🦥𝑰 𝒘𝒊𝒔𝒉 𝒘𝒆'𝒅 𝒏𝒆𝒗𝒆𝒓 𝒎𝒆𝒕 𝒂𝒈𝒂𝒊𝒏🦥
Ranker: Littlepotato2006
Author: its_anki
Title
First off, the grammar in the title is wrong. It should be “I wish we’d never meet again.” Love the originality of the title! It shows the conflict of emotion so well.
Cover
Secondly the author’s, aka yours username isn’t clearly visible in the cover so make it larger and maybe keep only your username and not the rest of the words.Other than that the cover is absolutely mesmerising! The combining of the picture and editing is praise worthy.
Blurb
The blurb is pretty simple and straight to the point. Love that. Tho during this specific bit,
"I wish we'd never met again."
"I wish I'd understood her."
It’s kinda unclear who is speaking? Because so far it was the guy's line then the girl’s and it was pretty clear but in this bit it confuses me as to who is saying which line.
Also the,
“Will she be able to forgive him for his misdeeds or leave her to repent for them forever?”
The use of the female pronouns twice is quite confusing, will SHE forgive him or leave HER to repent for them forever. I will guess that you meant to but he, so do fix that dutifully.
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