weirdly_lazy has a Naruto fanfiction called My Hero, hence the title, and they asked for a mOTHER FUCKING HIDAN REVIEW, BITCH

Fuck yeah let's do this shit, y'all. 

This is one of those badass AU stories where they don't add an OC, but change the entire damn plot and shit. In this one, and let's just praise all the damn Gods for this, Kakashi actually has the damn sense to adopt Naruto. And not leave his sensei's son to like, fucking rot and shit like that. 

So in the first chapter, I see some damn issues, which is fine and shit, don't worry. Y'all know how many issues my damn stories have. Anyways, the grammar is... yeah, I'm seeing some issues and shit like that. It's not that there's issues with the grammar, it's just like... Damn, I don't know how to put this. 

You need to separate the lines and shit. I can see that you did like, press enter and shit to sorta separate them, but with Wattpad's formatting and shit, you should put a full space between the paragraphs. 

Let's light this motherfucker up like it's the fourth of July, bitches. Alright, so this story could use some meat on its fuckin bones if you know what I mean. This story is as bare as a malnourished puppy with an STD or some shit like that. Add those details on. Pile that shit on, bro. Deadass. 

Is the wind blowing? Fuck, write it down. Some dude is humming the Friends' opening in the background? Fuck it. Write that shit down too. Minato is trying not to sneeze? Call his fuckin' ass out. No hesitation, bitch. Lethal. Go all out. Jason Bourne style.

So like, less than a paragraph in, we've got a time skip. It's not super long or some shit. It's not like "Five years later, Naruto is in ballet, and Itachi is his instructor." Nah, nothin like that shit. But it does skip a really fucking important part. And by that, I mean you've skipped Kurama's entire sealing. 

Now listen, kid, this shit ain't NASCAR. There ain't no need to rush. Write it all out in excruciating detail that's gonna leave your damn audience quaking. Destroy them. Whatever Kakashi smells, the readers should fucking know about. Yeah, he silently farts? Call him out harder than you called fucking Minato out, man. Show no mercy. 

Obito and Rin are here what the fuck

Bro you've gotta explain this shit a little more and separate your fucking paragraphs. I have no fucking idea what's going on. This is more complicated than the plot of lost. You can't just throw a bunch of damn information at us shitbags and expect our tiny-ass brains to compute. Write it out. Don't dunk us right into this shit. Waterboard us first. 

Grammar and detail, bro. You've got a really cool fucking plot sitting here. Cooler than the ice pop I just had, anyway. That was good shit. Almost as good as this story. You're missing commas in a lotta places. And hot damn, I want to know about every fucking breath Kakashi takes. Every thought, every movement. All that juicy shit. And please, God, take your time. You've got this shit bro. For real. 

Also the dead people are permanent? What the fuck when? Minato sorta used the reaper death seal to seal the fox, so the grim reaper has his entire ass soul bro. 

Damn we had a time skip or some shit. Bro, you gotta be smoother about that shit so you don't lose us. Good plot so far though. Fuck yeah.

Nope. I'm sorry bro but I'm so damn lost. I don't know what's happening before. Apparently Kakashi died but then we time skipped backwards, and when did Hayate show up again? Since when did Naruto befriend all the other Konoha twelve?  There's some gnarly shit, and you've got an idea, but you don't provide build up for them. You just plunge us right into them with little to no explaining and shit like that. You've gotta work on that bro. That's like, the biggest issue. It makes your story extremely hard to follow. 

Or I'm just a dumbass. That's a huge fucking possibility too.

I'm not sure who's dead and who's not anymore. The people are supposed to be dead are able to be seen by a whole lotta fucking people and you've made several year time skips. Like, four years just suddenly zooms by with no warning. 

I, no shit, have to give you an absolute A+ for being unique. I've never once seen a story line like this. It's a good story line, and you're so creative. And damn, those teams are more mismatched than my fucking sock drawer, bro. For real. Nobody's got shit on you. Your whole story idea is something you've pulled straight out of the fucking twilight zone. Be hella proud of that. 

The story structure is your main problem, it seems. You've gotta get those damn details, explain your ideas before you drop them. Don't rush so much, and please, for the love of god, drop the time skips. They're way too fucking long. Find a way to break them up, even if it's just a little. 

Other than that, your story is good as shit. No debate there.