Reviewer: EllenFairyBlue4

Comments: Escaping Conviction wasn't what I thought it was going to be. Please note I didn't read the blurb but I jumped right into chapter one. Chapter one opens with Jules coming to Jason's aid. I first thought this was a criminal and lawyer romance. But we don't quite get that. No we are thrust into the middle of a missing person case. Jason and Jules does have some nice chemistry going between them but I felt like Ellie's part in the story had more of an impact on me. I only read up to chapter eight but I could imagine the horrible things that Ellie will see during her kidnapping. I feel like Ellie will be a completely different person by the end of the story if the story ends with her being found as this is only book one. I love the interaction between Jules and Jason. It was short but their encounters showed they have a passionate past together. Would I continue to read? Most likely. While the things Ellie will go through makes me a little uncomfortable I still want to know how this story turns out. I look forward o more Jason and Jules encounters as I felt like I don't quite have a good gasp on them as far as their relationship goes. Anyway this story was well written minus a few maybe two issues. The story reminds me of another completely different story but I'm hoping it's not too graphic on the rape and/or violence scenes to where I can't finish it like I did with this other story I'm thinking about. Great job on capturing the emotional aspect. 

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Reviewer: JaszElise

Comments: In all my years of reading romance novels this one is by far the most rarest and best book I've ever read.The male MC Jason is somewhat like the other female MC except that he was in the military and thought it was the best idea he ever made only this time his idea by leaving his girlfriend and the town where he grew up had cause a huge butterfly effect in his life.

His ex girlfriend seems ok to me but after I read chapter 5 where she was talking to Andrew Ascot who acts like he's the gift from God seems like she was really hurt when Jason broke up with her.The plot was definitely rare to me because it involves scandalous rumors, human trafficking, and a lot of heated emotions that will come up in the later chapters.

This story really pulled me in like never before. I couldn't stop reading it because I prefer romance stories that don't always has the weak female MC and the arrogant male MC. The plot was amazing and the characters are definitely good and I need to read the whole thing because it's way too good to put down.

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Reviewer: ReggaeGirl4

Comments: -I read until including chapter 6.1.

- so my review is based on what I read so far

-will definitely continue reading after my review and will leave comments in case I change my mind about any of the following review points over the course of the story

-maybe ensure that conversation/dialogs sound like people would actually talk that way, some dialogs sound stiff while others seem really authentic

-the Ellie/Sasha storyline was hard for me to get into as the characters weren't introduced enough to sympathize with them

-Jason and Jules have great chemistry in most of their dialogs that show the tension between them, and their longing for each other very well

-the pace of the book is neither to slow nor to fast

-there is not a lot of the character's background woven into the story, I would have liked to get to know them better

-description of settings and places are well placed and not too long, some may say the story needs more of it but I do not feel that way, sometimes I even lose interest when there is too much detail 

-I did not spot one single typo, punctuation-, grammer-, and spelling mistake

-new paragraph for each time a person said something and pleasant paragraph length

-author is a talented story teller so I would definitely read more of her work, she has worked hard and it shows-I had a pleasant, flowing, entertaining reading experience

-I did not notice any gaps or things that weren't logical-it was cliché free, pretty imaginative/original -good work and I'll leave my thoughts as I keep reading

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Reviewer: KimberlyTanithMarie

Comments: Time got away from me these last two weeks so unfortunately I was only able to squeeze in the first 5 chapters.So far, I must say that I am really enjoying the build up. I love how the author takes her time to carry us through every scene. She manages to give us some back story without data dumping and I can really appreciate that.Even though the tension between Jason and Jules is subtle, I can tell that they have a lot of chemistry and I am really looking forward to seeing when they stop fighting their attraction for each other and give in. It would be nice to see them get a second chance, Jason clearly wants to, so it's going to be fun seeing him try to win her back. I love seeing these types of plots, especially when the two characters have such engaging witty banters, it makes for such a fun read.I can definitely see myself reading this book until the end as I am curious to see how the story goes. Keep up the great work!

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Reviewer: BellaFrost1617

Comments: Even though I read the blurb for this book, I really had no idea what to expect. It is amazing. I had to force myself to put it down just so I could write this review. I read up to chapter 8.1 and then needed to stop. The emotions you've invoked are so powerful that I don't think it's possible not to hang on the story. It's engaging and filled with inner thoughts that work so well. Jason, Jules and Ellie are all such realistic and well rounded characters that I found it so easy to sympathise with them and understand what their going through. Jules' irritation at that Andy creep was perfect. He was so grating that I instantly hated him. But Ellie's point of view gave some great insight into his character and that maybe he's not as in control as he pretends to be. Jason's rage and desire make for an interesting comparison. And his hidden feeling for Jules left me laughing at certain points. Love a man who tries to hide his arousal and speaks his mind. And I can see how he and Ellie are siblings with similar mannerisms. The strength of your females is fantastic. Jules' determination and confidence really came through clearly in the first few lines. Ellie's thought process despite her intense fear and horrible situation is great. It shows that while she's only seventeen that she's still got enough wits to fight to survive and I love seeing that. 

