Reviewer: Capri5211

Comments: I really enjoyed reading this story! I'm not all the way through but plan to finish it very soon! I thought the intro was so well done. What a captivating scene you created for the readers to enjoy as we are introduced to Heather. I thought you did a wonderful job of making the scene tangible as you showed us what was happening vs telling. You have great descriptive language! I was able to visualize colors, imagine scents, and more by the details you gave. 

By the end of chapter three readers find out that this is a flashback to what happened 13 years ago. I think this is a very unique twist to the story and keeps readers hooked with wanting to know what happened after their encounter. Great job! Looking forward to reading more!

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Reviewer: JaszElise

Comments: This story has made my mind blank and shock because when I read the description I thought it was about a woman trying to excite her normal life. But not after reading the whole thing I was DEAD wrong.The female protagonist Heather Coswel remind of a femme fatale in a 1990s erotic thriller movie and when I read that part where she was teasing the security kinda portrays her as a woman who wants to push the boundaries.And the elevator scenes between her and the security Jonathan aka Big Jon was very how I do say kinda intense and very too hot for me.The whole story itself really made me speechless like I didn't know that her curiosity outside of her wealthy mundane life could her lead to a path of sex, power, control, and public humiliation just to feel satisfied.I was just in awe of this story and the plot was shocking and unexpected still but it was good and I hope the author can make more stories like this in the future.

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Reviewer: KeraLee123

Comments: The summary was super brief, almost a log-line rather than a summary, so it left a lot to the imagination and I had no clue what it was about. 

The first chapter is fantastic! It has such a great opening which lures us in from the start and the whole chapter keeps us on edge. Who is this mysterious man who turned the page on our heroine and beat her at her own game? 

The plot is very interesting, I'm not sure where we're going but I'm definitely down for the ride! The characters seem intense, but real. They aren't exactly relatable, but who cares! It's a book where anything flies. lol 

The chapters were short, but super easy to follow along with and it didn't jump around from scene to scene. All of the beginning chapters themselves seem to be following the same fifteen minutes with random stops between. I don't dislike it though, I suppose it makes it easier for people who are just picking up a book for a few minutes. 

I do really like the book and I'm interested to see where it's headed! 

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Reviewer: ReggaeGirl4

Comments: 1. I think the book is about the consequences of Heather's actions, playing games and a lot of elevator sex.

2. The blurb and cover kind of made it hard for me to start reading, I had to make myself read it. And then I started. It is unique and fresh — very much unlike any story I had read on Wattpad. I found myself intrigued with the plot. I'm currently reading chapter 9, so my review is based on what I have read so far.

3. The pace of the book is just right, neither too slow nor too fast.

4. Heather is believable and relatable but on the other hand, I don't feel I like I have gotten to know her in nine chapters. What does she want? Who is she? What about her past? Donovan and Jonathan behave authentically but other than that they don't have depth. It still was a great read, don't get me wrong, but that is exactly why I would have loved getting to know everyone better.

5. There is no random skipping or gaps. Everything makes sense and flows.

6. The scenes, settings and emotions are well described and harmonize. It shines a new light on elevators, that's for sure ;-)

7. Of all the office sex stories out there, yours is by far the most original one, with the zipless fuck and a fake cat's tail as unique signature features. I love the back and forth between now and then because it made me want more of what became of Heather.

8. I would definitely read more of your work, because you're a talented storyteller/author and your story is just so original, exciting and fresh.

9. Your strongest writing trait is creating a great erotic atmosphere and your sex scenes were hot and very well written but maybe let us learn a little more about the characters. And I don't know if I'm just being a prude now, but I wish the book was a little less like one big sex scene. A very steamy super hot sex scene but maybe a little too much of it overall. BUT really — don't get me wrong, it is a unique story and I thoroughly enjoyed it.

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Reviewer: jumping_jiminys

Comments: 1. This story is going to be a own your sexuality book. Crumbling stigmas and shattering stereotypes.

2. I assumed from the first chapter sexy little romp in the elevator leaves he reminiscing for the rest of her life but oh no ma'am I didn't expect fighting, and so beautifully written.

3.I didn't have to force ANYTHING!! The tension that a diamond drill struggled to pierce through it was visible and so exciting to read and catch second-hand blush from.

