Reviewer: Natalieemm15

Comments: 1) What did you think the book was about?

I am on chapter seven so far in the book and from what I've read it's about Hannah Cupid. She's a girl who doesn't do relationships because she witnessed her parents crash and burn and she experienced a disaster of a relationship on her own when thirty seven year old Oscar, used her to get close to her father. Since then, she only partakes in one night hook ups and does not do repeat engagements. One night at a club, she meets Tariq Mael Masoof, though she isn't aware of who he is at first and they have sex against a tree. After their encounter, Hannah leaves him in this park and goes about her business. However, the very next day, Hannah discovers that her one night stand is her best friend's fiancé's friend.

2) Did you feel the book fulfilled your expectations?

I had no expectations going into this book, but I was incredibly surprised to find that I love the main characters. Hannah is charming and hilarious and she has a sharp wit and no filter. Her bold personality is the star of the book and although I like Tariq's character as well, I find Hannah's personality more intriguing.

3) What about the plot? Does it pull you in? Or did you have to force yourself to read the book?

So far, the plot does pull me in. After discovering that the one nightstand from the park and Tariq are the same man, I wasn't surprised that Hannah decided to take him to bed a second time. I am excited to continue reading and see what happens with their relationship.

4) Do the characters seem real and believable?

Yes! I personally think that Hannah is the most developed character in the entire story. I like Tariq, but he almost seems dry in comparison to Hannah (Keep in mind, I've had seven whole chapters to get to know Hannah, but only a couple with Tariq in them.) I like that she's different from a lot of other characters. In an age where popular fiction characters toe the line between the saint and the sinner, Hannah is unapologetically promiscuous and takes ownership of her sexuality in a way that isn't dangerous or reckless. She may not be ready for a relationship, but I don't think that she's trying to overcompensate for a lack of anything, by how she chooses to conduct her sex life.

In other words... She's the best.

5) How was the pacing of the chapters?

I enjoyed the chapters because they didn't seem to cut off at weird parts, nor did it feel like they left off on awkwardly dramatic cliffhangers. It was well organized and the third person viewpoint did not jump from character to character randomly, I could discern when the perspectives changed and I love when authors put care into that aspect.

6) How was the description of the chapters?

No complaints about the description. It doesn't drag, but it isn't sparse either. I like that the sexual encounters are planned out and well written. As a personal nitpick, I like when characters are more vocal, but again, I realize that's not everyone's thing.

7) Describe what you like and dislike about the writer's style.

I LOVE THE WRITER'S STYLE. Because of the way Kimberly writes, although the book is written in third person, it almost feels like first person because of how much we get to see of Hannah's perspective. I would like more of this with Tariq as well, but for Hannah's character, I feel like I already know her.

8) Would you read more of the author's work?

Yes, I definitely would. I noticed that this is book 2 of a series, so I'll have to check out book one, even though I'm sort of reading these out of order.

9) Strongest Writing Trait:

Character development, setting description, creativity, writing style, vocabulary, HUMOR, relatability, and the diversity of the characters! Characters are well rounded, cultured, different, and... flavorful (That's the only way I can describe it).

Weakest Writing Trait:

Few grammar mistakes, some strange sentence wording.

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Reviewer: Capri5211

Comments: 1) I love the book title and thought the main character's full name was such a clever choice being that she really isn't looking for love but rather wants casual encounters with no strings attached. I'm excited to see where the relationship between Hannah and Tariq goes!

2) The book most definitely met my expectations! I am only to chapter 4 right now, but plan to continue the rest!

3) From the beginning I was hooked! This is such a unique story line and it's not often that I've read a book with such a strong female lead.

4) The characters were very believable! I love the friendship between Hannah and Mikayla. Their differences compliment each other so well and I can see traits of Mikayla in myself for sure! You have a great way of portraying the different personalities between them!

5) I thought the pacing was very well done! You give the reader plenty without overdoing it! Your book is absolutely a page turner!

6) From the beginning, you provide the reader with beautiful imagery and descriptions of both the characters and scenes. I love the descriptive language you use in showing us what the characters look like as well as where they are. I didn't have to work hard to imagine what was going on. You created such a beautiful world for your readers to enjoy. Great job!

