Hello po sa inyo! Ito na po yung review ko. Sorry for the crappy response, 'di ako marunong gumawa...hahaha.

I've been writing for 3 years now, and years before that, I never saw myself making stories like this. I used to hate―wrong word. I used to dislike writing, all because I suck at English, most especially with spelling. Who knew that the thing I disliked the most was actually the thing that I'm really good at. (Just felt like saying it...hahaha...sorry)

After reading through all those reviews, I had all the more reason to not be lazy with this work of mine. (Katamaran! Lumayas ka na sa katawan ko please!) You guys shined light on the things I missed out and need to work on. And I can honestly say that I flinched a lot as I listed down the things I need to do. And guys, I value each thing that you all said.

For the technicalities part, it's been a long time since I read my Grammar and Writing book. Looks like I have to rummage the closet for it and familiarize myself once more with some of the rules, while putting up with its thickness and terrible smell. Have you noticed that some words are missing or may mga extra na di dapat? Well, that's a problem that me and my teachers can't seem to fix. When I write, my fingers seem to move on their own as the words form in my head. And some of those words get stuck in my head and my fingers can't type it out, while others I tend to repeat because I get distracted or something. Also, I tend to write wrong words that sound the same with the correct word. Ex: I would put "right" but I actually mean "write." '-_- (Wag na lang kayo magtaka kung mayroon mga ganyan na errors sa response na to) And about the stepping up in description. I've recently read a couple of articles on that and they will certainly become useful. As for the dialogue, I really was a bit aware of the awkward expression/words. But I didn't know that it was rampant, as kit_mccartney put it. I really have to put a lot of effort on that.

I'm really happy that you liked my characters, especially Kylon and Anika. Spending a month making them both wasn't such a waste of time. I am also glad that you said that I managed to deliver the minor characters well. I was always worried that they were cluttering the story, but I guess I received some assurance. I was also worried about the character development thingy but most of you made me feel otherwise. I know some parts are very predictable, and in the following chaps I tried to not make it that way. I have to admit that I didn't spend much time making some of the characters, especially Tarius. I didn't really have big plans for him, but as the story progressed, I can't seem to get rid of him. It's as if my subconscious was telling me that he'd do something that will have quite the effect on the story. I'm going to restructure his character, his past, his goals and anything else important. As for the plot, I can't believe it became like that after asking myself the question "Can you escape destiny or not?" The concepts for the Tomes aren't completely finished yet, and my mind is going in circles because of that. I'm glad that you guys liked the maps and the poem. Looks like I come up with good things when I'm bored. For the technology in Neona, I just threw that in on instinct (may ganun? Hahaha). Just like the Tomes, I haven't finished writing the concepts of it yet.

At the part about Anika and her team chasing the thief, I don't really know why I didn't put magic in that part. It was either because I was in "Katamaran Mode" or I subconsciously thought that they wouldn't want to destroy the market or hurt anyone. Probably the former...hehehe.

ArchAngel_MikeKhael, libranages, pointed out my paragraphs. I haven't noticed until now that I brought some of the rules in news writing to fiction writing. In news kasi, one sentence is already one paragraph *scratching the back of my head*. I'll fix that too.

NowhereGray...I really didn't want Anika and Kylon to be separated from their parents. It pained me too, since I know what it feels like to be separated from a parent because of death. I just couldn't find a better way to serve as one of the base for their character. Right now, I'm debating whether to do the same or not with the other Destined that I would introduce in the later books.

The part that I really had trouble writing was Kyla giving birth. I was afraid to write this part, knowing that I wouldn't be able to do it any justice. After numerous edits, I finally decided to ask my mom about it. After receiving scarring info that I most probably won't be able to forget throughout my teenage life and beyond, I went back to it, thus the current version. None seemed to have qualms about it (except for the technicalities part) so I'll just assume that it was good enough for you guys. Still not good enough for me though.

I'll have to remove all those "s" on the "Destineds" word, which shouldn't be hard.

So it's time to choose the Most Helpful Reviewer for this week. Dahil sa kalikutan ng isip ko, tinawag ko sila na "The Big Three sa Pagbabanlaw" hahahha.

If I had a choice, the winner for this week would be kit_mccartney, libranages, and purple_porpoise.

And after hours of reading all the screenshots on my phone, Ate Raine aka purple_porpoise, CONGRATULATIONS!

Huhuhuhuhu...you made me cringe the most as I read your review. Binanlawan mo talaga ako ng todo pati ata color natanggal...hahaha joke! Thank you po.

Thank you very much for taking the time to read my work, guys. I must say that stalking the fantasy forum and joining this club when it was formed, was worth it. I got to meet you all. (Hehehe...yeah I stalked the group thread) Those are few of the decisions that I wouldn't regret making.