4.All the characters bring their bit to the story, and without them, the story wouldn't be the same. It shows how character orient this story seems to be these personalities are pinnacle to the flow of the narrative.

5. Pacing is wonderful each end of the chapter forces you to continue reading. You have to know what is going to happen next!

6. The descriptions were well done, you know when you extend it and when only a few descriptive words will suffice, and I love that balance you have.

7. I love the narrator, the bits in between dialogue tie the whole story together, you know the narrator knows more, and you want it all the be revealed.

8. Of course! The sensuality alone in this book means I've got to read others.Of course! The sensuality alone in this book means I've got to read others.

9. I would say that though it's not mentioned paragraphing seemed to be the only weakness that stood out to me. The rule I follow is the TiP ToP method-- Time, Person, Topic, and PlaceFollow this, and it will significantly help with paragraphing.

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Reviewer: GreerRivers

Comments: I would like to preface this review by saying I don't think I'm the right audience for this book. Many of the things that turned me off of this book seemed too blatant for anything in my review to come as a surprise, and if everything was intended the way I took it, I am not the right audience. 

I didn't know what this book was about from the title or blurb so I had no expectations. I read almost all of it to see if there was more to it, but when I realized that 80% of it is the main character having sex, I went to skimming. 

I am not sure what to think about the plot. I don't think it really had one, as I'm pretty sure it was just one long sex scene in a flashback. Like I said, I read most of the book because I was trying to figure out if there was more to it. To be honest, it seems like it skirts the line between erotica (sexual journey through a storyline, character development, plot) and porn (sex without any of that other pesky stuff). 

The characters do not seem real or believable. I had trouble figuring out how old the FMC was. She at one point seemed very very young, especially since the FMC talks about going to a prep school. Like not appropriate to write about erotically young. But the first chapter says she's 19 so I guess that cures it? I was unable to relate to any of the characters but I don't think I'm meant to. The FMC seems like an extremely horny teenager who has unprotected sex with a very hairy doorman in an elevator and there's a rich man involved somehow who speaks like he's in a regency novel. 

Like I said, I was confused by whether there was a plot or not. I'm leaning toward there wasn't. I was still confused though because in the beginning it seemed like she was having a flashback, but then the whole book turned into a flashback of sorts and I was confused as to what was present and what wasn't. I was also confused because I thought the whole flashback happened on a girls' trip with her momma at a hotel, but then she was very familiar with the doorman, as if she lived there, so I'm not sure. 

As far as descriptions go, this was one of the reasons why I don't think I'm the right audience for this book. I don't know how to say this well so I apologize if I offend anybody with this comment. But the word choice in this book seemed very masculine but in a locker room sort of way and off-base with every single romance/erotica book I've ever read. The FMC's reactions, emotionally and physical body responses, were odd to me. I'm talking orgasms puddling to the floor like an omegaverse book, the usage of "untamed muff", "vulva" "ovulating" "pubes"; the description of the man the FMC has sex with as a man with gross socks he sticks in the FMC's mouth and a broad hairy back. I've never seen these used in a sexual situation or really otherwise in a book, which is why I'm not sure I'm the right audience. 

I think the above comment also goes to the author's writing style. I felt the style and word choices were too crass for a typical romance/erotica novel. 

I wouldn't read more by this author because I can't imagine that I'm the intended audience. 

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Reviewer: BellaFrost1617

Comments: I had no idea what to expect with Emergency Stop, but the name alone was fascinating and would have drawn me in if I had found it in a book store on a shelf. I'm naturally curious like that. But to read and find out that this girl has a fixation on the emergency stop button of an elevator to start with had me wondering what exactly what it meant and I automatically considered trauma. Reading on, it started to seem as if that was exactly where it was going, but the twists of this story, while not very long (I read the whole story) certainly kept me hooked as a reader. The discussion of what would happen on the twelfth floor made me read on in curiosity to learn what was going to happen. I never expected the ending of the story to be the way it was, or for the ultimate darkness that came as a result of the events that make the main character associate the emergency stop button as so much more than a safety device. And I think that might be what the author was going for. Turning the emergency stop from a safety device to a deviant method of sexual experimentation, and later on something so much darker. I have to say, I love the foreshadowing of the story, the cycle of beginnings and endings replicating each other, and the way that perception is played with.