7) I love your writing style! I thought you did a fabulous job of "showing" vs "telling" in your work. The dialogue between characters was great! Keep it up with your beautiful descriptive scenes!

8) I would absolutely read more of this author's work and plan to finish this story ASAP!

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Reviewer: phoenixryze

Comments: Initially I thought the book was about the god Cupid, silly me! But as I read on, the main character, Hannah's last name 'Cupid' and her take on love is ironic and fun. The book is funny, sexy, and well written. I like the plot. I must say that the writer got me curious enough to check out the first book in the series because she stylishly and subtly incorporated them into this book. And that made me curious to read their story. The characters are relatable. Hannah reminds me of an old friend of mine, only thing is my friend still maintains her single status. The chapters I read were well written. I didn't note any grammatical or spelling errors. They were well paced. Unfortunately, I'm not a connoisseur of 'show not tell' but what I can tell you is that I enjoy the book immensely.

I like the writer's characters and pacing. I like the irony of someone named Cupid who doesn't believe in love. I would read more of the writer's work and check out the first and third books in the series now that I have an inkling of the relationship of the couples in it.

As previously mentioned, I'm not an expert in 'show vs. tell'. All I can tell this writer is that I enjoyed you book, and I hope you keep writing.

I don't like to use words like 'favorite', 'best', 'GOAT', but I'll say this book is in my top one. 😊. Thank you.

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Reviewer: Reading_Mermaid08

Comments: I thought that book was very well written. The descriptions were done well and the writer didn't rush through them. It was an enjoyable read.

Though I am not a fan of instant attraction/love at first sight, I was able to overlook this one. Mostly because Hannah was still standoff-ish toward Tariq. She didn't throw her personality to the wind and fawn all over him, which made it more believable. There was still that magnetism that seemed to overtake them, which I'm not a fan of, I believe in lust at first sight, but not love. I know, I am a cynic. This one leaned more to the lust at first sight, and Tariq appreciated her confidence and mannerisms, and was obviously attracted to her, but wasn't worshipping the ground she walked on, which is refreshing.

The book wasn't something that expected in a good way, it didn't feel clichè and was an enjoyable read. I did notice a few places that were slightly phrased oddly, but I chalked it up to accentes of the characters which is totally understandable since there were several that were of them that were international characters.

The pacing of the book, in my opinion, was very impressive. It wasn't rushed at all and the writer took the time to describe the characters and scenes around them. It made for an easy read and didn't become boring.

I think the writer has done a wonderful job, and I would definitely continue reading this work and other works done by the writer.

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Reviewer: jumping_jiminys

Comments: Chapter 1

Ooooh, child. This was a chapter. So sensual, so sexy and completely dripping with lust. Hannah, such a little minx. Sometimes when I read sexually liberated woman they can come across aggressive or cringe but Hannah despite her forwardness doesn't make her cringe in fact the way you've portrayed her even more sultry.

Chapter 2

I absolutely love Mikayla and Hannah's relationship. Not only does it read so genuine but the way you add action to their dialogue that brings your overall writing to that next level, and more so where it doesn't ruin the pacing.

Chapter 3

Oh, Hannah indeed. What are you doing? I love the way you build tension and then right at the climax, we come to an end. This is one of the things that makes me turn to the next page the need to know what happens next.

Chapter 4

I did guess that Mael and Tariq was the same person, simply because it has been done before. HOWEVER, the way you did it was different. This felt a lot more organic for such a moment, and it could be because I am in love with your writing that I didn't mind this cliche before.

Chapter 5

Oh my, Tariq. He radiates sexiness that I can't get enough of. He's every wattpad CEO, dark and handsome character but times ten. I love him, I want him. This is amazing.

1. I was getting wedding planner, Jennifer Lopex vibes but with XXX in front of it XD.

2. Just like Tariq did for Hannah, this book did for me. Went above and beyond.

3. The story description defiantly hinted at the plot, and by Chapter 5, we were in it. Therefore I know most of the book will draw towards the wedding and parallel with that Hannah and Tariq's relationship.

