Type of Story: Original

Author: ooodles_

Story Rating Estimation: PG-13

Reads: 5,811

Votes: 771

Comments: ...

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She hated him. He had no idea about her. She was so against cussing. His day was incomplete without speaking profanities. She was violent. He was a big time softy. She was the outcast. He was the popular heartthrob.

They were two different people with two different worlds who were never meant to know each other, forget falling in love.

But then, she needed an escape and he needed.. Well, a new cell phone.

That's when their fate brushed and they ended up being The Babysitters.

Who knew, all it had to take was, serendipity.

Suggested If: you wanna read an original fic that's both romantic and funny

My Review: The plot is clichè, but at the same time not. Like, it's cliche in the sense that the guy and girl hate each other, but how they're forced to spend time together—by babysitting—is unique. It is kind of hard trying to keep up with all the main characters, best friends, boyfriends/girlfriends, etc. I think it just needs better organization. Your grammar/spelling is decent for the most part, but your writing is kind of choppy at times, and sometimes that makes it a little hard to follow what's going on. Overall, I think this story has potential to be cute—it just needs better organization.

Rating (0-5): 3

Other Notes: Not much else to say!