All in all, it's such an original, exciting and dark idea that I found myself compelled to keep reading on. The author's creativity and openness is apparent from the start and it's clear that these are their strongest traits all the way through. Spelling wasn't as much of a weakness as they thought, since I didn't find myself stumbling with miss-spelt or missing words, or the dreaded confusing of their, they're and there or to, two and too. Grammar needs a little work, like putting commas in the right places and breaking up sentences, as well as separating paragraphs, like melding two people's dialogue into one paragraph. But that all seems pretty minor and easily fixed. The vocabulary is superbly used, though technical terms mixing with slang for sex might be something to look at. Other than that, there were a few moments of tense change from past to present, and at the end to first from third, but again not too serious or hard to correct. I absolutely loved the italic analysis of the adult version of the character as footnotes to what the teenaged version was doing, and the author created a powerful emotional aura with the work. It was so easy to sense everything that Heather was going through as she changed throughout the story, and that change was clear to witness and inevitable when looking back at her beginning. Definitely a brilliant book full of erotic excitement, twisting intrigue and a dark coming into their power, and I loved reading it.

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Reviewer: KimberlyTanithMarie

Comments: I read the first 6 chapters and I'll have to admit that this was not my kind of book. 

I mean, I enjoy a good fast burn every now and again but the pacing in this was just way too quick, making the story seem very unrealistic to me. Not to mention the interaction between Heather and Donavan, I was unable to get any sort of connection from them, especially as the chapters were so short. 

Heather's personality seemed very wishy washy, as one minute she appears very confident and overly sexual, then the next minute it's like she forgets who she is and is acting all innocent. 

I think the problem for me is that everything just seemed too unrealistic, I know that it's fiction and anything can happen, but I prefer my characters to be a bit more believable. 

I would also suggest putting some more spaces within the paragraphs. Many of them were just one giant block of text and that made following the story even more difficult, especially where dialogue was concerned I had no idea who was saying what at times. 

I do believe that with a bit of rewriting, this can be a really decent piece of erotica. 

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Reviewer: PixieStormcrow

Comments: To be honest, I have rarely read a story that had me so conflicted as this one so bear with me while I work through my thoughts.

First of all, your writing style is strong, flowing beautifully with a level of sophistication that I enjoy. Technically, you balance description, dialogue, inner thoughts and action well, enough thus I feel draws a reader in. 

Perhaps that is why I am all the more uncomfortable reading the story itself. In addition, I have read about seven chapters. So, keep in mind that I come from a very specific perspective so take what I am about to say with a grain of salt.

I am several chapters in and although there hasn't actually been any full sex scenes, the story reads much more like erotica than erotic romance, likely because of its focus on pure sex alone. This also leads to another point where the female MC feels much more like a guy's fantasy of a girl than an actual female character. I think you may be able to tackle both problems by rounding her out as a character. I want to see her interact with her mother in the beginning. I want to know about her beyond her sexuality. I'd also like to learn more by seeing rather than her narrating. In other words, showing rather than telling.

I want to also caution that given there is some dubious consent going on, especially the first elevator scene where there was blackmail in addition to being subdued despite her self defense. You may be running into some territories that you would want to stay away from. Keeping the story as is may get it deleted by Wattpad admins. You may also want to consider putting the story on other sites more geared towards erotica rather than Wattpad.

I'd also like to see more in the blurb to get a better sense of the story before reading. While I know there is a lot of debate about trigger warnings, this story is clearly not for everyone covering some very controversial topics. A more flushed out blurb would at least give the reader some idea and help them determine whether they want to dive into the story or not.

From a technical point of view, I also want to draw attention to the majority of the story being a flashback. It is a common device by can remove some of the immediacy a reader wants to feel with a story. Furthermore, switching between the flashback and present may create more confusion and complexity. Consider perhaps showing things chronologically and separating the story to two parts.

Again, these thoughts are from the point of view of someone trying to promote healthy relationships so take from the feedback what you may find helpful. I hope this may help a little.