Your story structure is actually very strong. I like that you're not jumping between perspectives mid-chapter, which is irritating to read, and that you're focusing on each character in well thought out detail that creates a varied view on the situation around them. That made the emotions much stronger because I was becoming invested all three main characters. I definitely felt fear for Ellie. I'm hoping Jason and Jules get to her in time. But overall, the story structure is secure and strong, and I think it all fits well together. The military experience is obviously there with Jason, but not being shown in detail straight from the get go. So you've got that show don't tell working very well. Your balance for the story is beautiful and really enjoyable. You've definitely managed to keep the engagement up and the investment in the main characters' relationships and well-being is perfect. There's not really a lot more I can say, but I am definitely going to read more. Great work. I'm loving Escaping Conviction and curious to see where you're characters are going in this book and what will follow in its sequels.

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Reviewer: LivEvansWrites

Comments: What a fun story to read. Unfortunately, I didn't get as far along as I would have liked to, but I did make it to chapter 10.1, so that's something. The pacing of this story feels just like that of a published novel, so I know I have only just started to get into the meat of it. I totally intend to finish it once the season for the EBC is over.The author's writing is fantastic. Greer's level of descriptions suits the setting well, and it helped me get into Jules' and Jason's heads. Both characters are wonderfully complex, and from the third or fourth chapter, I was desperately shipping them. The overall array of characters is fantastic too, and while Andy feels a little over the top, his involvement in the plot is fascinating and his reactions have been surprising thus far. I'm looking forward to seeing how it unfolds.

Really, the story is beautifully polished with barely any errors (I think I caught only one or two misspelled words, or something) that did not at all detract from the story. I mean, heck, even traditionally published novels have one or two errors in them. It is clear that lot of work has gone into cleaning this story up just right.I totally agree with your strongest writing traits. LOVE the characters, their back story, and the overall feel of the novel.

I went into this without reading the brief for Escaping Conviction (admittedly, I forgot to check the EBC Schedule and opened Escaping Conviction out of curiosity- imagine my surprise when I realised I was actually supposed to be reading it! Winning!). As I read through, the only thing that I could pick up on was the ordering of the scenes/structure of the overall plot so far. I was debating whether or not to say anything, but seeing as it was listed as your perceived 'weakest' writing trait, I might drop it. I hope you don't mind :) Now, this could just be because I haven't finished reading the story, so please take it with a grain of salt, but I felt that perhaps Ellie's scenes were a little too much too soon. I feel like the real catch of this novel is the suspense and the investigation, so - personally - I would love to have seen that information spread out more, or peppered in, or dropped in related to specific triggers in Jason and Jules' perspectives. I feel it would keep the momentum going and pages turning faster if we had to wait for these snippets of intel. Now, honestly, this is just my own thoughts after having only gotten through like 20% of the book, so I am sure it all balances out. At the end of the day, it is your story, so you know how it is best told.

Long story short, I can't wait until I have a bit more free time so I can finish this one. I NEED to see Jules and Jason get together again, and I NEED to see what happens to Ellie <3

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Reviewer: KeraLee123

Comments: The first chapter absolutely hooked me right away. I love when main female characters are strong and confident. She clearly is a woman who takes no shit.I love the idea, she's a lawyer who finds out her client is an old lover, "the one that got away." Although, she hates to admit that he got past her hard exterior. The second chapter is fantastic, there's something about reading through the male characters point of view that I absolutely love!The plot absolutely pulled me in, I found it unique & in no way did I have to force myself to read it. In fact, I had to force myself to put it down!The pacing was perfect, it followed our characters seamlessly and didn't give away too much too soon. I would absolutely read more of this authors work. This book is very well written & I can't honestly find a single mistake. I loved it from the very start!

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Reviewer: Selly1010

Comments: 1. What did you think the book was about?The book was about Julie who is defending Jason as his attorney. They used to be a couple before.

2. Did you feel the book fulfilled your expectation? Yes. I think the author executed the story very well, romance mixed with the suspense.

3. What about the plot? The plot is really good. In the suspense romance, it's have been common plot that two person involve in the problem (murder, kidnapping, and etc) and being love each other. As Jule and Jason formerly in love and meet again after years to find Jason sister who is missing.

4. How about the character? Are they believable?Jule and Jason are believable character. I love that Jule is a strong woman that can dominate Jason.

