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The Gambler, The Thief, and The Black-Market Boss

Updated fandom list:

-Everything Broadway (This isn't like a show, I mean any broadway show. Ever. I'll go listen to the whole thing if I haven't seen it if need be)
-Vampire Diaries
-Twilight (Not in the fandom, but I saw the first movie, so I've got a gist)
-Blue Exorcist
-Vaguely know about warrior fandom (My cousin is in deep and rambles)
-Gravity Falls

-Undertale
-Legend of Zelda
-Noragami

If it's outside these, it's still okay to request! If it's something really out of my depth that I feel I can't properly review, I'll let you know! And your book only needs ONE chapter to be reviewed! 

We have a Naruto Fic by SSSRHA2! I love crack fics, especially ones that somehow still manage to have somewhat of a serious tone, so I'm really excited! They asked for neutral, so I'll do my best to be... well, neutral. 

I'M CRYING IT'S LIKE TWO IN THE MORNING AND THIS IS THE BEST THING I'VE EVER READ

Okay, so you've captured the crack part perfectly. It's out there, unexpected, and completely crazy! But it's also being taken somewhat seriously. You made this weird, twisty AU, and you're making it into a story and not a total shit show of humor, and other crazy things. It's amazing! I'm a little lost with the names. New people are popping up left and right, but I'm sure it's explained later. I'm completely lost in the best way possible. Intentionally lost. 

Your grammar is great. I see no problems there. It's well structured, and properly ordered. You did an amazing job! And you did explain in a thorough yet short paragraph what was happening in your prologue, which I was thankful for. I'm sort of really invested now?  And the forth wall breaks are just

Yes

Itachi has no fucking idea what's happening and I love it.

Fair point, they actually entered the academy at the age of eight, but this is a fanfiction UwU You may want to change the part where Sakura is like "You failed again?!" because I don't think they would have been in there priorly

SASUKE'S TAKING BITCHES OUT WITH CHLOROFORM I'M ACTUALLY CRYING Y'ALL HE DEADASS BREAKING INTO THE THIRD'S HOUSE

He got caught and the guy just left him to it there are real tears here you guys. To top it off, the grammar remains superb. I'd even say it gets better as you read on, and the paragraphs get fuller too. It's excellent. I can't even. Someone stop me.

S a k u r a ' s  m o m  i s  i n  o n  i t

Absolutely e n d  m e

I'm living for these "italics" fourth wall breaks.

Wait I was wrong it says they're twelve when they graduate. Worry not. I'm just a dumbass.

This is a permanent part of my library. I don't know if it's just half past two in the morning, or if it's my period, but I'm crying laughing. I'm probably overreacting but I don't care. This shit is funny as hell, the grammar is good, and just yes. You've done an excellent job, and you're a wonderful writer with a lot of talent who's definitely going places. I encourage anyone else who reads these reviews just for fun to go check her story out because I'm fucking

I'm

I'm dying y'all.

ITACHI SUPPORTS HIM TOO

AFTER FINDING A FUCKING JAR

OF HUMAN ASHES 

This is the best day ever. I could die and be satisfied knowing I'd seen this you guys. Sasuke is six, an assassin, and Itachi is there for it. She did THAT good with her story.

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