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Reviewer: Selly1010

Comments: 1. What did you think the book was about?Honestly, I don't really figure out where the story will lead (as I read to chapter 'Ding Ding). The story is about Heather and her encounter with the Donovan and it lead to the 'sex' thing.

2. Did you feel the book fulfilled your expectation? I don't think so. I am not really understand what the story all about. It like just going around the past story of Heather about the 'sex' experience with Donovan and maybe she will be a wild girl int he next chapters.

3. What about the plot? As I note on the above question, The plot was somewhat simple. (As I said that I just read the only few chapters) it's about Heather with Donovan strange affection to her. I want to be honest that I am the type who liking the story with the whole plot, I mean not just talking about 'sex' story that I read in this book.

4. How about the character? Are they believable?I can't really judge the character was Beliau able or not since it not really read the character development. I just can't relate with them as why Heathen fall to the man she just met and then they make up things and other. I can understand if the story just tell about erotica that no need the complicated plot or real story. In a simple word just tell about sex or related to it.

5. How the pacing of the chapters?The pacing was somewhat fast. The chapter length is somewhat too short for me.

6. How about the description?I didn't find so much description. As the writer just telling about the characters but didn't explore for other things.

7. Describe what you like and dislike of the writer's style? I am the kind of person who trying to compliant in writing rule. I found that you not really doing that rule. Dialogues need to put in the different chapters so that readers will know the changing dialogues between the characters. The paragraph length is the one that also bothered me. Writer should divide the paragraph to several paragraph.

8. Would you read more about the author's work?As I said I the type who liking to read the Story that real story (doesnt mean your story isnt real story. The story I mean that not just about erotica scene) so that I will not really to read her/his work. I will give a peek for another story but if the work just the similar, may be I won't get it finish.

9. Comment for the strongest or weakest writing trait, alongside with the help.I don't know whether writer new in writing or not. But she/he need to read or learn to write in the right rule. I know that it was your story so you can write as you want, but avoiding the writing rule can push back the reader to read the story as reader will face difficulties. At least learn to divide the paragraphs, dialogues and technical thing first.

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Reviewer: EllenFairyBlue4

Comments: Emergency Stop wasn't what I thought it would be. Sure it had sex in the elevator but it wasn't what I thought it would be. I was slightly disappointed that nothing happened between Heather and Donavan. You introduced him, but nothing happened between him and Heather. I loved that she tricked the other guy in the end and made a name for herself there, but don't get me wrong. I felt like the story ended abruptly. It left me with so many questions. The writing was great. I saw nothing wrong with it. I don't think Heather is as navie as Donavan thinks. I wished I could have seen his face when he saw his underling hand cuffed to the elevator. Anyway this story left me wanting more but not more at the same time. I mean I read this story twice in one sitting which is nice. It pull me in at first but after I saw that there wasn't going to be more I became a little disappointed. That's my only issue. I wanted something to happen between Donavan And Heather. I know he might be older but you showed him in a way that caught my interest. He seemed skilled you know?

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Reviewer: LivEvansWrites

Comments: From the blurb and the early concept, I was curious about how this story would go. Admittedly, I had a difficult time reading it and only got about 6 or 7 chapters in and skimmed the rest. I wish this had come with a bit of a content warning because this story contains some pretty niche material. I am sure there are plenty of people who would enjoy it, but it was not my cup of tea. I don't want to go into too much detail about why I was unable to engross myself in it, because that isn't the point of the review, but all I will say is that the warning signs for abusive emotional and sexual relationships were something I couldn't continue reading.

From a technical standpoint, the author was good at getting into the head of the character. The interludes of information from a different point in time (italics) were an interesting way to bring that element of intrigue and anticipation into the story. There were a few technical things that could do with some playing around, such as correcting dialogue punctuation, and using more paragraphs for said dialogue. Apart from that, there wasn't much that I could pick out. The sex scenes were well-described, as well, and clearly a focal point of the story. 

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Reviewer: Daenerys1417

Comments: 1. How many chapters did you read? 14, I read the entire book.

2. What did you think the book was about? The blurb is pretty vague, but based on the first chapter, I thought the book was definitely going to be some sort of romance or encounter between Heather and Donavan.

