Title: Half Hope, Half Love
Author: lily97000

Description:
"Let me go, Heath. You know it's wrong." I whispered, as he shifted himself closer towards me.

"What's wrong with me hugging you?"

I took a deep breath. "You just got cheated on by my sister who you were about to marry in some weeks! Not to mention, you loved her so much you fought against your whole family to marry her. Is that enough of a reason now?"

With that being said, he left me abruptly and I could feel him still standing behind me. "You just have to mention that now, don't you? When I'm trying to cope up with the truth?"

"It's the truth. You really were getting married to-"

"Is that the reason you're leaving me?!"

I frowned. "What?"

"I was going to marry Kiara. You didn't like it-"

"Why wouldn't I like it if you'd marry my sister?!" I yelled, my own temper rising at his random observation.

"It's simple. You were jealous."                                   ___________

Eight years working your butt off for someone you love, only to watch them fall in love with your own sister and propose a marriage by your help, is not something everyone have guts for, to do.

Follow the journey of Heath Evercrest and Hazel Scarlett, as Hazel struggles to put up with her employer's sudden unexpected odd request, while her own heart threatens to betray her sooner or later, in her own quest.

                             ____________

[ A c h i e v e m e n t s ]

#1st Place "April/May" Winner of the  Rainberry Awards 2019 in whole "Romance" category.  #1st Place Winner of "The Love For Writing Awards 2019" #Winner of Galaxy Diamond Awards 2019 #Winner of the "Best First Chapter" in Dazzling Spark Awards 2019 #2nd Place Winner of Summer Awards 2019 #3rd place winner of Rosie Awards 2019 #3rd place winner of the Creativity Awards 2019 #3rd place winner of Invisible Awards 2019

~First Draft Published: 1st March, 2019

~Warning: Contains mature content/sexual themes in the later chapters.

Copyright Ritika Verma © 2019
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So, your title is simple enough. You didn't pick a basic, overly-popular title, but you didn't pick something that was too far out, either. I like that, and I think you found an appropriate title that suits your story well.

Your summary length is also good. I stumbled upon some awkward wording here, and a couple of grammar errors were peppered in. I think you should go ahead and edit the summary, so that readers have more clarity and aren't scared away by those errors, getting the wrong impression before reading your book.

Your plot isn't necessarily something that I would normally be drawn to, but you've written it in a way that makes me interested to move past the first chapter. It has a pretty good flow, though in the beginning it was a little awkward in terms of pacing.

Again, you've got some grammatical errors in the story, which is understandable since English isn't your first language. I'm an American, and even I have trouble with verb tenses sometimes. :)

My suggestion would be to get a little help with editing, and make sure your sentences are flowing as smoothly as possible. I think doing this would take your book to another level, and get even more readers interested in following along.

Would I recommend this story? Yes, I think I would. I think it fits the general fiction audience best, though readers from other genres might take a liking to it as well.

OVERALL SCORE: 90/100