5. How the pacing of the chapters?The pacing quite slow, that a day in story written in around 3 chapter and more. But I am not read the whole story so I can't assume.

6. How about the description?The description is good. The character's act, expression, and feeling are described well.

7. Describe what you like and dislike of the writer's style? The story flow really smooth and interesting. I like the character of Julie, she is pretty, smart, and strong.

8. Would you read more about the author's work?Yes, absolutely

9. Comment for the strongest or weakest writing trait, alongside with the help.I almost can't find the weakness. It's really interesting. There not much narration but the dialogues can give a lot information. The dialogues itself very interesting.

Overall it's a good story. Realizing that this was your first story, you are a good writer I think. You are strong in putting informational dialogues an also the description in character action. The story also went smooth. Keep up the good work

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Reviewer: Natalieemm15

Comments: 1) What did you think the book was about?Judging by the blurb, I was expecting a romance between a waitress and an author. I've never seen this combination of people in a romance novel before so I was excited to meet the characters.

2) Did you feel the book fulfilled your expectations?I didn't really have expectations but it's something different. I'm a tragic victim of reading the same kind of romances over and over, so I like things that bring me out of my comfort zone.

3) What about the plot? Does it pull you in? Or did you have to force yourself to read the book?Immediately, I was drawn to Maggie's character. There's something so endearing about the working girl MC who's doing everything she can to grind and survive. I'll admit, I wish there was more build up to the meet cute because I'd have liked to established more of Maggie's background before having been immediately introduced to this guy in the club, but I still like what I'm reading.

4) Do the characters seem real and believable? Yes. I mentioned this before, but I really like Maggie's personality so far. I like a heroine that works hard whether she's a corporate professional or a waitress.

5) How was the pacing of the chapters? The chapters move pretty quickly as does the flow of the story. I'm not quite a huge fan of instalove so the dazzled at first sight moments aren't my favorite, but I think the author has a good balance between dialogue, interior monologue and narrative.

6) How was the description of the chapters? Good, however I think the author describes the emotions of characters with repetitive vocabulary. For example, the words 'jealous' and 'little green monster' were used more than twice when describing Maggie's envy of Julie.

7) Describe what you like and dislike about the writer's style. The writing style is pretty basic. Which can work in the author's advantage if the pacing of the story is good and the story has a good plot, but I think the writer has the creativity and capability to mature the writing a bit.

8) Would you read more of the author's work? Yes. I love all kinds of romance stories and will read pretty much any romance as long as there are two people falling in love. Excited to see what's in store for Maggie and Jackson.

9) Strongest Writing Trait: Dialogue and originality. Weakest Writing Trait: repetitive vocab, slightly immature writing at times.

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Reviewer: jumping_jiminys

Comments: 1. Conspiracies, very prison break type vibes I am getting from the story description—all with that with XXX.

2. A solid start to the story, I quite enjoy law and order type stories that have a bit more going on aside from the romance and the steamy romps.

3. Hooks you for sure, just the investigative element pulled me in convict with the help of his lawyer reminds me of this tv show I watched once.

4. They are because they are all so different but not in your face different just the small nuances how they act, how they talk and move and the fact that it is in 3rd pov omniscient seems to work wonders in separating the characters which at a time can be a weakness in some.

5. The pacing was excellent; I couldn't fault it.

6. You do great in setting the tone and the emotions to go with it. I'm not overwhelmed but also not underwhelmed with the scenes, which is an outstanding balance.

7. I like how you manage to juggle all the characters with the pov you chose.

8. Definitely, is there another book in the making?

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Reviewer: JamesEnd49

Comments: Dear G-Riv:

Wow. You have a big undertaking here. I respect that, and a challenging subject, too. Your writing is professional and the story is well crafted, but personally I had a difficult time getting excited to read more. I to chapter 7. I found myself wanting more sexyness to the story, and less Hollywood. The characters didn't make me want to follow them. The intro felt to much like you are trying to write out a blockbuster movie at gun-point. The heroine too perfect, and charmed in her career success. The regret wracked suitor too angstful to rekindle the relationship. If my sister had gone missing and i was being framed, I don't know that I would be trying to score. And the McLaren...who drives those other than balding old men in a heavy ED funk trying to pick up teenage girls? 

I did like your choice of bad guys. I have a natural aversion for the rich and powerful. Andy seems like a southern version of Larry Leisure suit. Maybe too much so. He was kinda fun to follow, although I don't see how he couldn't cop a clue and the point bank way Jules let's him know where he stands. It seems like he has it all. Not sure why he would risk that in a scheme to kidnap and traffic young girls? 

