#Review 12
Author: gorgeousjourney
Title: Finally found the one.
Title : The title of your book is amazing. I don't have anything against it because it totally relates with your story.
Cover : Whoever designed your cover is a keeper (Lol) It's amazing, but I will like you change the background picture. My reason being that this is the second or third time I am seeing that picture as someone's cover.
Everyone knows that a cover supposed to be unique and one of a kind.
Description: The only thing I have to say is that it's hooking enough.
GENERAL ANALYSIS
*You need to work on your dialogue. Everything was being crammed into one place.
*Your paragraphing was a bit off. There weren't there when they supposed to be.
*Tenses construction: One part you said 'frightened' rather than 'frighten' which was supposed to be used per sentence contest.
This amongst so many others.
* It was more of telling rather than showing. This is why I complained about your dialogue. You didn't let your characters act it out, rather you kept telling your readers their actions.
ADVICE
You already have an amazing plot and storyline. All I recommend is editing, editing and editing. Although no one's first draft is a winner, but since you are putting this book out for people to read you may want to edit it a bit. Grammar errors is a huge turn-off for readers.
I wish you good luck on your writing journey.
I give your book a 4/5 because of your grammar.
I definitely recommend because I finished the book and found it an amazing read.
Do edit a bit as soon as possible. I understand you are not a native speaker of English, but try your best.
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Love, Emma😘
Remember to stay Fabulous😉
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