4. I love all the characters. They are all different, and I love the authenticity of them and how believable they are.

5. Your pacing is excellent. Each chapter has me wanting more. I like that from chapter 1, you could've easily shown the reader the sex scene; however, your time skipped to after which made the park sex scene that much more satisfying.

6. I loved your description and the way you weave it through the dialogue and the pacing without jeopardising each element. It's a fantastic balance.

7. I loved your writing style. It's unique and written in a way that brings you in.

8. I most definitely would read more of the author's work. This is quality work.

9. Usually, I'm this massive fan of showing not telling, but some writing styles pair better with the former and yours is one of them. I feel if you had more showing some aspects would've slowed down the pacing, and actual would've done more harm than good. I know that was one of your weakest traits, but for me personally, you have nothing to be concerned about.

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Reviewer: EllenFairyBlue4

Comments: Cupid's Queue was a easy read to me that I wanted to read the first book. I only read four chapters, but I can easily see myself reading more. I didn't see anything wrong with the story. The characters were realistic and intriguing to read about. I can see the older man in chapter one would be coming back into the story later, but I don't know how he will be incorporated into the story. I love the interaction between Hannah and Mael. You did the club scene nicely. The only problem I had was chapter one. It didn't quite go with the story yet it did go with the story. I don't know I have mixed feelings on it. Overall I enjoyed the story.

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Reviewer: JaszmeneSmith

Comments: When I read the second chapter of the story. I notice that Hannah lived the same lifestyle like any other rich kids lived. No love in their life. It's sad that she had lived her childhood trying to seek her parents approval especially when her first love who only use her for her money and status. But what really confused me was that she was hanging with the hotel clerk. I don't know how to describe this but I feel like there's gonna be a love triangle in the story.

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Reviewer: PixieStormcrow

Comments: I'll start off by saying I thoroughly enjoyed not only the female MC but also in particular, the dynamic she has with the other characters. There're some beautiful illustrations of friendships and relationship dynamics through their interactions, in particular, Hannah's and Mik's but also in how Hannah relates to Damien.

The first two chapters were actually perhaps what I struggled with the most in terms of getting into the story. The first chapter, in particular, felt heavy with telling instead of showing. I understand a need to set the stage but don't feel that you need to tell the audience everything about the character from the get-go. The main instance I saw of this was where it starts with "She loved but did not believe in..." and the following 4 paragraphs. I rather see her attitude come out more in context later rather than being told that was her attitude. Even if it's just more direct internal thoughts would have helped in that regard. In addition, I'd rather see how successful her life is rather than being told that again.

I found the second chapter to also have some of the same problems. In fact, there are some places where the narration feels repetitive, especially with the dialogue following right after. The conversation between Mik and Hannah is revealing, character building and very strong. Let it stand and breathe on its own.

There are a few more minor points from a technical perspective. I've noticed a lot of what's called "independent body parts", that is body parts that seem to move on their own. For example, eyes don't give pointed stares, people do with their eyes. I've included a link to an article that might help with that aspect. https://writersinthestorm.wordpress.com/2014/05/19/eyes-windows-into-a-characters-soul/amp/

In addition, some of the writing can be tightened to take out some of the sensory words like smell or feel. One small example of this is "he made her feel agitated" can just be changed to "he agitated her". This will make your writing a lot more active.

All said, these are fairly minor details. The story is a sound one and by chapter 3, I was definitely drawn in and not wanting to stop reading. Given I had only had the opportunity to read six chapters, I expect things will ramp up with more twists and turns as the story progresses. Overall, the story is off to a very strong premise and its sexually uninhibited and unabashedly unapologetic female lead is a refreshing change that differentiates this from many other books.