Then Sasha and Ellie seem way too naive. Are they really going to fall for this Nikolia's pitch? Doesn't the lack of back up to the story set off alarm bells? Maybe not. Maybe I'm being too harsh. You've got a good bit of story telling going here. It just didn't get me excited enough to finish.

James    

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Reviewer: Daenerys1417

Comments: 1. How many chapters did you read? To chapter 10.1 – Death Drop

2. What did you think the book was about? I thought the book would be a crime mystery involving ex-lovers.

3. Did you feel that the book fulfilled your expectations? I think so. There was definitely a romance element between old flames where something happened in the past that pushed them apart. At the same time there was the kidnapping crisis and the mystery behind it.

4. What about the plot? I thought your book started out well by introducing Jules as the strong, no nonsense heroine who also has a vulnerability for Jason. I was a bit surprised when you jumped to Ellie's point of view because I feel it took a little bit away from the mystery aspect of what happened to her. It all became very clear to the reader early-on and then it's just a matter of will Jason and Jules put it all together. I think you could have added a bit more suspense by showing more clues early on for Jason and Jules to find without giving away what happened to Ellie and her friend quite so soon.

5. Do the characters seem real and believable? For the most part. Jules definitely comes across as strong, independent, but also vulnerable. She doesn't want to deal with a broken heart, but she has a soft spot for Jason. Meanwhile Jason comes off as tough, protective, but also a romantic when it comes to Jules. I thought Andy "Asshat" Ascot was a bit of a cartoonish villain, he was so bad it was over the top, but maybe he really is just that spoiled, demanding, and out-of-touch.

6. How was the pacing of the chapters you read? The pacing was good. The chapters were a good length that made me eager to get to the next one. I liked how you broke up some of the longer chapters into multiple sections that made it easier to read.

7. How was the description of the chapters you read? I thought your description was great. You spent a lot of time describing the surroundings, sounds, taste, tone of voice, facial expression, body gestures, etc. All of this helps the reader to fully immerse oneself into the story and it was well done.

8. Describe what you liked or disliked about the writer's style? I liked how you gave different points of view and wrote in 3rd person which is my preferred style. It gives a chance for the reader to jump into a character's head and get their point of view. Jules, for example, comes off tough but her inner dialogue and the way Jason noticed her blushing or shifting uncomfortably lets the reader know that she's not as confident as she puts off.

9. Would you read more of the author's work? Yes, I definitely would.

10. Comment on their strongest and weakest writing trait along with their help request and give overall thoughts: I thought your character development was done well. You quickly introduced Jason and Jules and then as the story went on, you peeled back layer by layer to make them more vulnerable. I'm rooting for their relationship and hope it works out for them. Their chemistry jumps out of the page and the sexual tension is hot. I also liked how you mixed in your legal knowledge into the story. It's very apparent that you have a good grasp of law enforcement and the legal process. The story structure is fine, but as I mentioned earlier, maybe think about not giving away what happens to Ellie and her friend quite so soon. Maybe more clues could have been dropped using conversations with Andy or even his POV. Overall, I enjoyed the read. Thank you for sharing.

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Reviewer: PixieStormcrow

Comments: Where to start? The story drew me in at the very first chapter and I must applaud at the unique opening. You have a way of using simple yet descriptive language that draws a very exact image in the reader's mind. The language is non-repetitive, succinct and has just the right amount of detail that I cannot say enough good things about. 

The characters are absolutely wonderful. I especially enjoyed Jules as a strong female lead who would not take any bullshit from anyone. In just a few short chapters, you have managed to illustrate all these traits without telling but rather, showing through her interactions with the other characters. It was such a delight to read. 

I was surprised so far to read more of Jason's point of view than Jules although I shouldn't be given the blurb. I kind of wished I could see into Jules' head more but probably because I absolutely love her as a character. One thing in that was I kept getting lost in which point of view I was in. That is not a flaw in the writing as each chapter stayed true to only one character's inner thoughts but perhaps it is the lack of self-references that convolutes it. Perhaps more direct thoughts would be useful. If you find this to be a valid piece of feedback, I can go back and see where I can point out places for it. 

The only other thing I will point out is that the chapters felt short and the numbering threw me off. I gather when ready to publish, this would not be an issue but I'm not sure the reason to go with the specific numbering chosen. The reason I even mention this is because the shorter chapters lends themselves to less tension. Each chapter ending should prompt the user to read on, to find out more, perhaps even a cliffhanger. While the story is wonderful and the conflict is highlighted early on, I am not getting enough tension to urge me to keep reading in an I-will-not-sleep-to-keep-going kind of way. 

That said, I cannot emphasize how skilled you are as a writer and how well you weave convincing and wonderful characters that you want to root for, scream at and shake. I hope you will finish edit and put this book out there soon.

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