Title: Unevia, The White Locket

Author:  MythicQuill538

Summary:

The first few chapters focus on Raelyn's origins, her unlikely situation in life, and her introduction to learning magic. The last hope for saving Unevia lies within her. Drawn into a perilous journey, she embarks on a quest to find a legendary weapon that can end the reign of the demons. Armed with a mysterious white locket, she is joined by her mentor, a loyal bodyguard, and a quirky lizard companion.

Strength:

For the main character, Raelyn, despite being in an unfavorable situation in life, she keeps her hope of finding her place and is willing to work hard for it. The fantasy aspect is exciting, as she begins to learn magic from scratch.

Each chapter is vividly detailed, as if you are watching a short episode of a series. Every scene is well-paced and thoroughly explained.

For Improvement:

This is neutral feedback, based solely on my point of view. Given that this story is in the fantasy genre, you might consider incorporating more magical or fantasy elements even during the main character's buildup. You may or may not consider this—it's okay either way.

Here is also my suggestion: hint at an urgency (in any way you choose) that Raelyn needs to learn the magic she requires soon because of [indicate threat or goal], making this her personal mission. Again, this is up to you to consider.

Final Thoughts:

The pacing of the story, while reading it, feels like watching an episode of a series—very well detailed. I believe you have all these great fantasy scenes and plots playing in your imagination. The story looks great and promising, and I will continue to read and support you.

Keep on writing and good luck! More readers for your story!