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Reviewer: ReggaeGirl4

Comments: I must say I feel really bad about it, but I did not get into the story. The reason I feel bad is, that it is a solid work. I enjoyed the writing style itself, the grammer was good, there is absolutely nothing wrong with this book. That's why I would like to start off by saying: Yes, I would absolutely read more from this author! Great work, really! But - I can't change the fact that the storyline didn't draw me in. I simply didn't sympathize with the character of Hannah just like I can't relate to every real person in real life, whereas I must say that I found the relationship between Hannah and Mikayla real, believable and yes - relatable. Like I said - it's a work of quality and the author obviously put work and effort into it. A lot of both that is. I think the authors strength is clearly the great flow. There are no gaps, she clearly knows how to tell a story. The part with the weakness is less simple. It's not the writers fault, that I can't get in. Other than that I thought the club scene in chapter 3 was very intriguing and erotic, even though I can't put myself into Hannahs position of leaving with a guy immediately after just having met him for the first time (but that only means I'm boring lol). However, their flirting and physical contact were super hot and raised my anticipation, and the sex scene was crazy good and sizzling as well. Except maybe for the part where he exclaims "This is insane" and she replies "very much so". This small sentence he said, expressed his arousal so well and then she gives an in my opinion robotic reply that doesn't make her seem very aroused. Aside from that, I liked the fact that I forgot about protection too. Strange statement - I know. But I mean in the positive sense because the love scene was building and their hunger for each other increasing, that I read on and on and when the topic came up I was like: omg right, they didn't use protection. You could say the well painted love scene kind of distracted me. I would like to close my review by saying you deserve many positive reviews for your work!

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Reviewer: Selly1010

Comments: 1. What do you think the book was about?

In the first read the title, I thought about the love matching. But it changes after reading the blurb and first chapter, that it is all about FC's conquered.

2. Plot

Good plot. Good pacing. I really enjoy the book. Each paragraph of it. Honestly, it is one of the books that I will read for my learning in writing.

3. Character

Hannah is the woman who has a bad past in her love life who changed her about her view in the relationship. I read some stories that have the same stake. The character's way naturally and the interaction is so real. I love the relationship between Hannah and Miks.

4. How the pacing?

The pacing is going so naturally. I never skip reading the rest because it's flow naturally and engaging.

5. Description

As informed in the writer's bio that she is an English speaker. It was shown int he book. I learned a lot about vocabulary. A good description of using a lot of showing than telling - term.

I will read more about the work of the writer because I thought it's good for me about writing.

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Reviewer: Bella1617

Comments: So, I've only read four chapters (damn having deadlines with my publisher closing in) but I am absolutely hooked on this story. I love the dynamic between the characters and the fact that Hannah hooked up with Miles and it turned out to be Tariq was just awesome. And the way you had them react was perfect. Hannah's dead stare and comments of surprise just worked so well. Your character's interactions are amazing and your dialogue flows perfectly. I love the dynamic between Hannah, Mikayla and Damien. Especially the "sibling-squabble" thing. You've humanised your characters perfectly. The show versus tell thing is your weakest trait as you've said, but not as bad as you might think. I've seen a lot more of it than this. Maybe with the part about Oscar don't write an explanation about it, but maybe have Hannah think about it, or her and Mikayla talk about it and how it's affected her. If that's in a later part then just stick to the dialogue in chapter two about Hannah saying she has issues. A lot of that can either be done as an internal monologue through the character's thoughts or through them talking about it. Or even just a small line mentioning that there has been issues. That leaves it open for further explanation down the line. The only other thing is when writing third person it is so easy to slip between character views. If you're writing as Hannah, just write about her perceptions. Anything coming from other characters is her assuming or guessing, or observing what they're doing or thinking. It keeps the readers curious what everyone else is thinking too. Overall though, I love the flow and the steamy scenes are great. I felt a bit hot reading some of them and your character drama is brilliant. Once I have more time I am definitely going to keep reading Cupid's Cue. I'm curious to find out what accident Mikayla had, to see where things go between Hannah and Tariq and to find out if the wedding goes well, so you're definitely a great storyteller. Awesome work.

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Reviewer: _rumandcocacola

Comments: I was pulled into Cupid's Queue when I started reading it, mainly because I did think the author had a genuinely strong writing style. The character descriptions are wonderful and the conversations between Hannah and Mikaela were hilarious and realistic. You can tell with the way they banter/joke with one another that they've been friends for a really long time.

