Dangerous Billionaire by @PrincessBlu06

Since you sent me chapter 4 and I already corrected it for you, I skipped that one as I already know what happened.

Comma splices were big. You need to spearate two sentences with either a full stop or a semi-colon but never a comma.

You need a space before and after a dash.

Of/off issue but only one so that was OK.

Good use of italics for the flashback. It really fit well and helped the reader learn a lot more about Zafrina as well as Blake.

You used , and too much.

Basic rules of grammar apply to everything. Even. One. Word. Sentences.

Commas before names.

Just to say that this was brilliant! It's really interesting and yes, a little on the cheesy, cliché side, but your characters are all brilliant and your descriptions are en pointe.

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