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|| { Cover } ||

✓ 10/10 ✓

Starting off with the cover, your book's cover is one of those on which the bts and specially Jungkook's readers would tap immediately. The cover has a nice effect and matches well with the story's theme.

I would also like to compliment that you decided the right picture here on your cover. Because, just like in the story, Jungkook looks kind of mean in it XD. (No offense, don't kill me, armies)

|| { Title } ||

✓ 10/10 ✓

Title is not long, not short, just the right use of words that explain the whole story in two words.

I like it. Good work there.

|| { Description } ||

✓ 9/10 ✓

Now, I have two thing to talk about in your description.

1. PUT A FULL STOP HERE

Does it matter? No.
Does it make any change? No.

Descriptions are a a decision platform for readers to decide whether they will read the story or not. Even though this small full stop won't matter, but you know, just putting it out there, no offense.

2. CHAEBOL

The use of word 'chaebol' here might sound a bit weird to some readers. Like, when I was reading your description, I was like 'Ch-Chaibul? Chaebol? Chaebol who?'

But then I searched the word and realized that it was quite fitting there BUT not every reader might prefer googling it.

It might not effect your story whatsoever but using a Korean word in an English description might not all be appropriate.

Sorry if I seem stupid pointing out such small mistakes but just like when teachers try to pin-point small letters, capital letters or stupid mistakes like that in the paper of a student who's done super well, this is the same case. I'm unable to find much flaws in your book so I'll just help you make it more perfect.

|| { Grammar } ||

✓ 14/20 ✓

Grammar is the one thing, my friend, where even professionals and masters are beaten sometimes.

Several things in your story caught my attention. In terms of vocabulary, I have no problem with it. Your use of vocabulary is pretty well.

However, your use of commas, and full stops has a few flaws. I'll mention some of them below.

In the 4th paragraph, (the one starting from flipping the covers back);

'I stood and snatched my robe from the back of the chair slipping on it.'

As you may notice, there's a slight error in this sentence. You wrote 'slipping on it' instead of 'slipping it on'. I prefer you correct this.

Other than this, there were mistakes of commas and full stops here and there. For this problem, you can use the keyboard 'Grammarly'. It'll help you in your finishing touches of the chapter and will let you correct the small mistakes that the eye of the author may not catch.

A small example is here, where you wrote 'Jungkook,', which should be written as 'Jungkook'. Mistakes like this can be corrected through grammarly.

Another thing I want to say about your story is that you should work more on details. Details like;

1. Adding more expressions

The characters of your story may seem a bit too bland if you just add in a couple of thoughts or talks in their p.o.v.

What I'd like for you to improve on is that you should lengthen the p.o.v of each character. Their surroundings, their thought, their feelings should be more detailed.

'My smile faded away at the question. Quickly I plastered a fake smile."

Let's take this dialogue for instance. First, you should add a comma after 'Quickly'.

Second, you should express her thoughts and feeling more.

For example;

'Hearing upon my father's question, my smile faded away as I set down the cutlery in my hands. I gulped before plastering a fake smile on my face.'

I don't think this change is the best but it might help. In my opinion, your story's grammar level will boost with this. This may also help you in turning your fanfic style story into a romance novel ;)

2. Quality Over Quantity

You don't have to add many scenes. You should add just a few but they should be well explained and expressed. ＼(^o^)／

|| { Plot } ||

✓ 10/10 ✓

As far as your plot is concerned, I have absolutely no complaints. Plots like this are highly preferred by armies. I also like the plot very much and will look forward to the next updates. (σˋ▽ˊ)σ (even though I've read the whole story XD.)

|| { Characters } ||

✓ 8/10 ✓

Unfortunately, I have to say that your characters might need a few changes. For instance, it's kind of hard to understand Jungkook. Maybe because I haven't seen much from his p.o.v. But is he a caring and kind person or a cold and rude person? I know he hated Y/N and all that but you should explain more as to what kind of person he actually is, like how other people treat him or how treat others. That kind of thing you know. You may have explained this further in the story but let not the readers be too confused in the starting chapters. ψ(｀∇')ψ

|| { Originality } ||

✓ 10/10 ✓

In concerns of originality, I don't think your plot is quite common. Throughout the 5 chapters that I read, there might have been a scene or couple which were kind of clićhe but other than them, your plot is quite original *thumbs up*.

|| { Flow } ||

✓ 9/10 ✓

When I read the first sentence of your story...

'Y/N, you're getting married to Jungkook.'

I was like 'whaaaat?' Already? But then I thought that this story is about contract marriage so it HAS TO start with marriage. So, no complaints about that.

But I think it'll suit your plot more if you took the plot a bit more slow, like teeny winy bit slower than you are now. Just a teeny tiny bit. 👌

[ Reviewer's Note ]

Overall, I'd like to say that you're doing an amazing work, author. With a few touches here and there, your fanfic can be among those which get millions of reads. I will add your book to my library because I love it and will keep looking forward to it's further updates as well as how much progress you will make.

Your total score is:

80/90

In my opinion, it's a pretty great score. If my review offended you in any way, I am deeply sorry. (〒︿〒)

Thank you very much for joining. Hope this review helped you. If you need my help in any way, I will try my best to help you.

Have a nice day ❤

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