3. Did you feel that the book fulfilled your expectations? The book was not what I expected but I was surprised in a good way. The book was actually about Heather, who was already a tease, taking it up several levels and turning the tables on men who thought they could groom and control her. Now she is known as the "Red Bush" and inspiring women and couples in elevators everywhere! Great twist.

4. What about the plot? I thought the plot was very original with an unexpected twist at the end. It definitely gave me something to think about, the value of a "zipless fuck" (lol), and I enjoyed seeing Heather grow and explore before ultimately taking control of her situation and outsmarting her Dom.

5. Do the characters seem real and believable? I thought the characterization was okay. More of a backstory on Heather beyond just being a pampered school girl bored with boys her own age would have been nice. However, her inner thoughts and the comments from the characters around her definitely helped to describe her personality and motivations. She comes across as confident, sassy, and a little spoiled.

6. How was the pacing of the chapters you read? I thought the chapter length was good. Some of the paragraphs were a bit chunky and could have been broken down into smaller ones for ease of reading, but overall, I flew through the story and read it to the end. The end of each chapter made me eager to see what happened next.

7. How was the description of the chapters you read? I thought your descriptive language was good. You described surroundings well, character appearance, tone of voice, clothing. Your language was almost poetic at times, well done.

8. Describe what you liked or disliked about the writer's style? I liked your style of weaving the story as a flashback while present-day Heather reminisces on what happened 13 years ago. As far as grammar, I would just say to watch out for spelling errors, start a new paragraph for your dialogue when the speaker changes, and look out for mixing up past and present tense for some of your words.

9. Would you read more of the author's work? Definitely.

10. Comment on their strongest and weakest writing trait along with their help request and give overall thoughts: I definitely agree that creativity and openness are strong writing traits of yours. This story was original, fresh, sexy, and also had a hint of humor in several places, especially at the end where it's clear that Heather is inspiring women all over the place as the "Red Bush". You listed spelling as a weakness and it's definitely something to work on that should be caught easily enough with an editing tool or having someone read it over for you. When I write without an editor (Beta), I like to read my chapter out loud and that tends to help me catch errors easier than if I just read in my head. This story wasn't what I expected, but in a pleasant way, I loved the twist and originality. Thanks for sharing.

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Reviewer: Natalieemm15

Comments: 1) What did you think the book was about?Before I began reading, from the blurb, I imagined maybe a strong woman in a professional setting, probably an office job or a male dominated field where she has to navigate 'the boys club' ways of work culture.

2) Did you feel the book fulfilled your expectations?I wasn't sure what to expect, being that the blurb was so short, but I thought the first few chapters were pretty hot. I immediately liked the main male character, even if I felt like the girl he calls 'kitten' a tad bit annoying. I'm into the story though.

3) What about the plot? Does it pull you in? Or did you have to force yourself to read the book?The story moves quickly and I like that about it. Often times, that makes a story easier to follow and easier to read and I don't feel as though it drags. The only drawback is when it moves too fast to establish the characters properly.

4) Do the characters seem real and believable?Yes. The power exchange between the two characters is one of the most intriguing aspects of their relationship. You can tell Donovan is a more dominant character from the beginning and I think their personalities are creative.

5) How was the pacing of the chapters?The chapters move quickly which can be a good thing so long as the story doesn't move too fast that the reader is lost in the plot.

6) How was the description of the chapters?Character description is good. I feel like I'm able to picture a scene when the author describes the colors and types of clothing a character is wearing. I also think their use of actions like 'crossing legs' and 'smoothing down the fabric of a dress' makes the interactions more realistic.

7) Describe what you like and dislike about the writer's style.One of the things I disliked about the writer's style was the telling and not showing. Rather saying that heather felt "girlish and unsophisticated" try to have her subconsciously tug at the hem of her skirt nervously or something. An action that lets us know she's uncomfortable with her appearance/clothing. I do like the sexy dialogue between the characters. It's one of my favorite parts. Especially the scene where Donovan catches her reading the risqué article about Penises.

8) Would you read more of the author's work?Sure. So far, I like the author's ability to create sexy banter between two characters and interactions that build the tension.

9) Strongest Writing Trait: Dialogue.Weakest Writing Trait: writing is underdeveloped at times.

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