (10th august 2024)  𓂋 ✦ .

░﹐ᶻᶻ Protagonist(s): ~
jolly and moody

* orphan

* can go to any extend for loved ones

* a girl with a golden heart

Many other characters are also involved they will be introduced in story only... So lets us explore their journey of coming together or going afar...no one knows... 𓂋 ✦ .

░﹐ᶻᶻ Dream Summary: Story of a boy forgetting his social existence or identity just to get his love back...going through a time lapse to make her recall his existence in her life...as she is her only reason for existance...and the girl going through rebirth to gain her position in his life..without even knowing... JEON JUNGKOOK

~The golden voice ans idol of nation introvert and conserved for someone
man of words
emotional ams takes decision from heart  𓂋 ✦ .

→﹐ ⛩ ﹒ 𝐏ROOF﹒⟢

🗝ㅤ۫ Promoted by:  n1lyyx‹𝟹
🗝ㅤ۫ Voted by: n1lyxx‹𝟹
🗝ㅤ۫ Review by:  Elixyzsss ‹𝟹
🗝ㅤ۫ Chapter cnp by:  n1lyyx‹𝟹
🗝ㅤ۫ Notes:  N/A ‹𝟹

❝  ⌗ . Short Feedback on the first chapter  .  ⁺ 

The story could benefit from a bit more polishing. The grammar and spelling need attention—correcting errors like "flusterred" to "flustered" and "bcoz" to "because" would improve readability. Additionally, the use of ellipses ("...") is somewhat excessive and could be minimized for a smoother flow.

In terms of character development, Jungkook's thoughts and emotions could be explored in more depth to make his attraction to Saga feel more genuine. Also, tightening up some of the sentences would help in keeping the reader's attention focused on the key moments of the interaction.

The piece currently reads more like a screenplay than a traditional narrative, with direct speech and descriptions that resemble stage directions. 

 The story jumps between past and present tense, which can be confusing for readers. To create a smoother reading experience, it's important to stick to one tense throughout the piece. 

𝖂𝖊 'thank you for choosing 𝐮𝐬

May.your !¡ dreams succeed! :: ﹆ ꩜