The author also embedded a lot of cultural elements that ties to her own heritage when it came to Mikaela's background which I thought was a nice touch. It's always great when authors use their own knowledge/influences in their work.

The title drop into the story was also genius and I loved it! Such a clever title for this book.

But the further I read the less invested I became. There was so much perspective changing in the story it was very difficult for me to connect with the characters, even Hannah, who is supposed to be our lead. Every time the writing dug further into her emotions, it suddenly shifted to someone else. I felt like it took away from an otherwise well written novel.

The circumstance in which Tariq and Hannah is overdone. I feel like I've seen this plot in so many movies and shows that when Tariq went from a night stand to being Damien's friend I was just like, Oh how convenient. I get that this allowed the main conflict to pedal forward. I just would have liked for it to be done in a less cliche way.

There were also some parts where there was too much telling vs showing. In the first chapter the conversation between Hannah and Mr. Rochard is summarized pretty briefly instead of actually being played out. We also know her father was barely home when she was growing up but how did his absence affect her? So much of what these characters are feeling emotionally is seldom brought up. It's like we're only going through the motions.

I also wasn't the biggest fan of Hannah. She doesn't have much depth as a person and it was hard to find her likeable because of it. I read the first six chapters and ninety percent of her personality is being sexually aggressive. Even when she talks to Mikaela she's vulgar; all she thinks about is sex and taking sexual power away from men. I don't mind promiscuous characters but if that's all they are, they read as two dimensional and I just don't care for them. I would suggest to expand more on her past early on and pull out more of her vulnerabilities and imperfections. Is there any point in the beginning where she's feeling anxious? Down on herself? Stressing about the wedding?

The story has potential. The structure is there. The characters just need to be fleshed out more than they are right now. I also recommend limiting the POV changes. If the author would still like to keep this story omniscient, I think she should avoid jumping back and forth between characters every other paragraph.

I wish the author the best of luck!!

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Reviewer: Taraskeskro

Comments: So, what could we say about Hannah? The girl is hot, and she knows it, straight forward. I had struggle to deal with her ego at first but clearly there is more of her.

The book itself is a fun read and I love that it feels believable. I could totally see the characters evolved in this world. The use of local slang, the taste and culture things are really flying me to the Caribbeans. But I admit at first it felt too much and the location is rubbed on our face. But that could totally be me.

And I love for a fact that for once that some characters aren't in their twenties, young and beautiful.

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Reviewer: Daenerys1417

Comments: 1. How many chapters did you read? Four

2. What did you think the book was about? From the blurb, it seems to be about a young woman who loves them and leaves them; someone who is very comfortable with her sexuality. I get the sense that she will finally meet someone whom she's willing to settle down for. I noticed that this book is part of a series but I'm happy that it's a standalone read.

3. Did you feel that the book fulfilled your expectations? From the four chapters I read, the book definitely met my expectations. The very first chapter gives good insight into Hannah's penchant for having one-time sexual encounters with handsome men and then leaving them wanting as she has no interest in commitment or relationships. It's also clear that her encounter with Tariq is different from the others and may cause her to change her mind about giving up on love.

4. What about the plot? I loved how the opening scene jumped right into the typical encounter that Hannah has with handsome (usually older) men. Although the sex scenes are hot, there is also the underlying plot with Hannah running around town planning her best friend's wedding. While I did guess that "Miles" from the club was likely Tariq, it was still a great set-up. Hannah walked away thinking it was just one of her many one-night stands and now she has to deal with the fact that she's going to be seeing a lot more of this man from now on. It will be interesting to see how she deals with it and whether feelings will develop.

5. Do the characters seem real and believable? Yes. Great characterization of Hannah. You gave just enough background to make it clear that she's the product of a loveless marriage full of infidelity which explains her own reluctance towards commitment. The backstory with Oscar taking advantage of her also further explains her refusal to have a serious relationship with anyone. It's clear that despite her sassy attitude, perhaps deep down she has some issues she needs to work through to understand why she feels she is damaged and will never have the sort of love that Mikayla has. I also really enjoyed Hannah and Mikayla's friendship, it felt natural with the teasing and joking and also just genuine love concern for one another. Weaving in Mikayla's Trinidad and Tobago culture with the food and her manner of talking also made her character seem very real and believable.

