Your review is here Pranisha-Rijal ヾ(*´∀｀*)ﾉ

|| { Cover } ||

✓ 3/10 ✓

Starting off with your cover, I'd like to say that your cover might not appear appealing to the readers. The font you used seems like you just pasted it there and doesn't matches with the picture.

I'd recommend that you change your cover. Either you can get one from the cover shops on wattpad or use apps like 'Canva' and 'Picsart' to make your own.

|| { Title } ||

✓ 10/10 ✓

Hmm, about your title, I'd say that at first sight I thought it is a face reveal. You know, these days, there are many face reveal books on wattpad so people might mistake your book as just a face reveal.

After reading your book, I, personally like your title but from collective point of view, it might not be very appropriate.

|| { Description } ||

✓ 6/10 ✓

Concerning your description, I noticed a few flaws in it.

First of all, the paragraph where you wrote only her friends, her sister, etc. seems irrelevant to me. Instead of writing so many relations, you can either write something like:

'Only a few people around her.'

Or

'Only the people closest to her.'

Or you can use these for example to write something else.

Other than this, I think you should use more space between the lines. Like merge two sentences in one paragraph and then leave a space of a line or a couple and then merge two sentences as a paragraph again. In such way, your description will look more neat and will have a professional touch ;)

|| { Grammar } ||

✓ 18/20 ✓

Concerning your story's grammar, I'd like to say that it is pretty decent. From the vocabulary up to the dismissal of typos and formation of paragraphs, I'd say that you've done a pretty neat job there.

To be really honest, I tried finding out grammatical errors in your story but either they were just too trivial or none at all.

But there is one thing I'd like to advice you on; that I she length of your chapters.

The length of your first chapter was good but the second and the third chapter were really short. I'd suggest that if you merge both those chapters, then a chapter of average length can be formed.

For future reference, do remember that an ideal chapter should be between 800-1500 word count.

|| { Plot } ||

✓ 8/10 ✓

As far as I've read your story which is up to 3 chapters (I'd definitely like to read more) not much plot has been revealed so I can't really give any comments about your plot at this point. But one thing I'd like to say is that many readers judge your book based on your first chapter. The first few chapters must be interesting enough to either reel the readers in or keep them entertained.

I know it's not easy to simply reveal the plot in the first chapters, no I'm definitely not telling you to do that. But however you may try to enhance your first few chapters is totally up-to you :)

|| { Characters } ||

✓ 9/10 ✓

As far as talking about your characters goes, I think your main lead, Izna, will be liked by the readers. I'm saying this as a reader as well as a writer. In the first chapter, I liked how cool and matured she sounded. If possible, I'd like to see her character just the same in the future chapters :)

|| { Originality } ||

✓9 /10 ✓

The same as with the case of 'plot', I don't think I can comment much of anything on your story's originality as the plot has not progressed enough for me to make any statement.

But it wouldn't be fair for me to leave this segment empty so I went ahead and read another chapter for reference.

And gladly, what I was fearing did not happened. What I feared was that you'd make the confession guy from first chapter the same guy who is going to move into her house.

At that point, I thought that that is really cliche.

But then it doesn't seem like you did that do all's good. Even from reading the scenes, I can tell that this isn't a copied style or anything.

I think your writing reflects your unique style that which is not found often in stories around wattpad, especially in the category of fanfictions, from which I myself am mainly concerned with.

So, the conclusion is that your story seems really original. Good job :)

|| { Flow } ||

✓ 4/10 ✓

Hmm, in the four chapters of your story that I've read, the plot did not really progressed much. As I stated before that the chapters' lengths are short, therefore the problem of the plot not progressing fast in the first few chapters arises.

I'd suggest for you to increase the length of your chapters, as I stated before, and this will automatically help you to fasten the flow of your plot.

[ Reviewer's Note ]

All in all, I'd like to say that your story can definitely be looked up to. You are very strong in some fields but a bit weak in some fields as well. With enough practice and experience, I'm sure you can take your writing to the professional level.

So, keep working hard and hang in there. You're doing really good ❤

Your total score is:

67 / 90

Please don't be sad if your score is low, it doesn't mean that your writing is bad. It just shows how much room you have to grow even after making it this far (^_^)

Thank you very much once again for joining my review shop. Hope the review helped you.

Have a nice day ❤

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