Title: I Think I Killed My Parents
Author: OsbornCL

Description:
After substantial evidence points to seventeen year old, Dylan Marcus for the gruesome murder of his parents, he is sentenced to a life of padded rooms, straight jackets, and violent neighbors. Institutionalized at Ashmoor Psychiatric Hospital, Dylan spends his days surrounded by the craziest of the crazies. With no memory of the night of the murders, piece by piece is returned with time and extensive therapy. Dylan soon begins to question his own sanity, and innocence as the jigsaw puzzle in his mind comes together,  forming a fractured picture of blood, and rage.
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Your title definitely gives away a lot. Sometimes, this works out well for a story, but in this case, I think the longer, plot-revealing title could be made a bit more alluring. I think a one or two word title could do this piece a lot more justice, especially if you use a title that relates more to Dylan's actual emotions as opposed to what he may have done.

I really enjoyed your description, and I feel like it gets me, as a reader, to ask several initial questions. The evidence points to Dylan, but did he do it? What is he going through now, and who are the insane people he's forced to spend time with? There are a lot of things going on in your description, but I like how that works to your advantage.

The storyline as a whole seems pretty sound, though there are only a couple of chapters. One of those is a cast list, which I admittedly skipped. I'm not a huge fan of cast lists, as I favor unique descriptions of unique characters by an author.

Aside from this, you make sure to move the plot forward with each chapter, introducing us to more of Dylan's experiences and surroundings. I would love to see how his relationship with the girl, Hannah, develops in later chapters. She seems like a promising character who can help, and be helped, by Dylan.

You have a few small grammar errors, but nothing too noticeable. You could remove the comma before Dylan's name in the description to improve that flow, for example, but things like that don't make anything difficult to understand.

In general, I think your book is off to a nice start, and I'm hopeful that you'll update it soon.

Would I recommend this story? Yes. I think it's suited for readers of teen fiction as well as anyone who likes an interesting mystery.

OVERALL SCORE: 88/100