Title: Sightless

Author: ClearShiny

Summary:

Crystal Clear Baltazar, a blind young woman who had always embraced life with positivity, found her world turned upside down when a mysterious man entered her life, trapping her in his controlling yet kind presence. As she navigated her new reality, she uncovered a web of deception and betrayal among those she once trusted, forcing her to confront hidden truths and explore her untapped potential.

Strength:

The story is still in its very early stage to create a review with, but based on the prologue and the frst 2 chapters, ClearShiny is giving an adventurous youthful vibe to the story. The cast is still being given a background, and so is the actual plot. There is a powerful spy movie appeal because of the mystery part in the 2nd chapter.

For Improvement:

Not much to give a review for improvement, but a few advice might help.

Just make sure the issue or conflict being build-up is clear without spoiling much.

Give extra focus to Crystal on her reaction and/or thoughts since she is the main character(Regardless of whether she is good or bad)

Conclusion:

Reminder, as much effort you are giving to the buildup, make sure you make a big ending, either a plot twist, or a big fight or a comeback of a broken main character.

Be inspired by other stories and authors and learn by reading similar-themed stories.

Keep writing and good luck with your story!