Story: The hitter's hit list
Author: imaginator33
Chapters read: 5

The cover isn't something I liked. The font, the backdrop, and the story did not go well together. That is one thing I would ask you to change.
Coming to the description, it was quite informative. The negative point of the description was that it had a had a big extract from the story. The description or the blurb is something what gives the reader an essence of the story they're going to read without exposing much to them.

I believe such a lengthy passage from the story in the description is not a good idea. It should be a compressed version of what you want the readers to know before they dive into your story with as much appetite that would help them to cherish the whole story happily.

The plot was interesting, a cliche action romance yet nicely created.

The beginning itself had me hitched. The way you did not reveal the character at its appearance was very intellectual of you. The primary character, ie, the hitter is a potential one who is described very vividly without even revealing his identity in the first half. This was a plus point.

The character of Jasmine was sweet and subtle, completely a recurring character. She is shown to have a pretty perfect life with her boyfriend and family. The part written as Jasmine's POV has been well executed.

I have noticed some major grammatical mistakes here and there, for instance, you have misplaced the comma sign in most cases. The quotation isn't properly used.

Even though the dialogue delivery was perfect, the grammatical mistakes makes them look bad.

Overall, I liked the story with some reservations. I believe you can further develop your writing techniques and we would be able to see a far better version of this book when you go through a thorough revision.

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And I mark you
7/10