Author: Ctrain8

Reviewer: daniellie802

Title: 9/10
Writing style and flow: 8,5/10
Pace: 9/10
Grammar: 13/15
C. Development: 13,5/15
Beginning/Hook: 9/10
Book cover and summary: 9/10
Originality: 5/5
Plot: 12,5/15
Total: 88,5/100

Excellent book, really.

The title's suitable and nice. Your writing flow's excellent and it is capable of delivering the tense atmosphere successfully.

The opening is pretty decent, but the real thrill begins somewhat later. Character development is excellent as each major character has several chapters where they become the first person.

I can't comment much on the grammar as you have deviated from standard grammar in the first place.

The story is really great and you know when to cut chapters.

However, I feel like the plot is lacking somewhat until Chapter 21 (Ababinili's Curse). Banshee feels like your generic villain until the Ababinili's Curse chapter appears.

You may want to mention Ababinili once or twice in the earlier chapters to hook your readers even more. This way, Ababinili's appearance in Chapter 21 is foreshadowed. Honestly, it's a pretty good plot twist, but it feels too forced. Ababinili literally doesn't exist before Chapter 21 and there is not even a sliver of doubt that Banshee isn't the main villain.

The recent chapter, Chapter 24, is fairly unpredictable, but it's interesting to say the least to see the perspective of people outside the company of 28. Still, your main focus should be the Watson-Sid-Merda trio's adventures.

I'm not sure about the horror, though. I feel like this is an excellent thriller/paranormal genre book, but you wrote horror. The fact that characters can, to some extend, fight back against the Banshee already takes away some of the horror element. The horror element does surface during Chapter 21, though.

Also, for some reason, Banshee retreats ("stumbled back in the forest") in Chapter 22.  This makes little sense as Banshee is superior and shouldn't have trouble killing both Sid and Merda. This might be linked to Ababinili, but it's definitely odd and is something Sid and Merda should talk about.

In conclusion, this is very good book. Improve the plot a little bit and it'll be better. Cheers!

Note: Sorry that I took a long time writing this review. I was extremely busy with exams and such. Thanks for your patience.