Type of Story: Original

Author: ooodles_

Story Rating Estimation: PG-13

Reads: 107,598

Votes: 7,217

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Description: Emily Augustus.

A girl with blue, almond eyes, brunette hairs and a fair complexion, is a perfect example of a nerd. A nerd with severe trust issues. The only default is that she hates Math. With absolutely no social life, Cindy and books are her only best friends.

Jake Cameron.

He is the darn hot new guy at Brooklyn High. He can make every boy jealous, and girls go crazy with his jet black hairs and angled jaw. No doubt, he was titled MR Perfect by everyone the day he entered the school premises.

But Emily finds this Mr Perfect annoying, insane and of course, not so perfect. And why won't she? After all, no normal person snatches away your book in their first meet.

Amidst of stupid fights, hang outs, emotional bonds, awkward situations, and unwanted proximity, will she be able to resist her feelings? Or will she start falling for this NOT SO PERFECT MR PERFECT?

{ Highest Ranking : #5 in Teen Fiction (30/10/16) }

Suggested If: you wanna read an original fic that's both romantic and dramatic

My Review: So, I definitely think the plot is clichè, and a few things definitely don't add up. Like why Emily's mother decided to get married so quickly (they went on what, two dates?) and how, after seven years, Nick didn't know Emily existed, despite the fact they were neighbors? But there WERE a few moments, like Emily's declaration during the soccer game, that were cute. Your grammar/spelling is decent but, like your other fic, your writing style is kind of choppy—though the number of characters were easier to keep up with this time. Overall, it wasn't great, but for a first fic it wasn't too terrible :)

Rating (0-5): 2

Other Notes: I know the rating is lowish, but your second fic got a 3/5. That means you seem to be improving—especially with originality in plot. Keep it up :)