6. How was the pacing of the chapters you read? The pacing was good. The chapters were a good length and kept me interested in wanting to read more.

7. How was the description of the chapters you read? the description of the surroundings as well as the appearance of the characters was good. Although you had a "Description" chapter with pictures of Hannah and Tariq, I don't think it was necessary as it could have been left up to the reader's imagination simply based on what you've already written. Additionally, the smut scenes were hot with good descriptive language that leaves the reader wanting more.

8. Describe what you liked or disliked about the writer's style? Your descriptive language was great and really helped me dive into the story. I wondered, however, if you were writing in 3rd person limited or 3rd person omniscient because, although Hannah's thoughts and feelings were the focus, sometimes the story would jump to the thoughts and feelings of other characters without a clear break in the story. For instance, in the restaurant, Hannah would have no way of knowing that Mr. Rochford "wanted to take her on the table as soon as he saw her", or when she's talking with her friend, she wouldn't know that "Mikayla felt her cheeks heat up in a bit of slight embarrassment." If 3rd person limited was the intent, I would just be mindful of making sure that only one character's thoughts and feelings are known to the reader and everyone else is simply observed by that character. The spelling and grammar were good, for the most part, and your writing style was also very relatable with a good sense of humor in some instances that made it fun to read.

9. Would you read more of the author's work? Yes.

10. Comment on their strongest and weakest writing trait along with their help request and give overall thoughts. You didn't list a strongest writing trait, but I feel, overall, you are a strong writer who excels in many areas of writing. You have an interesting storyline that pulls the reader in, strong language and descriptions, steamy hot smut, and realistic characters that the reader can relate to. Good job and this is definitely a story I can see myself reading all the way through and also reading Book 1 of the series to get the background.

I think you did a good job balancing showing and telling. Although we know the story seems to be heading towards Hannah and Tariq getting together, you took time to explain Hannah's backstory which raises the stakes on whether or not she'll be willing to actually commit to a man. Also, I liked the twist where they met beforehand and only found out who the other was later at Mikayla and Damien's. I had a great experience reading this book and really don't have much to say in terms of improving other than just tweaking the spelling/grammar slightly. Great job and thanks for sharing.

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Reviewer: JamesEnd49

Comments: Dear KTM:

I must say I enjoyed the read. You did a nice job of leading me in. Introducing the characters. I think it would be nice to have more background to them. Some way of showing their natures. For Example, that something is off with Hanna. Curious about how you selected your character's names. I find that challenging. I enjoyed your intro, cover art and character portrayals. Being new to WP, I am not used to that with my reading. I'm not sure if that helps or hinders. I do like to use my imagination, and to have some posted figure somewhat blocks my creativity. I would like to also have some development of Tariq. Seems like there is a lot of potential there.

I read through chapter eight and enjoyed the read. I may read more, but joining the group late, I am behind, sorry. I felt that you hit a hot/high level of eroticism. I like that, but feel it would be more powerful with greater character development. I did wonder at the back story of the billionaire, maybe that is further in the book? Might move that forward. Things that bothered me:

1. I am doubtful that I cute, kind, hunky billionaire exist, let alone that he's available. That aspect could use some work, or is that just standard chicklit assumptions? Does he have to be a billionaire? Seems cliché, and tends to turn off the male set of readers.

2. How did the Tariq and Damien come together, how old are they? Business partners, war buddies, other?

3. How did Mic and Hanna end up end up friends? Seems that they are too opposites?

4. I liked the hook up between Tariq (Miles) and Hanna. But that park seems a bit too open. Can't imagine a woman being comfortable enough to orgasm in that setting.

5. Seemed like you wanted to build the drama and tension at the dinner party and the night encounter. I wanted H to shut Tariq down.

6. The opening scene was especially strong, but then pointless? Was this just to show that Hanna owns her sexuality and is reckless? This built up a flow and introduced the characters. I felt like there are things that you started that didn't develop. Good stuff to fill out your story.

Thanks for the fun read, James

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